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Complete Gentleman Usher of the Scarlet Rod By Heather Sinclair

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by Antivash, Jun 15, 2008.

  1. Heather_Sinclair

    Heather_Sinclair Chief Warlock

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    Okay, since I don't know specifically of which lore you speak I'll cover them all.

    Order of the Bath - An Order of Chivalry in England. They have like a dozen of these types of Orders. This particular one stands 3rd or 4th highest depending on who you ask. Very sought after in certain circles.

    The Four Treasures - Lore of Ireland. There is an actual sword in an Irish Museum that they claim is the real sword. Dunno about where the rest is. I am following the lore fairly close, but added a couple of things to pimp them up, and took away a couple of things to not make Super!Harry.

    Horror Elements:

    Mostly from the mind of H.P. Lovecraft et al. An American writer around the turn of the 20th century. Think of the Mythos as the "Shadowrun" of the time. Numerous authors wrote their own accounts of his universe.

    Necronomicon, The Hounds of Tindalos, The Great Old Ones, The Elder Gods, Miskatonic University, and others are all part of his Mythos. They are all true in the sense that they all have been written about in his books. Again I've taken certain liberties with the legends.

    I will be introducing one or two other elements into the mix. We won't be coming back to MU. It served its purpose already so there won't be 50 different things to remember concerning the mystery from this aspect.


    Anything I miss?

    Edit: Oh yes, the pegging ... well Harry is up on the latest thing and it is 2007 so yeah, lol, I had to add it.
     
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  2. eXcalite

    eXcalite Seventh Year

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    Wtf is pegging? (Besides my google translation)
     
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    A man lets a women take him up the ass with a strap-on...
     
  4. Heather_Sinclair

    Heather_Sinclair Chief Warlock

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    Perhaps I should have read more. I could not get past the meeting with the queen. She gives him a little reprimand and he is behaving like a kid with his hand in the cookie jar. I just hate the monarchy and any hereditary position or title so much, and any story where they are treated as more than the leeches on society that they are piss me off.

    But with all these rave reviews maybe I will give it another shot...
     
  6. Rainstorm

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    Isn't this a quote from Dr Who or did the writers steal it from somewhere else?

    Good job on the story, it's really fun to read. The banter, fighting and general atmosphere flow nicely and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
     
  7. eXcalite

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    I'll go out on my leg here and say that if it is indeed a quote from Doctor Who they probably quoted it from Lovecraft :D
     
  8. Heather_Sinclair

    Heather_Sinclair Chief Warlock

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    Bingo!

    It is from "The Hounds of Tindalos." by Long (c.1921 I think). Officially part of the Lovecraft Mythos. I can also say that the Hounds were never actually described fully in the story so that part is mostly me. The one thing I never liked about Lovecraft and the Mythos in general is the creatures were described mostly through the character's emotions and not with actual physically descriptive words. The line above is very consistent with the stories.
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  9. Seratin

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    Heather Sinclair is my new favorite member of DLP. That is all.
     
  10. MonCappy

    MonCappy Fifth Year

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    I've really enjoyed the banter between Harry and Padma. I look forward to the day they shag each other senseless.
     
  11. Sesc

    Sesc Slytherin at Heart Moderator

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    I heard Heather is going to write a special outtake on that one just for us.
     
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    Enjoying it so far. Nice to see a not-often-used pairing and a post-Voldemort story that has zilch to do with the epilogue or the rewriting thereof. :)

    However, a few things popped out at my tired eyes in chapter three.

    Patil became Patel at least once.

    Necronomicon was spelled Nerconomicon.

    A book was referred to as a tomb, rather than a tome (rule 36). Granted, if any book could double as a receptacle for the dead, it would be the Necronomicon, but... No. Just no.

    And Revealio should be Revelio.

    You may want to watch your comma usage, when you're separating part of a sentence from the rest.

    For instance, I would think that this: "The Dean at the time, Sir Arthur Trench discovered the whereabouts of the true Claiomh Solais."

    Should be this:
    "The Dean at the time, Sir Arthur Trench, discovered the whereabouts of the true Claiomh Solais.

