Title: Harry Potter and the Knight of St George
Author: StevenA
Rating: T
Summary: After HBP, Harry meets a new and mysterious guardian...one who will make him ready to face Voldemort. Rated T for violence and brief language but nothing really bad. COMPLETE.

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2653434/1/


One of the better post-HBP fics I have seen out there; basically Harry is trained by The Order of St. George, an Anti-Dark muggle organisation founded by St.George to combat evil.

Guns, fighting, and loads more.
Ship is: HHr

Give it a go; it's written excellently, and although a bit mushy at parts (HHr), it's enjoyable. Complete, with 35 chapters and 95004 words.

 

Kind of weird. Skimmed some chapters, and found too many Ginny/OMC moments, give it a whirl if you want, but didn't see anything special.

 

It is quite well written but....meh it's ok. Kinda cliched but ok.

 

I like the St. George order bit, there's been myths for along time that the catholic church does have secret sects working for them, taking it into the occult world is something I've only ever seen the movie "Vampires", do.

Random things I didn't like included:

Fleur's accent made me cringe, Ginny was horrible, they were both drooling so hard over the guy it wasn't funny, at least the author made her out to be a shallow whore. The monk running his hands all over the dishes looking for wires was stupid, he's supposedly best friends with a wizard, hunts demons/dark critters, and he's astonished by self cleaning plates? When a vampire moves so fast you can hardly see, does he stand there and gawk in suprise?

Continuity problem, he writes Bill told Lupin all about his plans, then Lupin doesn't know what Sean has to do with Harry. Lupin deserves to be forcefed silver for the "brightest witch in her age" bit. The "lure him out for one final battle" bit

The bit with the Order having all the lost Horcruxes just wiped the story out for me. The horcruxes are magical, would be protected by magic like the others, yet muggles who are "astonished" by dishes cleaning themselves managed to get them all save the snake and Voldie?? Sorry that was a story killer for me.

Um... what happened to Hermione/Ron? H/Hr fall in deeply love in under a week

Sean goes from total stranger to bitchslapping Harry for swearing? Then you get next chapter they're infront of a creek, and Harry masters clearing his mind thanks to running water.. by that logic should he of had his mind clear in the morning while he was taking a leak or a shower?

I'll leave it there at chapter 10. It's sadly one of the better post HBP stories, but it's simply average when compared to some of the better Post-OOTP fics. Part of the problem is pathetic source material to work off of (HBP) and the other is the fic itself. It has spots that make you go back and reread areas when the author forgets he just mentioned something and then contradicts it paragraphs later, but overall it's good enough for a quick read.

If the guy goes back and fixes the way he writes speech so each dialogue line has it's own line anstead of bunching tons of it together, leaving you to reread multiple times to figure out who's talking, and adds in a few sanity checks, it might approach above average.

I've skipped to the end and I can honestly say.. my brain hurts from reading the last 6 chapters.

 

It was ok for the first few chapters... Then I hit this cliche riddled paragraph that just turned me off to the fic. I mean seriously, one or two general HP related cliches are acceptable... But this many romance related cliches all in one paragraph... Well thats just unnacceptable. Read the quoted section below and you will see what I mean.

 

As soon as i'd had two lines of that appaling french accent attempt it lost me completely. This person has clearly never heard a french person speak. If you can'd write accents Accept it and don't try
And the whole oh Harry i love you even though you've only just broken up with Ginny and I was all over ron a week ago shit was the nail in the coffin.

 

-Chokes-

 

I've read this fic in the past. Midknight basically hit upon all the problems I had with the fic. I reread a couple chapters before I decided to post my review as my opinion about it may of changed but:

Fraunch? That a new language?

As much as I dislike Fanon Ginny, did she develop a stuttering problem?

Male Veela looks? No

This however is win.

Also, Harry and Hermione being in love that quickly? Random

Honestly, there are more words to describe someone over and over then Cavalier.

This is wrong beyond belief.
Finally, Harry using guns and such when he has a wand? No Thank You

This isn't a story that deserves a 1/5 but it is definitely not Library or Recycle Bin worthy. 2/5

 

I've read this story few years ago. Apart from Mary Sue character, Ginny's character and unbeliavabe H/HR romance it's original.

Sword vielding Harry with a ponytail is an unoriginal concept and the whole friendship with Sean is unrealistic.

Because this is one of few stories that tries to explain whole chest monster thing:
2/5