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Complete Harry Potter and the Wastelands of Time by this_old_dance (joe6991) - M

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Oz, Feb 25, 2008.

  1. Joe

    Joe The Reminiscent Exile Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Spamming ma story!!??! You banned, brah, you banned.

    Skimming ma story!!??!? Eh, you'll see some plot in this coming chapter, I reckon. There's a whole lot of progression because there's not much more I can do with Atlantis that won't involve a whole load of primarily useless filler.
     
  2. naidrodro

    naidrodro Fourth Year

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    Been reading this story for months, and even posted in WBA a few times. It's the only post-HBP plot I can actually read.(Mainly due to the complete lack of horcrux references)

    It is getting slightly repetitive, but I think it will start to get better in the next 3 chapters or so.
     
  3. MellowYellow

    MellowYellow Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    There is some horcrux references. I believe it's when Harry first meets up with Dumbledore in Rome.
     
  4. Ragon

    Ragon Dark Lord

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    Also in Chapter 20

    And its really post OotP with elements of HPB and DH.
     
  5. Innomine

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    What about that conversation with Fleur in America?

    Horcruxes mentioned there too.
     
  6. Joe

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  7. Bucks

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    The suspense is killing me. Damn you and your cliffhangers. :(
     
  8. Moeed

    Moeed Third Year

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    He really is hateful!!
    But seriously the little nagging thought that the story just might take a turn for the worse since its at that point,got ripped into pieces with this one :).
     
  9. jpdt19

    jpdt19 Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    Words cannot express my awe, appreciation and annoyance at the cliffahgner :D

    Amazing!
     
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    I'm now regretting my decision to open the link and spoil the cliffhanger. I really hope his death went according to Harry's plan, since the ending was so ambivalent.

    You sure sped up the plot. The span of the chapter didn't feel like enough space for Voldemort to worry over the explosion of last chapter. Besides this note, I didn't catch much else of dissatisfaction.
     
  11. Magus

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    Joe, if I had one criticism of your otherwise flawless work, its that I feel that you've started to overuse the stylistic trait of italicising words to highlight them within a sentence. It just comes off as a bit over-dramatic.

    Some examples:
    From of Harry and Harry:
    It just seems to me that in many cases Harry's emotion would be carried just as well without the additional inflection on particular words. The deadpan delivery can be just as good at conveying inflection as the stressed italicised delivery.

    By the way you're still awesome.
    :awesome:awesome:awesome:awesome:awesome/:awesome:awesome:awesome:awesome:awesome
     
  12. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    I swear the best ending ever would just be, Harry wasn't supposed to die. Game over.

    What will happen is part of a plan. It sounds like it, and considering how epic awesome Harry is, it is a plan.
     
  13. Joe

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  14. capo327

    capo327 Sixth Year

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    Gah, more distractions from my research paper. Luckily it wasn't too long this time. Good chapter, but I was really expecting some rape there at the end. I didn't know about the new crossover. I'll read that when I get back home today. Last day of finals, yay!
     
  15. Joe

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    Voice of the Nephilim Death Eater DLP Supporter

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    Once again, spectacular work Joe. While the build-up to Harry and Fleur's shining moment was indeed long, the payoff was well done.

    I'm still not completely sure why Fenrir's presence so much. Was it because of his ability to find the ship where the rest of Harry's entourage was, because of his acute sense of smell? And why didn't Fenrir's bite carry the werewolf infection?

    These are nitpicks though. Great work.
     
  17. Jjf88

    Jjf88 Auror

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    In canon, Werewolf bites are only infectious if they are transformed. Since he was human, it would only partially transfer some traits over, such as the hunger for raw meat (That was in Book 6 I believe) so I presume its the same here?
     
  18. Andro

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    Joe, your sack of epic is bottomless.
     
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    Lumnox Second Year DLP Supporter

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    Agreed, it seems each chapter just has a level of epicness and awesome that I feel can never be topped...only 'til your next chapter where you somehow manage to best yourself
     
  20. Joe

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    As stated below, and as seen in canon, Fenrir has a taste for human flesh even when he's not transformed. But it doesn't carry the infection. His presence was original thinking on Voldemort's part, something to keep Harry on his toes, and for all that matters I did kill him off this chapter. Cheers, mate.



    Damn right it is!

    Ha, now this can present certain problems. My initial run of HP stories got so epic that anything that happened no longer mattered anymore, because it was all too big. I'm trying to keep Wastelands on a tighter leash, make it more about the people than the epic scale of the story, but cracks are showing. That's half the reason this story needs to be wrapped up, and soon.
     
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