Because this is fanfiction, and the beauty of fanfiction lies in me being able to improve my writing without having to spend a majority of my time inventing a shit load of back stories and wasting a LOT of my time researching them so they sound credible; this is all without getting paid for it, of course.

I'm surprised you're the only person who's picked up on the Casino Royale reference, though, the only real thing I took from that movie was the little analyzing scene with Fleur. I've always loved Poker, long before Casino Royale, and I'm fairly certain satellite imagery was used before it too (and my reason, I think, is much different than James' for using it).

 

Any hope of Nazi tyrannosaurs?

 

Nazi tyrannosaurs would be epic. Just because of that I'm gonna read Samuri Cat.

 

Have you read Harry Potter at all? What would you think if Rowling would 'create' a huge lizard-y beast that spits fire and wouldn't call it a Dragon? It would be fucking stupid. Sure, she put her own twist to it - but the same applies here.

 

Though you miss a bit of the "in" humor of the series, you can go straight to the last book, Samurai Cat Goes to Hell, to get your fill of Nazi tyrannosaurs. It's almost as great a book as the first, The Adventures of Samurai Cat.

Tomokato ftw.

 

lolwhut?!

I'm going to now check out Samurai Cat, cos' I didn't know such epic winnery existed. I'd better not be disappointed.

 

That's rather ridiculous. Turn that around and call the huge fire breathing lizard Godzilla. Does it have the same effect? Doubt it.

There's a difference between taking an idea that's pervasive throughout the genre and history and many different cultures like dragons, and taking something that only exists in one universe like Soul Caliber or Godzilla. When you do the latter of these it can only reflect on that one object, and that object's specific story, unlike dragons, which you still have to describe and provide information for.

"Oh shit, Godzilla!"

"Oh shit, it's a dragon!"

With the first you have a clear idea of what you're up against (provided you know what Godzilla is). With the second, I'm sure a picture popped into your head, but it certainly won't be the same as the picture in my, or anyone else's head. That's the difference.

 

I fucking love this video, it seems to fit the current mood of this thread.

 

Are you going to keep posting that video?

 

Yep.. fucking epic

 

And it is update. Will edit once I've read it.

 

I finally updated . . . though I don't know how someone beat me to this post . . . I literally came straight here after posting it.
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They're watching you like hawks, 24/7. That's how.

 

Way to many praises to one James Potter in this chapter. And I just wasn't feeling the suspense. Fleur was too angsty in this chapter. I mean, it has only been 3 weeks. She seemed like she was on withdrawl.

 

New chapter was good. Not amazing, as not much happened, but it was good for a set-up chapter.

Also, I never thought I'd see myself write this regarding a HP fanfic, but I miss Quidditch. You did it quite well.

 

Thanks for updating Mr. Joe.

The new chapter was good. I like how Harry and Dumbledore worked together and tried to see if Mood was a imposter or not, and what happened to Longbottom was a funny, where McGonagall had to see Longbottom with his hand down in his pants.

Fleur was too angst in this chapter, and a bit depressed from the way her school work is suffering. Yes Harry and she did not talk for 3 weeks, but Fleur getting withdrawn, seems to make her desperate I think.

Way too much fluff from Archie and Stephanie, Ahh...missed the good old days when Stephanie used to bitch about Archie.


I give this chapter 3/5.

 

I thought the way Fleur was acting was surprisingly accurate. From girls I've been friends with, they usually start freaking out if the guy hasn't called them for four days. At three weeks, they'd be a wreck.

Pretty dry chapter, over all. But then again, it was just a set up chapter so I expected that. The Chimera fights should be intresting.

This chapter is 3.5/5, and the story over all was 4/5

 

The thing is, the reason why Harry was supposed to like Fleur was because she isn't one of those kind of girls.

 

I agree. Harry had thought that Fleur was a bimbo like his other fan girls when they first met, but she surprised him with her intelligence and to be able to stand around him when his being crude and swearing, and be able to join in the conversation without getting offended. And now she's pinning after him, it seems to be OOC (Out of Character) for her after all Fleur Delacour does not Pine after men and she isn't a slut like Rhona who spreads her legs willingly.

 

Moody gave himself away a bit too easily. Running off to Dumbledore and ranting out made little sense, especially since he was already weary of his cover being blown (which was why he didn't try to break those wards for Neville).

IMO there were better ways to expose Moody; like sneaking into his room at night and watching him sleep, or outright blackmailing him ("I know what you are, imposter. Give me XXX super-rare books from Voldemort's collection and I'll keep quiet"). This plan was just too likely to fail and it seems contrived it didn't.

As for the love plan, things are pretty good. I'm still not sure if Harry's truly ignorant about Fleur of if he's intentionally stringing her on, out of amusement, but both solutions have their ups and downs.

Dumbledore seemed (and still seems) a bit too uninterested in Harry. He should have already started cultivating a relationship with someone of his apparent potential. Also, the dialogue in the office wasn't all that great; it missed that funny overtone most your other dialogues have.

One trend I noticed is you're expanding your plot to Voldemort/Neville conflict more than before; for the first time we actually see Voldemort's and Neville's sides of the main plot, instead of just following Harry as he figures it out and resolves it in one strike. I'm not sure if this is positive or not; if you're not planning to prominently feature Voldemort/Neville conflict, then perhaps it might be best not to tangle yourself into it too much?