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Abandoned Doing it all over again by TakatoRikku - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Lord Osiris, Apr 24, 2006.

  1. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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  2. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    kmfrank Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Andro hit the nail on the head here.

    The sister made me want to abort my own sisters, just in case they ever said anything remotely like that. And the fact that the author tried to paint Harry as a total!badass, who became a pussy in the face of an annoying sister who obviously wasn't told 'no' enough as a child made this even worse.

    2/5, since I've seen worse writing. The idea was stolen from SilverAegis' HP and the Girl-Who-Lived, I think. This, however, has no fem!Harry, and basically just takes everything bad from that story and forms a retarded step-brother that has no place in the DLP library.
     
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  4. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Haha I didn't notice it begins exactly the same way as SilverAegis's story.

    I kind of wish someone would write a good harem story, but everyone with sufficient skills in writing is too ambitious to bother.
     
  5. Scrittore

    Scrittore Groundskeeper

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    Reading the first chapter, I have to agree with Andro and Frank here. This should definitely taken out of the Library and maybe even kept away from the Recycle Bin. 2/5.
     
  6. Galleon

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    I would think it's the other way around actually considering this story was taken off and then put back up and everything.

    This used to be one of my favorite humor stories and probably hasn't aged as well as it should have. Still, I vote it gets moved to the humor/parody section rather than the recycling bin.
     
  7. darklordmike

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    Yeah, spunky!sister is annoying, and it's amazing how quickly Harry forgets about his past life and settles into this one. I read the first six chapters, and the humor is just too silly for my tastes. This moment in particular had me laughing out loud, but I don't think the author intended it to be funny:

    Who knows? Maybe it gets funnier as it goes. Some of the quotes posted earlier seem mildly amusing. The author's new summary and A/N seem to promise that the new version will contain 'hilarity and harems.' I didn't see any harems on the horizon, but then again I only read six chapters.

    3/5 because it's breezy and light-hearted. I can see this being on a few 'guilty pleasure' lists
     
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