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Oneshot Eternal Return by Silver Pard - K+

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by MrINBN, Dec 29, 2008.

  1. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    Title: Eternal Return
    Author: Silver Pard
    Rating: K+
    Genre: General
    DLP Category: The Alternates
    Pairing: None
    Words: 4,283
    Published: December 19, 2008

    Status: Oneshot
    Summary: For the Greater Good. Harry understands this.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4726291/1/

    Bad things happen to those who meddle with time. Harry knows this all too well. An interesting twist on the cookie-cutter "back in time" fic.



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  2. Rayndeon

    Rayndeon Professor

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    Very interesting and enjoyable one-shot!

    In effect, Harry is Voldemort, and all those things he thinks are things he thought Voldemort said or did, are in fact things he said or did. At what point is he Harry Potter and is he Voldemort? Or does it even matter anymore, the difference so ambiguous so as to make any division arbitrary and meaningless?

    This reminds me precisely of another excellent (longer) time-travel story in the "For Review" section right now: "Destiny Redefined." Harry has fallen prey to a "Predestination Paradox." His memories of how Voldemort acted ensures the way that he acts like Voldemort which ensures how Harry remembers them and ad infinitum.

    And in a cruel, turnabout way, he has achieved immortality - so long as he continues the vicious circle, it will continue forevermore. Ergo, the title "Eternal Return."
    5/5.
     
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  3. Veri

    Veri Denarii Host

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    Read it, loved it. If this was a chaptered fic. it'd take the place of circular reasoning as my favorite time travel story. Even as a one-shot, though, it's still fairly awesome. Kudos on the find INBN. 5/5
     
  4. D.S.

    D.S. First Year

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    It broke my mind a little.
    5/5
     
  5. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    A brilliant bit of business, here. 5/5
     
  6. Synchro

    Synchro High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    He writes some pretty good stuff doesn't he? Very good this. 5/5
     
  7. AntiChrist

    AntiChrist Professor

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    Awesome oneshot, even if I've seen a few better. Starts off fairly understandable, but it really took a bit of thinking to comprehend it especially near the end. 5/5
     
  8. knothead

    knothead Groundskeeper

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    It's reminiscent of Stephen King's Dark Tower series, but with a twist. The main difference is that Harry!Tom remembers, and Roland doesn't-- removing the conflict from the story and making it a writing exercise.

    3 stars for a good show.
     
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  9. Illution

    Illution Seventh Year

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    Blow my mind. I always thought someone would be writing up on this plot line sooner or later. This is wonderfully done and deserves a 5/5. The title was a fitting foreshadowing.
     
  10. Goddessa39

    Goddessa39 DA Member

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    Very awesome oneshot. Depressing of course, but this author is reknowned for that. Focuses on antiParadoxical outlook. Loved it.
     
  11. Lucullus

    Lucullus High Inquisitor

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    5/5

    Possibly the best one-shot I've encountered, and one of the most thought provoking ones.

    Reading through the reviews on FFN, it seems some misunderstood the fic (or maybe it was me).
    The way I see it, Harry Potter is Lord Voldemort.
     
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  12. Rayndeon

    Rayndeon Professor

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    Pretty much yeah. At least, that's my interpretation of it.
     
  13. Zyloch

    Zyloch Fourth Year

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    It is because Harry!Tom remembers that gives the story its charm. Otherwise, there would be no conflict for the direction in which the author took the story.

    5/5 for very tight writing and flow
     
  14. azrael

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    A magnificent work, definitely one of the best one-shots I've seen. 5/5
     
  15. lulu42

    lulu42 Second Year

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    I love stories like these. I love watching time, cause, and effect unravel. There is an added plus, that Voldemort's intentions are explained clearly.

    I watched The Lake House the other day to amuse me with its bad plot. It was crap, way more than I thought it would be. It was a romance movie staring Keanu Reeves and Sandra Bullock who wrote to each other two years apart and fall in love because they live in the same house. Or something.
    True, I knew it would be crap when I started watching it, (see Keanu) but damn.

    Therefore I can't rate this... anything would get a 5/5 for me after watching The Lake House.
     
  16. Blackvoice

    Blackvoice Third Year

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    I could have sworn I read this more than a year ago. Oh well.

    Really good, indeed. Not much more to say, actually...
     
  17. Josh Trapt

    Josh Trapt First Year DLP Supporter

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    I don't normally get into Oneshots, but this was a very nice read.

    5/5
     
  18. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    I'm going to be a sole dissenter.

    The premise was given in the first few lines of the story. The rest was simply a writing exercise. You could have not read the rest of the story and still ended up with the same reaction.

    The author took one idea and just extended to the end. It has no conflict.

    4/5 for the writing, but 2/5 for originality and entertainment. It's well-written, but simply lacks a punch - the twist was given in the beginning and explained.

    3/5
     
  19. Portus

    Portus Heir

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    It's your own fault for watching anything - save Bill & Ted or the first Matrix movie - with Keanu Reeves in it. He has all the acting chops of a mannequin. I suppose the first Speed was okay, since it had Sandra Bullock and Dennis Hopper in it, since she's hot and Hopper is just cool as hell. Well, he was, before he started making Baby Boomer retirement commercials...

    As for the story, I liked it, and it was unique in that Harry-as-Voldemort lived Tom Riddle's life as he had heard about it, on the premise that if he changed things, the ramifications might be even worse, according to what McGonagall or Hermione had told him. That indecision is what locks him into the cycle, presumably forever.

    Depressing, really, but I thought it was well done and would highly recommend it.
     
  20. enembee

    enembee The Nicromancer DLP Supporter

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    From the reviews I was expecting something a whole lot better. It's decent but not ground breaking, it's been done before and a damn sight better.

    3/5
     
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