WIP Divided by Para_Docks - T - Worm

Varios · Apr 4, 2017

Title: Divided
Author: Para_Docks
Rating: T but it's a Worm story so it's not exactly sunshine and rainbows
Genre: AU
Status: WIP
Fandom: Worm
Pairings: None
Summary: An Alternate Earth in which parahumans are hunted down by the PRT ruthlessly and either subjugated or sent to 'The Birdcage'. Taylor Hebert alongside several other Parahumans are discovered by the PRT and are picked up by The Court, led by the strongest Parahumans they've grown up fearing.
Link: https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/divided-worm-au.396325/

Heya guys, first time making a review thread so apologies if I've messed up, the story is pretty original for a Worm fic forgoing A LOT of stations of Canon in order to create a believable AU-verse.

The story starts pretty consistent with canon, with a locker event and Taylor having bug powers, everything goes south when she and Sophia are outed as Parahumans alongside numerous canon Wards and other teenage BB parahumans. They escape Brockton Bay with The Nine led by The Black Knight (Or as we know him Jack Slash). A subsection of a group known as The Court led by the Faerie Queen who perform guerrilla style raids against the PRT.

The Faerie Queen recognises The Queen Administrator shard and claims Taylor as a 'Noble' of the Court alongside other like The Black Knight, Eidolon and Chevalier and she is essentially thrown in the deep end and escalates as usual.

So it's a pretty good story for Taylor attempting to balance the cape politics in The Court and also trying to work out how to be the leader of a parahuman group.

The cast of characters is pretty diverse with canon characters coming from unexpected angles due to the divergences, theres no Cauldron either which is quite refreshing.

I'd say 4/5 for me definitely.

Dark Syaoran · Apr 16, 2017

Anyone else read this and willing to review?

Plotless · Apr 16, 2017

A good idea and decent characterisation that's sometimes let down by the word-dumpy writing style. Take this:

I looked to Brian. His costume was fairly simple. The same type of body suit, also dyed black. He had boots, gauntlets, and body armor of chitin, and a mask in the image of a demon with yellow eyes. The gauntlets were pointed at the tips of the fingers and along the knuckles to compliment his fighting skills.

Dennis' costume was one of the few that forewent chitin armor. Instead, he had black armor created by Chris and Mannequin. The face of the mask, the chest, his shoulders, the backs of his hands, and the fronts of his legs each had clocks built into them. They weren't accurate, moving at seemingly random speeds. They paused every so often for random amounts of time before beginning to move again.

Carlos' armor was a lot like Brian's, but he wore a domino mask instead of a full face mask. We had made his pieces of armor denser to compensate for his strength, to hopefully keep it from shattering from a single blow.

Missy's bodysuit was dyed a swirling mix of white and black. Her mask covered the bottom half of her face, with a pair of goggles with yellow lenses made by Chris covering her eyes. She had a hooded shawl as well, her hood was already pulled up. Her armor was painted in the same swirling pattern as the suit.

Dean had also forgone chitin armor. Instead, Chris had made him a medieval style suit of armor. The armor was gunmetal colored and covered him head to toe. A white eye was painted onto the chest , and the pupil of it glowed in fluctuating colors.

Michael had decided to go without any armor at all. His power would compensate, and allow him to go without. We had the issue of making it stretchy enough that when he used his power to bulk up that it wouldn't rip. I had needed Sarah's help for that one. We had gotten it eventually, though.

Rory had chitin armor as well. More than any of us. It covered his arms, legs, torso, and he even had a helmet in a vaguely Roman style. The helmet covered everything but his eyes, which had a yellow visor over them.

Dinah's costume was a simple robe with some armor underneath. I had taken my inspiration for it from Labyrinth's costume. She had a mask that covered the bottom half of her face as well.

And finally, Chris wore armor that he made himself. It was futuristic looking, but maintained the color scheme. The armor, which consisted of a helmet, body armor, gauntlets, and greacves was jet black with yellow lines of light running along each segment. The black bodysuit could be seen underneath. At his sides were two guns. Laser guns with multiple settings. He had researched Legend for some of the settings.
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It's literally an info dump of costumes one at a time, and really grinds my gears - I just skipped it after the first two or three.

That being said, it is a lot of fun to read and the author does good work on the world building and characters don't talk like robots which is always good. The interludes are good, more than just reaction scenes.

I don't think this is a 4/5 fic, but I'm rating it that anyway because I think it deserves more than its current 3/5.

Nazgoose · Apr 16, 2017

I was a big fan up until we got to the part where

the girl who got her powers a few months (weeks?) back and has barely started figuring out what she's doing or where she stands in the court decided to take out Heartbreaker and everyone goes along with it.

3/5 from me.

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