Title: Harry Potter Hitwizard
Author: DobbyELfLord
Rating: T
Genre: Humour/Adventure
DLP Category: Independant
Pairing: Mentions of Harry/Various, nothing heavy.
Words: 27,539
Published: December 19, 2010
Status: Oneshot (Sequel)
Summary: One-shot sequel to Harry Potter - Mercenary Two years have passed and now Harry is back for a bit of revenge.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6568694/1/Harry_Potter_Hit_Wizard


Fun fic to read. Perhaps not of JBern quality or the like, but still a fair cut above the vast majority of shite to be found nowadays. Couple of cliches, but nothing horrendously overplayed. Had me grinning through most of the story. A nice little time waster. 3.5/5


The Prequel can be found here:

Title: Harry Potter Mercenary
DLP-Thread: https://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=10951&highlight=6568694
ff.net-Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4544334/1/


Checked by Minion, July 29, 2013

 

Technically this has already been posted:
http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=10951&highlight=dobbyelflord&page=3
Though it wasn't really in the appropriate manner.

As for the story, I give it a solid 4/5. It's pretty good, gave the story a better conclusion and generally a good time waster.
Only flaw I see would be the pairing, which always creeps me out.

 

ah, didn't realise. Just Searched the author's name before posting, didn't go through the Mercenary thread. Cheers anyway.

 

Different story, Different thread is fine.

4/5

Better than average if an obvious follow-on story.

 

I liked it myself. I thought it was pretty good. 4/5 from me.

 

This definitely doesn't belong in the Library. Every single character in here was stale; classic bitch!Hermione, evilforthegreatergood!Dumbledore, perfect!Harry, the only different thing about it was that Ron wasn't stupid and jealous of Harry's power/prestige.

The only somewhat redeeeming quality is that it is readable with decent grammar.

2/5

 

A quote from Andy "Cretin" Warhol to start things off and then I read this:

Who uses numbers in the middle of prose? Then four paragraphs later, bam, "over 9000 galleons" or words to that effect. Then as Perfection pointed out it descended into a incoherent mess of stale clichéd characterizations, JBern references and parselmouth magic.

Not for me.

2/5

 

It wasn't as amusing as the first one, but it was still pretty decent. I give this one a 4/5

 

Better than average.

 

If I was going to rate this based on objective quality, it'd be about a 3/5. I went into this knowing DobbyElfLord's writing style, I knew what to expect, and I was chuckling throughout. Some of the cliches were annoying, but frankly they don't grind my gears hugely, and I liked that the final pairing was hinted at throughout but never really took center stage.

If we used half points, it'd be 4.5/5, but I'd say 4/5 overall. It's not a great story, but I had fun reading it.