The part where Zabini got killed was the best moment, it was a pointless death, came out of nowhere, and was lulzy. Harry killing Luna was profound in theory, but somehow it was just sparked a WTF moment in the execution. No impact.

Had it ended with Harry in Rome, watching the sunset as someone in the library thread speculated, it would have merited a 5/5.

Didn't happen though. 3 out of 5 since it was enjoyable, but the characterization of a sociopath Harry was generic, lines like "What a beautiful neck you have" are again something probably intended to be onimous, but fell flat.

Oh, and Harry's singularly unique and idiosyncratic method of bringing "peace" to people.

 

Nothing very inspiring but not bad either..
3/5.. I liked the part where Ginny died, although he could have killed her AFTER the bj, imo.

 

This was new to me, a decent length one shot.
I wish it had gone on for a few more paragraphs but I guess my imagination will have to decide what happenes next.
5/5

 

Well, it has a certain DLP feel about it. 4/5

 

4/5 Because I have seen worse enter DLP.

This one is certainly worth reading.

6/5 for Zabini death!

 

Not impressed.

Dialogue: unnatural. Characterization: minimal. Cliches: many. Sense of irony or black humor: none. Catch Phrase/Echo: fail. Point: none.

Harry as a nihilist is an interesting concept, but this doesn't even try to really explore that, instead revelling in pointless, gratuitous death scenes, horrible rambling monologues that are presumably meant to convey insanity or break with reality, and general pointlessless. I want my five minutes back.

2/5 -Needs a whole lotta improvement, but it could have been worse.

 

I admit it coud have been better but you all have to admit, compared to what we've got in the last month or two, this was pretty awesome. The whole neck thing should have worked but it got flattened, and I agree with a previous replier that if Harry had ended up in Rome or something about it than the nice dark horror oneshot would have ended well.

4/5 though because it did what it was mostly supposed to. Of course, maybe I'm a bit biased with the post-Azkaban difference.

 

I actually enjoyed reading it, so I think it merits some points. 4/5.

 

No. That is not how things work. Just because one is bombarded with poor quality does not mean one should except it. If the fic should have gone in the bin three months ago, it should go in the bin today. Do not lower your standards because a lot of stuff sucks. Only except what is actually good.

Aside: I've yet to read this fic, and as such my comments are about Goddessa's thought process and not the story.

 

I enjoyed reading it a bit but I don't think that it has the quality to belong in the library compared to what is in there.

3/5

 

I liked it a lot more the first time I read it. =/

3/5 - Bin worthy, but not library worthy.

 

I thought the story was pretty decent. I know my standards aren't quite as high as others here in the forum, but I'm voting a 4/5. I was pretty entertained from the story. I really liked it.

 

Read this two days ago. It was flat, the death scenes weren't horrific enough, the line "such a pretty neck," doesn't have the significance it should of had. The overuse of love annoyed me a bit and the only thing that kept me reading was the gore that infested the fic. On that note needed more gore at least more description of the murders especially the exploding bodies, the crushing of skulls etc.

I would of appreciated an ambiguous ending with Britain in a state of panic rather than crushed. With Harry on the loose, and as a story that is used to scare children would have satisfied the traditional horror genre quite nicely. It would of also increased my vote.

That said I disliked the end as it was almost predictable at the point that Harry and Fleur met and talked about Gabrielle, that she was going to be kidnapped as well.

Since it kept me reading until the end I'll give it a 3/5, for good spelling and grammar as well as keeping my interest. Nothing that really screams out at you in this fic and that was its major problem.

 

3/5 for me.

It did have a number of good death scenes - and it did portray a well written utterly insane Harry.

My biggest issue is that this story lacked originality in my mind. It's wonderful that he killed all these people, but we've seen it before. I do like the dearth of angst compared to some Azkabazn fics, but even that plus wasn't enough to make this story stand out in particular.

 

Not really a fan. I guess I'm just desensitized to years of revenge fics from the fandom.

There was just a certain presumptuousness to Harry's character that rubbed me wrong, especially for an Azkaban escapee. I didn't find his character at all believable.

2.5/5

 

Good, but not great one-shot. I think it should have ended after the Kingsley/Tonks scene. The rest of it dragged a bit, and come to think of it I almost kind of sort of wish that Luna had been cast in a Juliette Lewis "Natural Born Killers" type role.

3 stars.

 

I liked it.

 

Well, first off I would like to say that it is one of the first totally insane!Harry stories I have seen finished. Most people who write them either can't do it or just decide they don't like writing insane!Harry. That in itself it is at least worth one point.

Secondly I have to say that the criticisms about Harry's Dialogue in this story don't seem to make much sense. Yes the line Harry used are unnatural for his character. He has just gotten out of Azkaban after five years, he's totally out of his mind. Some insane people make coherent sense, some insane people can't seem to keep any thought constant. Harry's speech was broken, OOC, and didn't have a straight line of thought because he was insane.

I will however conclude that the lines such as "such a pretty neck," don't have quite the effect I would hope for if I was the author. It may have portrayed insanity but still.

Thirdly the fact that it was left open like that, while it would usually annoy me, left me quite happy. There is a lot of loose ends and a lot of things that could happen next. Harry could destroy the world, he could get captured, he may even kill himself accidentally, while he is trying to kill someone else.

The randomness, instead of for revenge or anything else was also a good element and the hints that many more people were killed then was shown was appreciated. The story kept me following it and that is something I always like in a story.

Finally I could see little to no spelling, Punctuation or Grammar errors. However my skills in that area are quite bad so I am not the best to judge on that.

4/5, I consider it good enough for the Library. It is at least good enough for the bin but I would prefer if it went into the Library.

Oh and Tinn Tam, love the reason for your edit.

 

It's been awhile since I've had the time to write on DLP, so I'll take the chance right now to talk about my first fic.

While I'm disappointed that most people didn't rate it good enough for the Library, I can understand that it wasn't quite up to standards as most of the other threads. Many of the effects I went for fell flat and I have only my paltry level of English classes and comprehension to blame.

One thing I want to make clear is that this piece of fiction was never about revenge. It was only about as many amusing deaths as I could pack into the fic. From people getting decapitated; to crushed; to curb stomped; I only wanted to pack in as many deaths as I thought could happen. I could have gone for more, but it felt better to keep it at the original amount. I recognize that some of the more intense parts were unsurprising and didn't catch your attention as they should have. I can only chalk it up to inexperience and I will try to learn from it.

Three stars is still pretty good for my first fic, so I thank you all. Hopefully my next fic will be better and will attract more to it. Thanks for the reviews. I'm not going to rate my own fic as I really hate it when authors pimp their own shit, so I'll leave it where it is.

Peace White Rabbit.