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Abandoned Darkness Reigns Supreme by Dark Syaoran - M

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by Dark Syaoran, Dec 27, 2005.

  1. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    [spoiler:ad37738772]“Wouldn’t she be all crusty down below after such a long time without a shower?” Harry asked, peering around his cell bars at David who was across from Narcissa but next to Bellatrix. The resulting silence was deafening. “Did I say something wrong?” [/spoiler:ad37738772]

    :lol: Oh, sweet pricelessness....

    Nice...The end of the chapter made a tingle run down my spine... :lol: I can't wait for another update. even if I'd prefer a Here I Come update.
     
  2. Lord Osiris

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    All i got for you is...FUCK YEAH! It's sad that the amount of authors pouring quality like this out is getting scarcer due to the slow erattercation of our kind by the impurest's on FF.Nuts. Anyway i like it shame it took so long to get him out but then better late then never they say. I take it Bella is gonna be running with Harry now? or is she gonna be crawling back to Riddle? Spy maybe? Would i be mistaken in assuming Harry is going to start building a Cult following? or just go it on his own?
     
  3. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    I'm not sure whats happening with Bellatrix quite yet. No one went with him so he's on his own right now, the others have either escaped on their own or didnt get very far and were thrown back in their cells. Havnt worked out who should get away and who didnt.

    Luna will be playing a big-ish part later on. David and Byron might, depends really.

    I've got this idea that Bellatrix really likes him and even goes as far as to become a spy for him, thinking he'll like her back if she does. It's quite hard turning her on Voldemort though so it might not happen.

    Greyback he doesnt know so he didnt really give a shit about him. Since he's a Death Eater he decided to leave him there. Bellatrix is one but he's been talking to her for three years... he got a little soft. Lucius was in another part of the prison and Harry didnt feel like making the trip over just to release him, lol. He doesnt like him anyhow... I like Lucius though if he's written correctly, his cane rocks! :D

    I think I'm doing okay with the updates... sure it might have been kinda long but I did write another chapter to Here I Come plus that weird One-Shot I did...
     
  4. Xiph0

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    Out of all the DLP.net authors I check for updates..[ Ip's The Hammer Falls, Sera's, Midknights, Riddlers ]

    Only you and Mrridler update...so yah, good on the updates for sure.
     
  5. DGD

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    Nice chapter.
     
  6. ip82

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    This story is really turning out fine. I'm still not sure how crazy your Harry exactly is - at times, he's like your standard Dark!Harry and at others, he seems like a sadistic fuck. Whatever he turns out to be, I'm eager to see how this story develops further.

    Oh yes, I'm not sure how wise is introducing Luna as Harry's friend. Honestly, she just don't fit in the role you made for her - like you said she hardly knew Harry outside the DA and she seems just like such a non-violent person. Remember, she'd been putting up with the abuse from her dormmates for years without retaliating - not exactly the kind of person to torture whomever displeases her (but then again, it's always the quiet ones... :)).
     
  7. SlytherinDamian

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    I'm not too keen on Luna either, but it beats using Ginny... I would've just had him stick with Bellatrix myself. Good chapter though, no over the top guard abuse is a plus.
     
  8. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    I think even Luna would be violent if her father was tortured and killed in front of her. How her part plays is still unknown though I know she'll be doing something, whether its housing him while he's in England or whatever. Who would really suspect Harry living with Luna Lovegood? NO ONE!

    In a way, Harry is probably her best friend even with Ginny around. Wanting to see him on birthdays doesnt sound too bad... and the quiet ones they always are! :p (They havnt talked all that much yet him being her best friend in her eyes just shows how lonely she really is)

    You'll see his personality change quite a bit, like he's two people. Its more fun that way! :D

    Also, the hut-on-the-rock from the first book will make an appearance! w00t!
     
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    ^_^ I love the hut-on-the-rock! *cheers*
     
  10. IndoGhost

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    Spilt personality...nice.
     
  11. ChuckDaTruck

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    This was PERFECT!!! I honestly couldn't ask you to change ANYTHING in this story. I was cheering by the end actually. I LOVED that Harry ain't going back to England to begin Hunting Voldemort (he vanishes!! SWEET!)

    2 questions. 1.) WHY did VOldemort open the connection? Harry was no threat to him in prison. Why would he do this? If you could explain that, I would appreciate it.

    2.) Does Harry have control over his powers yet? And what is going to be the long-term effects of all Harry's meditation? Now that he knows what is power feels and looks like, can he call it up? (maybe he CAN call it up now, but it takes him awhile, and he has to improve. Like now he has to learn how to re-create this state.) How long can Harry maintain this state also?

