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Harry Potter and the Other Path by Cocobolo - M

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Cocobolo, Oct 6, 2008.

  1. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    I wouldn't pick this up if you paid me. Well...if you didn't pay me at least 4 figures. Eye-gouging anyone?
     
  2. Cocobolo

    Cocobolo Squib

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    Why bother commenting then? Clearly you haven't read the fic (fair enough, it may not be your cup of tea) so why waste the spite and bile you've had to hawk up for your little review?

    I don't care about people reading the fic (or a chapter or two of it) then saying it's shit or worthless or written by a child. Thats what reviews are. What you have done is not review. What you have done is use the annonimity of the internet to mindlessly insult me.

    Unless you have some actual constructive criticism (like some of the nice people on this site), or at the very least informed critisism then could you kindly shut the fuck up.
     
  3. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    His issue is probably that there has to be a basic respect for the readers, meaning not botching canon names and terms to excess like you have.
     
  4. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Nice people? Here? Are you on some form of prescription medication? Based on your writing style, possibly to treat your Dyslexia?
     
  5. kevo125

    kevo125 Second Year

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    Harry Potter and The Other Path by Cocobolo- M

    Ive been reading this for awhile now and for an AU story its pretty good
    I give it a 4/5
     
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  6. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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  7. Cxjenious

    Cxjenious Dark Lord

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    Wow, gaytastical? SIgh... should I even try to read it? Andro shares my tastes - I trust his judement.
     
  8. cold burn

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    Steetrat!harry? seriously? Like his life wasn't angsty enough the way J.K. set things up, lets have him fighting and struggling with criminals on he streets of london where he outsmarts the various criminals and corrupt cops in a humorous manner! then proceeds to prank everyone in existence while angsting about his horrid life through cynicism and snark. Why I cannot contemplate anything so thought provoking and awesome. Except perhaps a soulbond romance....
     
  9. Matian

    Matian Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Ignoring the fact it's posted on HPFF.net for a moment, I think I'm gonna jump on the bandwagon here and not read it. Also, abused!Harry and Marauder!Harry? Not exactly my favorite !Harry genres, in fact I can't really see them mesh very well.

    Sorry mate.
     
  10. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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    MERGED THE DUPE FOR REVIEW THREAD.

    kevo125, you're brand spanking new here and your first act is to post a dupe thread of a fic that didn't make the library the first time. Not great.

    You're off to a rocky start. Read the stickies, check the site for dupes, introduce yourself, lurk more, etc...

    Haven't read the fic, so no comment. Let's lay off ripping the newbie a new asshole and limit comments around here to the fic in question.

    And by that I mean try reading the actual fic before expressing your opinion on the summary or others' comments.

    Thanks Andro for the dupe check and breaking out the term gaytastical.
     
  11. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter ⭐⭐

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    Just read through the first several chapters.

    First thing to comment on is that many of the spelling mistakes pointed out in this thread are still present, such as "Rubious" in the first chapter and "Weasly" in the third. This is extremely irritating. I did see "Weasley" spelled properly at least once though, so perhaps the author made a half-hearted attempt to fix things and simply missed a few. We may never know.

    Apart from the spelling issues, how is the story? Well, to be honest I think it belongs over on this thread. (That's the "Almost Recommended Fanfiction Thread" for those of you who don't want to click.) It could be used to kill a few hours if you are really bored, but it's not actually good. It's not unreadable either though.

    One of the most irritating things is the "New Marauder Harry" that we get. Harry wasn't a prankster in the books, so if he's going to be one in a fanfiction story I want to see some sort of reason for it. None is given. Oh sure, he grew up on the streets and can juggle, great, but nothing is shown or explained about his character that indicates he'd want to be a big prankster at school. So it just doesn't fit and it pisses me off. Doesn't help that they named themselves the New Marauders. The author at least attempts to explain the thrifty Harry by using his background, so I can deal with him not wanting to buy anything new.

    Other than that it's just really full of the less interesting cliches. Like Harry talking smack to Malfoy on the train when Malfoy doesn't know who he is and saying something cool that let's him "win" the confrontation. Well, I suppose the "Harry climbs up a chimney in Malfoy's huge private room at Hogwarts and gets shot at with the conjunctivitus curse while doing it but just happened to have a jar of Doxies in his pocket to throw them off the scent" scene wasn't cliche'd, but it still didn't impress.

    There are some good parts I suppose. Harry's parents were "comfortable, not rich" which was a nice change from the standard "too rich to be believable" fare. Harry also took the time to read all of his school books before going to Hogwarts but, in an interesting twist, this didn't actually mean he knew everything when he showed up in class. He says something along the lines of there being a lot more to learn than just what he got out of the books. Also appears that the Dursley abuse wasn't overly excessive as all Harry has mentioned is that he got slapped if he didn't have food ready on time.

    So yeah, some good parts, but I've just realized that the "good parts" I'm pointing out in this story are more like examples of how the author didn't screw up certain things. There's nothing new and interesting that's done well.

    If that's the best thing I can find to say about a story then it's not that good. I can't even say that the writing itself is all that engaging and makes the story easy and fun to read despite the lackluster aspects.

    So I'll rate this at 2.5/5, and on deciding whether or not to round up or down... in this case I think I have to round down. Just doesn't have enough going for it. 2/5

    I should also admit that I only read the first 6 chapters and then parts of later chapters to try and see if the writing improved. Didn't see anything impressive.
     
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