1. DLP Flash Christmas Competition + Writing Marathon 2024!

    Competition topic: Magical New Year!

    Marathon goal? Crank out words!

    Check the marathon thread or competition thread for details.

    Dismiss Notice
  2. Hi there, Guest

    Only registered users can really experience what DLP has to offer. Many forums are only accessible if you have an account. Why don't you register?
    Dismiss Notice
  3. Introducing for your Perusing Pleasure

    New Thread Thursday
    +
    Shit Post Sunday

    READ ME
    Dismiss Notice

Complete Fighting Philosophies by Yalmer Toicevun - M

Discussion in 'Review Board' started by Evil Shnitzel, Aug 23, 2023.

  1. Evil Shnitzel

    Evil Shnitzel High Inquisitor

    Joined:
    Dec 3, 2005
    Messages:
    525
    Gender:
    Male
    Location:
    Israel
    Title: Fighting Philosophies
    Author: Yalmer
    Rating: M
    Genre: Drama/Angst
    Status: Complete (423,788 words)
    Library Category: Dark Arts
    Pairings: [Harry P.- Daphne G.]
    Summary: Obstacle after obstacle is thrown in Harry’s way, with only his master, Rowena Ravenclaw, to help him. Some of the obstacles, he jumps over neatly, some of them make him stumble, and even fall. How many obstacles can he overcome before he doesn’t get up again? Follow Harry as he is forced to make impossible choices; choices that will punish him, no matter what he does or wants.
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/14118282/1/Fighting-Philosophies

    I've been hesitating about posting this story for a review since it was posted. The first chapters can be extremely frustrating. The progress is slow and the initial Harry is very naive, occasionally weak and idiotic. At some point, the writing becomes better (it is very decent from the start) and Harry improves as well. Since the beginning the action is stellar and there are several thrilling scenes. Not your typical HP/DG, more in spoilered section. Starts beginning of 4th year.

    Daphne isn't the Mary Sue we see everywhere lately. She isn't hot or extremely intelligent or necessarily good hearted. Won't ruin the plot point that brought this pairing together. Rowena also isn't a ray of sunshine. This story makes Harry bleed at every turn. I love it.
     
  2. fmotta4

    fmotta4 Muggle DLP Supporter

    Joined:
    Sep 26, 2013
    Messages:
    4
    A decent story buried under a lot of questionable grammar. The author's quality control leaves a lot to be desired. He really needs a beta reader, though quality improves dramatically the more the story advances.

    Edit: Forgot to add a rating. 3/5
     
    Last edited: Aug 28, 2023