Title: Escape
Author: malko050987
Genre: Action/Adventure
Rating: K+
Status: WIP
Pairings: Probably H/Tonks
Suggested category: "Independent Harry"
Summary: PostOotP AU. Something has changed drastically in the Dursley household. Will Harry and his new friend be able to escape? And what will he do after that?
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3001470/1/

It's a standard post-OOTP plot where Harry realizes that evil!Dumbledore had ordered Vernon and Petunia to abuse him and Dudley, so they both escape the Private Drive to some island...

Upside is a solid writing style and detailed execution - Harry's escape isn't done half-arsedly like usual. His new mentor might turn interesting too.

Downsides are several plot inconsistencies (Dumbledore's motivation for once, as well as his screwup) and one Deus-Ex machina.

All in all, a decent read for now, but it's still early for the final mark.
3/5

 

kind of short chapters and most of what happened is all build up. The dream and his mentor though are intresting.

3/5 could move up but gotta see where the author is going.

 

Not bad. I like the Story Keeper, very original. It doesn't hit on the usual cliches too deeply and the story is well written.

4/5

 

It was decent... I'll give it a 4/5

 

The escape was thought out, I like that. It makes more sense than Harry jumping on the bus that every wizard in England uses. I also like the fact that the entire bank thing was glossed over, rather than covering it in excrutiatingly unnecessary detail. I am also happy with the bookstore visit. Far too often, Harry finds every text he could possibly need in various stores without any real difficulty in obtaining them. All in all, 4/5.

 

It's okay. I can't tell where it's going, though, it could tank. I don't like Tonks that much, either.

3.5/5

 

I coudn't get past the first chapter. Harry's just way too pathetic.

 

I got a question for you Illusive. How can you read cannon Harry? Do you have to take long brakes, to keep the frustration down? I notice that you abandon stories fast when Harry is more cannon like, I just can't understand how you read cannon.

As for myself, I am reading it, but suffering through the beginning. I have read so many stories that start like this, that it is getting increasingly hard to get past.

2/5 I haven't officially voted yet, as I am waiting for it to progress into something original.

 

In the first chapter Harry is more of a bitch then canon Harry. He stood up to Vernon in his third year for fucks sake. Canon doesn't get intimidated all the time like alot of fanon Harrys do.

 

Ehh, I think your thinking along the line of, "He didn't do anything about his Uncles threats, so he must be a pansy."

The fact is, Harry, if thinking clearly, knows that there is no point in argueing over something as small as his Uncle spitting everywhere in rage. He waits until there is a real reason, like having his parents insulted before he does anything.

I would understood if Harry cried, or whined to be let go when his Uncle grabbed him, but not doing anything the instant a threat is shown, doesn't make Harry a pansy.

I am sorry if I am being a little up front about it, but I just noticed that you seem to give the Pansy Harry title incredibly fast in a story.

and in no way am I saying that this is a perfect version of cannon, or that this story should be held in the highest respect, just trying to show you that sometimes there is more than meets the eye.

 

I have no doubt that Harry would let Vernon beat him without doing anything.

 

yes, well, lets hope not, for if he does, or if I get the feeling that he would, I would put the story down as well.

 

Eh, it's an ok fic for me. It's one of the better pieces of fiction that I have read, but not the best either. 3/5

 

Am I allowed to post in a thread about my own fic? If I'm not somebody let me know, so I can edit this or delete it.

This will not be Harry/Tonks. The last chapters (if anybody got there) should make that clear. It will probably go for Harry/Luna, if I write a ship at all.

I realize that the first few (most) chapters are lame, and have no excuses. I started writing the fic as an experiment, to see if I could write the sort of fic everybody writes. It kinda got away from me after a few chapters, and I decided to see where it went.

Anyway, I was really surprised to see my fic here. Got a major ego-boost, too.

Chris

 

Of course you can.
Actually, it's highly recomended to show up and fight tooth and nail for the sanctity of your work whenever some spoiled DLP nitpicker deems fit to flame you.

That said, I'll admit that I've lost interest in this fic as soon as that mysterious mentor-like guy appeared and started the standard bullshit about wandless magic. Might return to it once there are more chapters posted.

 

Heh. I'd lose interest in it too, probably Altough I have some twists I haven't seen anywhere else.

I did set out to write a cliche fic, and it's mostly for my own benefit. Altough feedback is appreciated, and I love looking at the hit counter

Chris