Perhaps there won't be complaints against Bella for her OOC-ness, if she go into a battle charging like a maniac and gloating her opponents like crazy. While fighting for the good guys that is. Establish she is the "Good but not Nice" or "Anti-heroic" type of character.

 

God please NO!!!!

 

Because the author has done a decent job with making it believable, and that is the end of it.

Bellatrix in this fic admits to knowing a lot of Dark Arts, likes to drink to drown her sorrows, and spends most of her free time gutting a large snake. She's chosen what she thinks is the best path for herself. I wouldn't call Bellatrix 'nice' in this story, but she's not a crazy bitch. Nothing has happened yet to turn her into one, but I wouldn't call her normal either.

Bellatrix in the books was around 30 years old when she got convicted to Azkaban, thats twelve years older than what Bellatrix is now. This Bellatrix has run from Voldemort, run from her family, and run from marriage with Lestrange, and those are the kinds of things that would have destabilized her more, but they don't happen.

Even when Tom Riddle was in school, he was mostly sane even after splitting his own soul. But in this story, Bellatrix hasn't done anything that would make her loopy that we know of, and from everything we have read, Harry has saved her from that path.

 

Exactly When I am reading this story I think Harry as a calming influence for Bella. She looks up to him. Also at the end of last chapter we see How strongly she feels about being storng. Even her kissing Harry had an ulterior motive and wasn't some mushy crap making it more belivable

If Harry was any thing like voldemort I can see Bella turning to pysico we all know and love just as Harry's bitch instead of Voldemort's.

 

First of all, it's an AU. Lot's of shit in the story doesn't fit with canon.

Secondly, who the fuck cares what Rowling "thinks" of Bellatrix's character. Rowling's thoughts and feelings aren't canon. And Bellatrix's background is almost completely a blank slate in canon. You can absolutely reconcile the Bellatrix from this story with the Bellatrix from canon if different events had happened. You don't like that this interpretation of her character. We get it. Doesn't make it any less legitimate. Move on.

And for the love of god stop littering your arguments with TVTropeisms.

 

To be honest, I would have liked to see a Bella a little more like her elder version. These are two entirely different people.

BUT, the in-verse reason for Bella being rational is sufficient for me to enjoy most of this fic. Sometimes the writing takes a dive, but other than that all good.

Now, if I was writing it, Bella would definitely be a little unhinged. But that's me, and everyone knows I like crazy bitches.

 

Bella being somewhat unhinged might have added an extra 'challenge' for Harry / twist to the story. Ah well.

 

Yeah, I agree. When I look back on the story so far it's very hard to see Bella as her own character. I get that she's more or less a foil for Harry but that leaves some part of her fairly unexplored. Recently that has been changing, which is good.

I recall a line from one of the last chapters where Harry muses that she's closer to him than Hermione and Ron had ever been; that seemed odd, given that he operated on pretty much full disclosure with those two, which he doesn't with Bella. Sometimes the writers really throw out inconsistent crap like that. Other times they are brilliant with the political maneuverings, etc.

 

The amount of information you trust someone with is not really the only way to determine the "ranking" of your friends. Baring the obvious 'need to know' basis of certain lines of work, Harry was younger, more naïve, and, all-in-all, lived in pretty exciting times at Hogwarts. Here we have a more jaded and mature version of Harry, wich has/wish to guard his secrets a little more closely.

So it doesn't really shock me, as it is.

 

I believe the auther overall has done a good job, but find certain characters over the top. Like Lily Evans for example. Her character pretty seemed like a Hermione with red hair. I feel as if she was way too naive and gullible.

I enjoy Bellatrix as well as Harry's characters. I haven't read the first chapter in awhile, but I dont think the auther ever explained in detail why Bellatrix was in the cell with Harry.
Am I right or wrong in that regard, because I'm incredibly curious about it.

 

Seems pretty canon to me, it's not like she's regurgitating facts at anything that moves.

I think it's mentioned somewhere that she had betrayed Voldemort for some reason or something. In chapter one. If it hasn't been said, though, I doubt it ever will be.

A new chapter is up, I enjoyed it. Only one appearance of the image projection spell, so the author seems to be toning it down.

 

Stylistically the new chapter sucked - there was a lot of incapable use of adjectives and adverbs, and other minor problems.

Apart from that, however, I liked how most everything fell out. This was definitely better than the last chapter.

 

It's the typical see-saw we have in this fic. One author is definitely better than the other, you can always tell by the execution of the chapter.

Frankly I thought this was fairly poor. Only thing I enjoyed was Bellatrix continuing to pursue Harry as a trophy to be transacted for, and Harry looking at the romantic angles.

 

This story would be much more interesting on many levels if you were writing it. Of course we'd still be on chapter 4

 

The author's continued bungling of Harry's side in the war is starting to bother me, he spends all his time loitering in a bar, hoping for a lowly death eater to approach him with a job, presumeably so he can set a trap or squeeze aforementioned death eater for information. Now for the second time in a row he stumbles on a golden opportunity and for some reason just drops it, Rodolphus happened upon him in the ruins and Harry does his best to take him alive, and then he when he has the upper hand he just tosses fiendfyre at him and runs like a bitch. This shit isn't computing at all.

Either do your best to take them alive and torture them for info or just outright murder them, this pussyfooting around will not do at all. Harry seems to go out of his way in fighting this war by fighting as little as possible. When the hell is he gonna man the fuck up and start whittling away at Voldemort's forces and put him off-balance? Maybe he'd have a harder time recruiting followers if those he had seemed to just disappear at inconvenient times. It seems all Harry's doing is reacting to what everyone else does while protecting his virtue from Bellatrix.

 

By far, the biggest inconsistency so far was trying to kill Rodolphus. Also, my biggest problem with this particular chapter was Harry's continuing confusion concerning Bella. As another quirk of a story being written by two different authors, his feelings for her change with every chapter, following a pattern. One author seems to be in love with the idea of a romantic relation between the two, while the other seems to want to keep them apart through sheer lack of commitment/conviction on Harry's part.

This is really starting to bug me.

 

Yeah the Rudolphus thing just doesn't make any sense. He's spent days sitting in a pub waiting for a Death Eater to seek him out. He then stumbles across one in the ruins of Malfoy Manor. He's kicking his ass with little apparent effort and then suddenly decides fuck that Imma throw some Fiendfyre and run. It just doesn't compute. Not only are their clear inconsistencies between the different authors, there's inconsistencies just within single chapters.

It's immensely frustrating.

 

*sigh*

We need a DLPer to take this up. Has potential but I'm at the point of giving this up because with every new chapter I feel like it's a crapshoot of quality or just wtf.

 

I always wanted to write a Harry/Bella time-travel story. There's just the question of how AU to make it... as far as Harry before he goes back in time...