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Harry Potter and the Vampire's Kiss by pureb99 - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by the13thdragon, Mar 19, 2008.

  1. the13thdragon

    the13thdragon Raptured to Hell

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    Title: Harry Potter and the Vampire's Kiss
    Author: pureb99
    Rating: T
    Genre: Adventure/General
    DLP Category: Dark Arts
    Pairing:hp/oc
    Status: Work in Progress (Currently on Hiatus)
    Summary: AU post OoTP. Harry's summer after Sirius' death is horrible. None of his friends write to check up on him and his life begins to seem empty and meaningless. Harry wishes for death and a young Vampire grants him it. NOT SLASH

    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3464308/1/Harry_Potter_and_the_Vampires_Kiss

    I looked everywhere for this fic and couldn't believe it was not here so I added it, it is quite original and contains lots of Ginny bashing.

    <O:p</O:p
    <O:p</O:p
    The plot revolves around Harry being turned by a vampire that he thinks is Tonks when he is about to kill himself and who he then falls in love with (this is a bit sudden but its not too bad) Harry then gets he training he needs to be powerful in a rather unique manner and returns to Hogwarts where half the school sides with Harry and the other half (including Ginny) decide he’s an evil dark wizard. Things escalate to the point of groups of students fighting each other in classes but unfortunately this is where it stops and the author has shown no sigh of taking it up again.



    Ah yes is I was just reminded anout the suicidal Harry bit at the beginning is terrible but it does get better.<O:p</O:p
     
    Last edited: Mar 19, 2008
  2. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    So, the only setting is Hogwarts?
     
  3. the13thdragon

    the13thdragon Raptured to Hell

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    No not really, theres a far bit in Privit Drive and then two years that are sort of skipped over somwhere else, but then the rest is at Hogwarts.
     
  4. The Mysterious Nobody

    The Mysterious Nobody Auror

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    PHAIL.
     
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  5. Viper

    Viper Fourth Year

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    I hate you.

    Read this one long before.Too much angst in the first part.

    When he becomes a vampire, he is technically dead and therefore can visit his parents and Sirius whenever he wants. They begin training him and the vampire chick in various things. Harry's animagus form is a winged demon, whereas the Vampire's form is a black phoenix with a skull for a head. Later on, Sirius's relatives train him in Necromancy. Even Merlin is involved in his training somewhere, I think.

    Overall, it didn't impress me that much. I just read it for the Ginny bashing and for some violent Harry.

    3/5
     
  6. hchan1

    hchan1 Sixth Year

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    Grammar/spelling is god-awful, Harry alternates between being mind-numbingly emo and CAPS LOCK ANGER HULK SMASH, and Harry/OC hook up and find twu wuv in the first chapter. Utter fail in all respects. 0/5.
     
  7. Richard

    Richard Supreme Mugwump

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    Could have been written a hell uva lot better. Its rather bad. Not even worth a rating.
     
  8. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Wow.......just.....wow. Massive freakin' FAIL. Everything in this story is fail.
     
  9. yhelo

    yhelo Sixth Year

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    Holy fuck, kill it with fire.
     
  10. NightFox

    NightFox Seventh Year

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    "It burns us."

    1/5 - If every male was as lucky as this Harry Potter, the world would be several times larger. Not many guys can get such a loyal, loving, amazingly powerful, and simply immortal girl from a trip to the local park.
     
  11. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    It's hard to comprehend how much fail can be compressed into a single fic. :(
     
  12. Kyrissean

    Kyrissean First Year

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    You should've just said yes. I read your summary of the fic and became interested, then I read Blaze Ranger's spoilers.

    Thank you, everyone, - except 13th - for not allowing me to waste my time.

    -_-

    The fact that Ranger's not entirely sure if Merlin trained him or not speaks volumes, especially as Merlin is usually a generic copy of Dumbledore with a different persona. With a large, gnarled staff. I suppose both of his staff's would be gnarled at his age, even if he is a spirit.

    When's someone going to write a fanfiction where Merlin is actually some crime-against-nature combination of a House Elf, Goblin and maybe a sliver of Centaur for good measure? He could even have a pot of gold he carries around and starts fights over, even though noone ever tries to steal it... because, you know, he's so fucking ugly. <_<

    Hey, it could work.

    Edit: Suffer my inane ramblings.
     
  13. LightLess

    LightLess First Year

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    This is just stupid. First they explain it in a way that a vampire that can do magic is almost unheard off and harry is extremely powerful because he can do both.
    Than some chapters later we discover that severus snape is a vampire.

    Edit:
    Ok, about snape being a vampire: it was somehow explained but I still think it was lame.

    lol, I'm not really sure what lame means, but I like this word as a depreciating adjective.


    There's a lot of stupidities like that.

    sorry, english is not really my language...
     
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  14. KenderCleric

    KenderCleric Lord of Plot Bunnies

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    As a general rule I auto-fail any fic that references Vampires in the summary, but I went ahead and stupidly gave this one a shot. This "story", and I use the term loosely, is a perfect example of why. There is nothing about this thing that in any way makes up for the lost minutes of my life. :wall:

    1/5
     
  15. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    What?! Why? Vampires are awesome.

    But this, this is not.
     
  16. Vengashii

    Vengashii Banned

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    [04:07:33] Vengashii: Harry's summer after Sirius' death is HORRIBLE. NONE of his friends write to check up on him and his life begins to seem EMPTY and MEANINGLESS. Harry wishes for DEATH because his heart is like a BLACK VOID, and he begins to cut himself, like the emo bitch he has turned into, until, one night, a VAMPIRE turns up and grants him his wish - to coach a peewee hockey team!
     
  17. Darius

    Darius 13/m/box

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    Vampires in HP are generally not.

    In fact...I can't think of any Vamp harry fics that are good.
     
  18. Vengashii

    Vengashii Banned

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    I can't even remember a vampire even showing up in canon - just talked about.
     
  19. Neo2b

    Neo2b First Year

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    There was one at Slughorn's party, if I remember correctly.
     
  20. scaryisntit

    scaryisntit Death Eater

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    You remember correctly.
     
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