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WIP From Heaven and Hell BY zwritters - T - Harry Potter

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by ZGhost, Jun 27, 2012.

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  1. ZGhost

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    Jun 27, 2012 #1
    Title: From Heaven and Hell
    Author: Zarattini
    Rating: T
    Chapters: 4
    Words: 21,732

    Summary: Harry and Philip Potter are twins and both survived to the fall of Voldemort with a identical scar on their forehead. But Philip has a past that goes way beyond that night. Focus mainly on Harry and Philip, but even more on Philip. Story kicks off on fourth year. Main ship is Philip/Fleur.
    Link:
    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8221339/1/bFrom_b_bHeaven_b_and_bHell_b

    Hey, I started this story a few days ago and I just can't get any reviews, so take a look and tell me what you think, specially about my grammar, since english is not my first language, I'd like to receive critics to know where I can improve :D
    Also, I'd like to say that it will be a rather long story and that it will get darker and darker as it approaches the end.
     
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  2. Jibril

    Jibril Headmaster

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    Jun 27, 2012 #2
    :facepalm
    Post your entire story in Work By Author section and not here. In WBA your writing will be ripped apart and every last mistake that you made will be pointed out.
    For Review section is for stories that are good, coherent and worthy of addition to the Library. As this is your first story, I'm pretty sure it won't be any of those that I mentioned.

    Oh, and welcome to DLP. Try not to get butt-hurt. Too much.
     
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  3. ZGhost

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    Jun 27, 2012 #3
    Thanks and sorry man
     
  4. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Jun 27, 2012 #4
    I locked the thread.

    Technically it's the wrong thread in the wrong subforum (see: Jibril's post).

    I read the first chapters and it's more like a summary than a story, a rewrite of the first years with two instead of one Potter. Oh, and it features IceQueen!Daphne.

    If you want to get some input on your story, please post it in WbA. Here it will end as a flame war and you might end with slashed wrists.

    I'll move this thread to the trashbin in a few days.
     
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