    Of course, my spelling beats my punctuation any day of the week, so I could be mistaken.

    There was something else that I noticed, but I can't recall what it was.

    Time for sleep.
     
  13. Heather_Sinclair

    Heather_Sinclair Chief Warlock

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    Thank you for your compliments and thank you for spotting the badness that are my typos.

    This story currently has no beta as she is currently tied up with ULFD which I'm considering trashing because I'm on the 7th rewrite of the next chapter and I still can't get it right. And since this is turning out to be a much better idea I am inclined to do so post haste.


    @Seratin - Um, thanks? I have no idea what I did to deserve that, but okay. You're still not getting pics of my tits.

    @MonCappy - I like the banter too. It's much better than the sniping between Hr/R because you can actually see the underlying sexual attraction instead of just the flat out insults. You can look at H/P and say "they really need to shag." But look at the rating again, sugar. The most you are going to see is a heavy petting scene which is not really applicable to the storyline. It's not a romance. There will be a "sex scene" later in the story, but it will be pursuant to the plot. Until then there might be "morning after" scenes.


    @Sesc - (buzzer) sorry, baby. Lies, all lies. I've written Harry/Tonks porn before and it was lacking. Of course that was years ago. But you never know ... an omake might pop up here or there.

    Update: Trashed half of chapter 5 because it was seriously dragging. hopefully having it out by Monday. But the last time I said that it was out the next day. Don't you love when you are writing and suddenly you look up and you are done?
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  14. MonCappy

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    I am aware it isn't romance. In any case including a sex scene does not make the story a romance either. Besides, I am actually looking forward to the next appearance of the Hound of Tindalos. I do wonder is someone or something is sending out the hound.
     
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    Well, damn >_<

    First the cake, and now this. But I think I'll decide to still like you >_>

    On a side note, good to hear about the next chapter. On a second side note, even better to hear that an omake is not completely impossible. They must have still oil left over from that ceremony. Harry wants to use it on Padma, I just know it.
     
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  16. Seratin

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    I'm not in it for the tits. You've added to the pool of awesome Padma fics out there. That means you win.

    EDIT: I won't say no to a quick flash though...
     
  17. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    -__- you need to add an entry to that. One involving the unforgiveables.


    Firstly, The Killing Curse's name is horrifically simple to remember. It is not named after its incantation. Its named after what it does. It kills. How the fuck can you not remember that. D:

    The same of the Cruciatus Curse and the Imperious curse. They are not named after their incantations either.

    STOP THIS SHIT NOW.

    Uhg that pisses me off something fierce. FIERCE LIKE A FIERCE SNAKE! DX<

    Anyway... yus. Moar tits and Hannah plox! ^_^
     
  18. Heather_Sinclair

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    Thank you Vash. This is Number 2 on my personal list of peeves, second only to using 50 cliches in the first chapter of a story, and 3rd being the "Room of Requirements". I sometimes wonder if people read the same book that I read.

    I stick the 3 Unforgivables into this rule #2. I will never be "Avada Kedaveradeded, AK'd, Avada'd, nor will I be Crucioededed, and lastly there shall be no Impirioing. (Misspellings were on purpose)

    No tits for you either, baby. Though I will tell you that Hannah, and Su Li are making an appearance in Chapter 5. No warm-oil-lesbian-scene with Susan as of yet though.
     
  19. Chengar Qordath

    Chengar Qordath The Final Pony ~ Prestige ~

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    Well, one of the big theme's Lovecraft always brings up in his stories is that the monsters can't be described; they're so utterly alien that there are no words in any human language to describe them. Besides, considering the fact that a lot of Cthulu mythos monsters can drive you insane if you ever look at them it would be hard to come up with a description that would do such a monster justice.

    Since I'm a fair Lovecraft fan I'm enjoying this story, though I hope your ending is a little less dark than the Lovecraft standard; having Harry end up dead or in a mental asylum after seeing something that snapped his mind would be a bit of a letdown.
     
  20. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    LOL ... Awesome chapter. Not really a huge amount going on. But I do want to ask one clarifying question about the end of the chapter;

    So... Did he bang Greengrass or not? XD Lulz.