Oops, so used to stupid AN's that I just ignore them now.

 

I like it. Kind of wish it was a Tyrannosaurus, though. They're bigger than Allosauruses. Also, considering that Harry has apparently grown up in the wild, it's kind of strange that he didn't just carry off what he considered an "extremely pretty girl." I dunno, maybe he just didn't want to give everyone a reason to chase.

4/5

Edit: Does anyone know what the feathered predictors were? Raptors? I heard they had feathers.

 

The Velociraptor - now with feathers!

 

Eh, this story so far doesn't work for me. I just can't relate to the characters when one is going to be such a drag to deal with socially. Yeah - growing up with Dinosaurs is cool - but I kind of doubt he'll be winning a spelling bee. I foresee 7-9 chapters of Fleur trying to tame Harry - "Non, you must place the 'i' before 'e' except after 'c.'"

So far this story is roughly a 2/5 for me. The spelling is decent, however I feel utterly disconnected from the plot.

 

Courtesy of wikipedia, the species Velociraptor mongoliensis:

Jurassic Park Velociraptors are actually based on a larger species called Deinonychus.

 

Awesome. Chickens sure have come down in the world.

 

Yep. From 12ft long flesh-tearing, bone rending, intelligent, killing machines... to mindless birds that eat nothing but seeds.

 

Wasn't a huge fan of the scene with Bill in chapter 4 that was ripped straight out of The Last Crusade. Dude even gave Bill his fucking hat.

Was rather lame.

 

I honestly didn't think of that when I first read it, Howdy, thanks for the reminder.

 

Meh. If only the dinosaur had been a T-Rex flying a fighter jet.

 

Yeah, I had to stop after this. Up until that point the story was a little meh but somewhat enjoyable, but when I got to that blatantly ripped off scene I said "fuck this shit".

2/5

 

I didn't mind it too much. Honestly, I see a few problems that will most likely make this story unreadable later on, such as Harry's reintegration back into Human society. Also, I just can't see this being continued on long after his initial plot bunny of "Harry makes a Dinosaur friend" has run out of steam.

 

Dinosaurs? Really? You had all the mythology of the entire world to pick and choose from and you went with Dinosaurs? And a Allisaurous name 'Allie' of all things to boot?

I mean, really?

Hydra, Quetzalcoatl, Some form of giant snake perhaps? Also, why the hell would harry come back now? he and 'allie' have the eggs, their former nest is obviously insecure, they escape back into the river and vanish forever.

Oh wait, no doubt harry won't be able to stop thinking about his 'angel' now and will have a 'Monster in his chest' whenever he does. Or Perhaps their soulmates now?

and finally, dinosaurs, despite being non magical, have a better spell resistance than dragons? Dinosaur skin can stop dragon's breath with only scorching? Harry is JUGGLING a stunner? Is none of this setting off alarm bells for anyone else?

3 at best unless there is a rather massive explanation on the way. personally I'd say more like a 2.2,

...But then I can't deny that despite the massive glaring plotholes it's pretty well written, so Giving them the benefit of the doubt.

3/5 (rounding up)

 

Jurassic Park Rawr!..fail. Where is the drama? Where is the gore? Where are the raptors? The DNA/egg incubators? The hunters? The Spinosaur! Grawwwwww! and the Power Rangerrssss! I demand satisfaction for this epic failure.

...interesting plot though. 3/5

 

It was obvious from the beginning that it was a dinosaur, and "Allie" immediately gave away the species as Allosaurus. That's besides the point, though. The dinosaur!sister thing is not going to work in the long-term, and just the very idea of having dinosaurs in general is merely a novelty that is very quickly losing its amusement factor. 3/5 at best.

P.S. Delamort? What a horrible name...is Tom Riddle secretly related to the Delacours?

 

It's a horrible pun based on the French de la mort (meaning 'of death'), in the same vein same Vol de mort means 'Flight from death'. In effect Lord Delamort is Lord of Death. As I said, a horrible pun.

 

4/5

Somehow, Harry and Fleur in this story reminds me of Tarzan and Jane. I await Harry's encounter with Charlie. Somehow it strikes me odd that dinosaurs will appear in GB without anyone notice given the country's high population density. I have high hopes of some crazy animal sex between Harry and Fleur.

 

Shadetz X totally gets this story.

Are things plausible? Not really. Is there an antagonist? No, not yet. But there are a slew of reasons to keep an eye on this fic - and not just for the dinosaur. First of all, I seriously doubt Harry will turn out to be a bitch. Of course, I've been wrong about things like this before, but thus far the author has kept things surprisingly light, considering the shit Harry has gone through. Secondly, Fleur.

Certainly this is nothing compared to DLP's best author's works, but we can't expect every story in the library to compare. What this story does have is originality, above average writing, a masculine main character, an interesting potential love interest and a plot that hasn't quite developed yet. With those things in mind, it's tough (for me at least) to give it less than a 4.

And I just noticed that this is like the third time I've posted trying to convince you all that this story is legit. I'll try to make it the last.

 

Wow. I don't know why I didn't see that, myself. Thanks for the insight; I'll continue think it's horrible, but at least there's some logic behind it.

Averis: While I agree that every story doesn't have to be super-awesome, I still think having dinosaurs provides a short-term amusement factor. I guess we'll just have to wait and see if the author can do better.