Title: Harry Potter and the Hallowed Lady
Author: TrunkMonkey
Rating: T
Words: 50k, WIP
Pairings: Harry, Hermione, (Fleur?)
Summary: In his fourth year at Hogwarts, Harry gains control of all three of the Deathly Hallows. As the master of Death herself, Harry finds himself aided by a willing and powerful servant who radically alters the path he carves through history.

Link: https://fanfiction.net/s/12337987/1/

On mobile so I'll be brief: give this fic a try. It's pretty decently written, gripping, and novel. The "mystery" is a bit obvious but comes with a real sense of threat and peril which is a refreshing change for this type of story.

Its main two flaws are things come a bit too easily for Harry (particularly in terms of getting around while he's supposed to be in school) and the pacing is a bit rushed, but in a fandom of never ending summers that isn't the worst sin. The other main flaw is probably the extent to which outlandish story elements are just accepted without question.

Still, a solid 3/5, possibly even a 4/5 if you consider it relative to the rest of current fanfiction. Currently on chapter three so can't say what happens after that.

 

Good fucking Lord, this is awful. It's a 2/5 at the most and I'm tempted even to lower that to a 1/5.

Not only is the premise itself absolutely ludicrous, but the execution leaves a lot to be desired.

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Disregarding the author's twisted attempt at novelty with an old and unwelcome cliche, Harry having a go at it with Dumbledore and actually escaping unscathed, more or less? No.

 

I agree with Odran. 2/5.

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Ignoring the biggest two problems - Dumbledore being the real Dark Lord and Death as an attractive girl that kisses Harry with selectively useful plot-related powers - there's too many points where the story is implausible.

McGonagall somehow convinces people that Harry owning a pet dragon is a good idea in two sentences. There's a convenient letter from Riddle to Dumbledore discussing their plans that Aberforth just hands over. The entirety of the interactions between Fleur and Harry. The way Harry approaches people when trying to convince them that Dumbledore is a Dark Lord. The fact that the Ressurection Ring had no protections other than what was on the ring itself at the Gaunt house. Hermione's contrived 'betrayal' of Harry.

And what sense of great peril are you talking about? Dumbledore seems fine with letting Harry run around plotting.

 

So I clicked the link and it said it was unsafe to proceed (hackers warning from google). So I manned up and proceeded anyway and its a dead link. Going by the first 2 reviews maybe I've been saved from something horrible?

 

So...

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the dragon is enraged by being chained up and imprisoned, but is perfectly happy to be shrunk to the size of an owl, if not smaller, and stick around as Harry's pet? That seems inconsistent.

The writing's solid enough, I suppose, but the pace is ridiculous. The first chapter alone covers the first task, Harry breaking into the Ministry, the Yule Ball, plus various character moments and the initial revelation of (one of) the big twist(s). That's a lot to get through in what I assume is about ten thousand words (five chapters, total just over 50K). Although I suppose it helps that Harry barely faces a challenge in his endeavours.

That said, the thing that finally made me roll my eyes and click out was the start of Unnecessarily Bitchy!Hermione and her apparent attempt to play Ron and Harry against each other, mixed in with what looked to be the early stages of some Ron bashing.

At best, I'd say this could be a guilty pleasure/bland time waster.

Also, on some admin notes, it's not actually by TrunkMonkey but by a friend of theirs called sylessae - published with permission, apparently.

 

It's not just you, something about the link (the lack of www. I presume) that Taure provided causes that to pop up for me as well. Here, if you still want to read it: Harry Potter and the Hallowed Lady

 

I couldn't get past the first chapter. Taure most of been drinking to read this crap.

 

It's that "s" in https. If you delete it, it suddenly works. As for the story, the whole shrinking dragon thing put me off. Dragons are supposed to be spell resistant, so not rated.

Wtf? I will assume this is a security measure of some sort.