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[WIP] Gabriel by Shikatanai - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Cell, Mar 31, 2006.

  1. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    The writer isn't terribly gifted. The first chapter couldn't keep my interest even back in 2007-2008.

    I liked the author's note at the beginning of the last update. "Let me tantalize you with another chapter" lol.
     
  2. Verminard

    Verminard Seventh Year

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    I didn't like it.
     
  3. The Silent Knight

    The Silent Knight Seventh Year

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    Damn this takes me back. And reminds me of what awful taste I used to have.
     
  4. kpjam

    kpjam First Year

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    The note was better than the chapter!
    I like a lot of the ideas covered in the story, it just always seemed the author's ambition was way better then their writing ability.
     
  5. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    I wouldn't be able to judge the author's ambition. I was like "Woman named Laura, then there's Harry with an Indian family - whaaa?" Then I dropped it like a hot coal.
     
  6. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I gave up on this fic a while back, it was just not making much in the way of sense. I recall it reading like the author maybe had lots of notes on what was going on, and assumed that people knew all of that as well, so didn't include it.
     
  7. Clerith

    Clerith Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Pretty much this.

    I tried to read this back in the '08 or so, I think. Didn't much care for it then, and as usual, it's only gotten worse. I skimmed the chapters, and there was just so much OC, Indian Super Family AU stuff that it made me vaguely ill.

    While the writing is technically sound, there's just no interest.

    2/5.
     
  8. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Minion Moderator DLP Supporter

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    The author seemed to have developed a steady update rate with one chapter per year.

    Nothing happened. Neville knows who Harry is, and Gabriel knows that Neville knows who Harry is.

    Meh. It once was a guilty pleasure, but now it's just annoying to be forced to skim through the last chapters just to know what happened.
     
  9. Shinysavage

    Shinysavage Madman With A Box Prestige

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    It was ok, but slightly less than 2,500 words is short for any chapter, even by my standards, and when it's been a year since the last one...and while it's nice to see that the story isn't abandoned and that we may one day find out what's going to happen, over the year the story has advanced by literally half an hour at most. Ah well.
     
  10. Shinysavage

    Shinysavage Madman With A Box Prestige

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    Updated again, barely two months after the last one! It was...ok. Kinda the same as the last update; people reacting to what was essentially a prank in a chapter released about a year and a half ago. On the other hand, the author apparently hopes to finish it up over the summer, so anyone still interested might want to keep an eye out.
     
  11. Warlocke

    Warlocke Prisoner

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    Yeah. I was fairly surprised back when it updated after that long gap, and almost as much when it updated again so soon.

    I'm still waiting to see it regain its momentum but I'm cautiously optimistic.
     
  12. Shinysavage

    Shinysavage Madman With A Box Prestige

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    Another new chapter. It's another one that uses a lot of words to tell not a lot of story, but it does seem to be building to something now.
     
  13. Darth Kali

    Darth Kali Third Year

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    Somebody keep me posted, let me know if this is worth the bar study break, mmk?

    The premise seemed promising, but I could never get myself to actually click the link. Maybe I saved myself some trouble.
     
  14. Starwars

    Starwars Squib

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    My problem with this one is the odd characterization. Everybody just seems....off. I don't know how to explain it, these people just aren't the people they are in cannon. It's fan fiction, I know, but they're just wrong somehow, I don't know maybe I'm weird.
     
  15. Lukaskr

    Lukaskr Fourth Year

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    Yes you are.

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    Wow, can't believe this is still being updated, 10 years and going.
     
    Last edited: Oct 8, 2015
  16. Shinysavage

    Shinysavage Madman With A Box Prestige

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    Not that objecting to OOC-NESS isn't a valid complaint, but I can't help feeling that if you feel strongly about these things, a fic where Harry is adopted by a French-Indian Dark wizard warlord's family and thus changed in name, appearance and personality was never going to be the fic for you. Which is fair enough, perfectly valid, but that's probably how you'd explain it when reviving a thread for a review.
     
  17. Rubribreza

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    I was really hoping this was at least something of a good read judged by the amount of reviews and the not so boring summary, but it kind of flopped within the first chapter. I guess the outlandish-ness of the idea kind of killed it for me combined with the renaming of Harry into nothing less than Gabriel. Yeah, the summary said so, but reading it in the story was rather ughh.
    Nice writting style, good grammar and some great imagery were not enough to hold my attention. To continue reading it would be like eating an awfully tasting meal just because it is served on a nice looking silver plate. Sorry
     
  18. Stalin's Pipe Organs

    Stalin's Pipe Organs Auror

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    I really liked this fic 8 years ago...
     
  19. Seaftw

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    I'm not really a fan of an agressive, military Harry, but i have to admit that this story is pretty good. I'm hoping for an interesting and satisfying ending after such a long time...
     
  20. Shinysavage

    Shinysavage Madman With A Box Prestige

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    This reminded me that it updated the other day. I went to check it out...and realised that I'd read the update, and completely forgotten about it. Says a lot, I suppose.