Title: Discovery
Author: Potteraholic
Rating: M
Genre: Drama/Humor
DLP Category: Independent
Pairing: Harry/Daphne
Status: WIP
Summary: A fluke meeting under the strangest circumstances possible leads Harry Potter on a journey to finding answers that will help shape his destiny.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4969788/1/Discovery

Writing and characterization is good. Interesting start to the story and even more interesting Harry on the lastest update. The story already have 16 chapters and is at 111,569 words so it's quite long already. This is one of the few story from the growing list of Harry/Slytherin Girl pairing story in FF.net that I don't feel it is too cliched or too weird to read. Some funny point, but not a lot.

P.S. My first suggestion to the library so sorry if I done anything wrong.

 

Not cliched? First we have Daphne showing up out of nowhere, bypassing whatever wards/guards at the dursleys house. Then, she shows Harry the "light" and he sees how everyone is wrong, and she is right. Next we see the "dumbledore-is-always-right-bitchy-Hermione", some love potion subplot a bit far ahead and behold: Harry Potter, Heir of Hogwarts. Not only that, but now he has Uber-powers and controls everything, while evading Dumbledore manipulations.

Truthfully, the only plus to the story is that Harry got his ass kicked by Voldermort. But that was ruined by "fate" knocking Azkaban on top of Riddle's head, and the Darkest wizard of all times saying 'Lord Voldemort is mad at you. crucio'

Its a cliche rollercoaster since freaking chapter one. 1/5 for me

 

Toupee wearing Voldemort FTW!

 

lol It does have a lot of humorous parts in the story, I have to say. I'd give it a 3, but with all the stupid typo-errors this guy does, I'm giving it a 2. It's average at best, but I find it very amusing.

Edit:

That part had me laughing pretty hard.

 

I was able to struggle through this in the early stages. The farther it got, though, the more I wanted to just exit the page. I finally gave up around three chapters ago.

 

Beginning was pretty strong, despite the clichés. Things started going downhill after Harry took Hogwarts over, and left Dumbledore in the dirt. Some entertaining sequences, Dark Lord Harry with MPD, and decent update speed have made me stay on this train.

This works well as a light-hearted action piece with little depth, but it fails as a novel.

2/5

 

The premise had potential. I was enjoying reading this up until they rescued Astoria from the Malfoys. Then the story went to shit.

Harry in this story is a complete idiot. He has grand plans - which are high on promise and shit in delivery. I wouldn't be surprised if Potterholic was an architect of Bush's foreign policy in the first term. The whole Downfall thing? I don't give a shit. Daphne's character kind of just exists in this story. I like her approach - cynical - but that's all she is. There really isn't any depth to her.

As Sesc noted, there is a serious disconnect between the rhetoric spoken by the characters and the "humor" in the story. There are some hilarious one-liners. Unfortunately, they are drowned out by numerous spelling and grammatical errors.

It's not often that I see an author write exponentially worse chapters.

1.5/5, rounded down to 1.

 

The only part of this story that characterized Daphne as she should be is the typo that appears in my sig. The rest was crammed with cliches and fail!comedy.

 

QFFT! It's barely readable and rarely amusing. 2.5/5

 

Simply failed to hold my attention, when you have to really force yourself to keep reading and you just want to close the window it isn't a very good story. No real depth nor is the writing style captivating.

2/5

 

This was originally posted in almost recommended fics. I think it belongs there.

That said, I'm gonna go against the grain and say that I enjoyed this story greatly. Don't let the summary and beginning confuse you - this is in no way meant to be a serious story.

If you take it as it is - a crack fic disguised to look seriously, I think you'll find it to be a lot more enjoyable. I mean, the Death Eater Klea Shea who complains about the unoriginality of Voldemort's plans?

5/5 for the Humor Section.

 

It originally had potential, if one were to disregard the clichés. However, even accepting it as a crackfic, I find it to be boring and increasingly not worth my while. Maybe I'm just missing something, but I think that at some point, even crackfics become dull. This story just isn't good enough. 2/5