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Fools Rush In by londonsocks

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by sneakyfox, Mar 30, 2008.

  1. sneakyfox

    sneakyfox Guest

    Title: Fools Rush In
    Author:londonsocks
    Rating:T
    Genre:General/Humour
    DLP Category:Independant Harry
    Pairing: None
    Status:In progress
    Summary:Harry is not stupid, but what if for once he stopped to think for himself, for just a moment? Dissatisfied with his current situation he resolves to improve it, to hell with anyone who gets in his way. Not super-powered Harry. AU after OOTP.

    Link:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4041327/1/Fools_Rush_In

    I kinda like this story, but I'm stuck on a rating.....
     
  2. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Perhaps my standards are abnormally high, but pardon me if I decline reading this.
     
  3. White Rabbit

    White Rabbit Hippity Hoppity DLP Supporter

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    Skimmed it, nothing really grabbed my attention. The parts I did stop to read had bad grammar, and the parts with Dean, Seamus, and Harry left me feeling they were repressing the urge to drop trou and have a grand ol' circle jerk.
     
  4. Iztiak

    Iztiak Prisoner DLP Supporter

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    Well, it was alright. The spelling and grammar wasn't so bad, and the writing style is decent.

    However, this is counterbalanced by a severe lack of any plot whatsoever. And it is irrecoverably shoved into dirt by massive Dumbledore-Hate cliches.
    I.E. Tracers, magical blocks, etc.....

    I don't think I'll rate this one. If I had to, I'd say 2/5.
    The writer could probably write something good if he/she came up with a plot first, and dumped the cliches.
     
  5. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    1.5/5 from me. The "plot" was damn near non-existent, the writing style was okay, if a bit juvenile, and nothing grabbed my attention at all.
     
  6. Boofers

    Boofers Groundskeeper

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    0/5 for me.. I couldn't even be sure that what I was reading was written in english..
     
  7. Seratin

    Seratin Proudmander –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    1/5 That was beyond terrible. It was like reading the big list of Dumbledore cliches.
     
  8. Jenkins

    Jenkins Forum Bike DLP Supporter

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    Reading that was like having my balls rubbed against a cheese grater.

    0/5
     
  9. Seratin

    Seratin Proudmander –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    What balls? Your the forum dyke remember? :D
     
  10. Jenkins

    Jenkins Forum Bike DLP Supporter

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    BIKE!! I am the forum bike!

    I blame Vash for this...what was wrong with being a butler? I just had to be a bike didn't I?

    /me walks off kicking dogs
     
  11. hchan1

    hchan1 Sixth Year

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    Typical ff.net dreck. I can usually tell if a story is hastily written trash if I can't even hit the Page Down button without reaching the end of a chapter. Short chapters combined with dull, rehashed ideas make this story auto-fail. 1/5
     
  12. Shadowglen

    Shadowglen First Year

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    1/5

    This was, indeed, quite terrible. I will however give a point or two for the quoted author's note. That, at least, was refreshingly honest and saved the author some respect in my eyes.

    Not much, but some.
     
    Last edited: Apr 1, 2008
  13. Lyndon Eye

    Lyndon Eye Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    Wise men saaayyyyy...

    Only fools rush in.

    But I can't help...


    Getting utterly bored and abandoning this story by the 2nd chapter. There just isn't much to hold my interest.
     
  14. DoubleE

    DoubleE Third Year

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    At least he isn't writing slash. Though his grammar is atrocious. Still, shouldn't this be in the WTF fics section?
     
  15. Mirkwood

    Mirkwood Seventh Year

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    Dear me, I attempted to poke my eyes out at the first chapter.
     
  16. yhelo

    yhelo Sixth Year

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    Maybe we need a post count requirement before you can post in the library?
     
  17. Zlaker1001

    Zlaker1001 Second Year

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    That was particularly horrid to read. Cliched to the max, some of it was original, but that was like .001 % of it... But if I had to choose between that and slash, I suppose that would win out...
     
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