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Dudley Lamented by magicofisis - NC 17

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Xiph0, Jul 24, 2008.

3.3333332538605/5, 9 votes
  1. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Jul 24, 2008 #1
    Title: Dudley Lamented
    Author: Magicofisis
    Rating: NC-17
    Genre: Smut
    DLP Category: Restricted Section
    Pairing: H/Tonks
    Status: Complete (I think, author leaves it with room for a sequel)
    Summary: It's good Honks. Harry plays a joke on Dudley by convincing him he's a pimp, Tonk's finds out after Harry fakes phone sex with Hermione and it spirals. Short-ish but good.
    Link: RS.org

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  2. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Jul 25, 2008 #2
    Meh... Decently written but not memorable in the least. 3.5/5
     
  3. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    Jul 25, 2008 #3
    Some slash-friendly passages, and the old Post-OoTP Sirius angst was nothing but expected. Pretty good work overall, though. The idea made me smile, and the execution was excellent. I personally found the sex portrayal fairly realistic.

    4/5
     
    Last edited: Jul 25, 2008
  4. Heleor

    Heleor EsperJones DLP Supporter

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    Jul 25, 2008 #4
    It amused me. More PWP than anything else, though.
     
  5. Aekiel

    Aekiel Angle of Mispeling ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Jul 25, 2008 #5
    The start was average and clichéd, the middle was good, the sex was funny and the ending was epic.

    4/5 for me.
     
  6. Heather_Sinclair

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    Jul 25, 2008 #6
    First Warning:

    Wasn't slashy enough ... meaning there is slash involved in a story that is rec'ed at DLP. Huh ... Isn't there a rule about this somewhere?


    WTF is this crap!

    Quite right ... not enough slash.



    The entire first scene should just go away and be condensed into two sentences then inserted into the actual story. If the author did that then this would have been a decent little bit of mind candy.

    Slut!Tonks to the rescue, Jealous!Dudley, and a touch of H/Hr make this cliched story a very average PWP. But then we are notified that it is PWP at the beginning so I can't fault him/her for that.

    3/3 (keeping in mind that it was PWP) after the worthless slash scene. But I can't even score this due to the slash because it shouldn't be in the Library in the first place. Lord help us from Torn!Harry
     
    Last edited: Jul 25, 2008
  7. Cathal

    Cathal Sir Nils' Right Hand

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    Jul 25, 2008 #7
    Read this one a LONG while ago. Back then I thought it was good. Huh, lets see how/if my opinion on it changed.

    EDIT: I couldn't stop laughing at those semi-slash moments. Weird.

    Anyway, solid 4/5.
     
    Last edited: Jul 25, 2008
  8. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Jul 25, 2008 #8
    Yeah, I just skipped over the slash undertones, though this made me pause and wonder if the author typo'd:

    each boy’s tongue hungrily devouring the other’s mouth

    Very much a "wat" moment.
     
  9. Covil

    Covil Fourth Year

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    Jul 25, 2008 #9
    And this is how you tell the difference between the pathetic obsessive slashers and the people who just don't mind reading it. the slash added nothing to it, just there for the sake of slash if you get my meaning.

    About the story, it's better as a humor piece than smut.

    3/5
     
  10. Iztiak

    Iztiak Prisoner DLP Supporter

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    Jul 25, 2008 #10
    Hah, I just skipped over the beginning and completely missed the slash parts. :p

    Anyway, It was pretty funny. 4/5
     
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