    GENIUS!!! UPDATE SOON!!!

    (P.S. this is my favorite active story I think)
     
  12. Dark Syaoran

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    Voldemort hates Harry. He wants to make Harry's life a living hell. Opening the link did that for almost a full year, why he didnt open it before hand was simple. He was scared of what happened in the Ministry of Magic would happen again. This is canon Half-Blood Prince. He shut the link after that and it remained closed during book six. I guess Harry hurt him too much with his 'love' for Sirius. After a few years of Harry sitting in a cell he thought that maybe he could risk it, that maybe Harry had no 'love' left. He didnt know exactly what triggered his 'powers' since no one has seen it apart from Order members and Bella, so he wasnt aware that getting him totally pissed would do.

    Voldemort would have taken the prison already if it werent for the unspeakables setting up the dementor ward. He would have either killed Harry or tried to turn him. Since he couldnt do this, he decided to mentally scar him since he couldnt do anything else. When it comes to Harry Potter, Voldemort's ego gets the best of him sometimes.

    He'll never fully control those powers, he'll only pick up a few things from it. One being able to fight the effects of certain magic. Say, if he was hit by a stunner, he'll be able to use his magic to fight off the effects, maybe channel it into himself. I've seen this in stories but not explained, he just does it.

    Another is his wandless magic but nothing big. Just able to levitate items, summon and banish things, maybe 'lumos' but thats about it. Unless he goes psycho, wandless magic doesnt play that big of a part.

    How long Harry can control this state? As long as he's pissed off. As soon as he mellows out, it'll go away and he'll feel pretty drained. It would be wise for him not to use too much magic after that.

    The meditation will help his Occlumency for one. It will also probably help centre his magic, giving him more control. I'm trying to change Occlumency a bit in this. Instead of shields like normal, it will be just clearing your mind, so they will be able to enter but they cant see shit all. The closest things that come to mental shields are what Harry and Voldemort can use to block the link and they can only do that to each other if they are using the link instead of eye contact.

    Anyway, reading this has got me pumped for some writing.
     
  13. Dark Syaoran

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    Another teaser... heh. I hope you enjoy it... it only took 10 minutes.
     
  14. MrMucus

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    Most interesting story i've read in a long time keep up the good work
     
  15. Dr_Jos

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    I simply love it
     
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    Nice, now get back to work!
     
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    *snort* DGD, your banner is distracting. *pouts* Seriously though, this chibi-Naru is creeping me out. <_< He has a toad, a TOAD! on his head.

    (To not be accused of being off topic...) I read the story again (which happens since I have nothing new to read.) and I have to say I LOVE IT EVEN MORE! ... Have any clue when the next one will be up? I know I sound like an annoying, insatiable fan, but... perhaps I am?
     
  18. ChuckDaTruck

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    THis is arguably the best story currently being written (WITH REGULAR UPDATES!!!) ANyway, I really like it and I hope you update soon. I like Harry in Oslo. What happened to Bellatrix and some of the others. I imagine that Because Harry didn't escort them (as Voldemort did in 5 in my opinion.) that they were recaptured, yes?


    What happened to Harry's wand? Surely they didn't destroy it did they? (Sirius had his wand destroyed, Hagrid's was snapped, but I believe Morfin Gaunt got his back after his 6 months in Azkaban.) It is the only brother to Voldemort's. Finally, has Harry learned any new tricks? Does he have better control? Has he been learning magic, or hiding in the muggle world?

    According to JKR a wizard can only have one wand "choose him" in a lifetime. While he can use other wands, none will work as well. A wand either works for you or it doesn't. (Hence why Voldemort uses the same wand he used as a student. Because its HIS wand.) Considering that, has Harry gotten a new wand (perhaps less effective, although JK's opinion hasn't stopped other authors from creating SUPER WANDS)

    UPDATE SOON!!!
     
  19. Lord Osiris

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    Wow still as good as ever! I hope your able to get the full chapter up soon, though im seriously impressed with what you've been able to do. Bravo!
     
  20. Dark Syaoran

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    Half the chapter has already been written. I dont know why but I was in the writing mood this morning a wrote quite a bit.

    Bellatrix and Narcissa didnt get out until Voldemort attacked the prison. I'm not sure where the other two have gone off too. Harry might meet them again on his travels around the world.

    His wand hasnt been snapped, either Dumbledore or the Minister has it. Not sure yet. He has a new wand right now, it's explained in the new bit I've written but havnt posted. His magic will never flow as well with it as his other but he can still do pretty much anything with it. Just that it doesnt feel quite right.

    He's hiding in both worlds really. Using knowledge of both worlds to his advantage.
     
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