Actually, the ending wasn't that bad. A bit anti-climatic ending, but since he's obviously been setting it up from the start, I can't say it feels wrong or ad-hoc (like JKR's attempt).

Corrupt British ministry was once again demolished by more progressive governments that are set up more to the author's liking, but overall, the political stuff wasn't too obnoxious. This time he at least skipped the 'making it all better' crap, that usually comes after 'tearing down the old system'.

Harry didn't have a grand final battle, but his fight against the assassin guy was IMO good enough to at least partially make that up. The way Harry handled him was very much within his abilities, if we take away the over-powered concept of wards.

I'd say DW is becoming a better writer with each new story, but this still isn't the best he could possibly become. Still looking forward to more of his stuff; even if its cringe-worthy at times, fast update rate, plenty of (usually) reasonable ideas and general anti-angst attitude make his work generally worth my time.

 

I'm kinda surprised this one isn't in the library, actually. Sure, Dumbledore is basically evil and Harry's departure ends up crippling the British magical world, but those stories can be fun to read if the writing is solid.

I don't even think it requires that much suspension of disbelief. The British wizarding government is rotten to the core in canon, and after Book 7 it's hard to think of Dumbledore as either kind or intelligent. He knew Harry would have to sacrifice himself all along, and he purposely made the kid suffer to give him that 'saving people thing.' He didn't even expect Harry to have a shot at living through it until Voldemort used Harry's blood in the ritual.

The way Dumbledore introduced the Hallows to the group was also stupid beyond belief. Correct me if I'm wrong, but don't they possess all three Hallows at the beginning of the story? So what's the point of distracting them from the horcrux hunt with his idiotic, inscrutable clues? Dumbledore is perhaps a touch over-the-top in this story, but it's not as if canon Dumbledore wasn't a cold-blooded manipulator with ridiculous plans.

At any rate, this story is good at building suspense and the action is good despite the lack of a confrontation with Voldemort. It's easy to root for Harry against all the absurdities he faces.

Easily 4/5

 

Oh Gods, this fic is the ultimate representation of how much Fail DW is.
Seriously. He's OK when it's just one-shots but his multi-chapter fics are nigh unreadable. 1/5

 

What actual conflict, if any, does Harry face? What actual challenges, if any, does Harry face? DW's plot in this story, and unfortunately other's, are sorely lacking in any sort of real existential dilemma or conflict or challenges for the protagonist. It's basically a story where everything goes right - where Harry cannot fail, where deus ex machina lurk behind every corner...

I was bored. I was not entertained. 2/5.