Indeed.

But it's difficult to write Intelligent!Harry or Anti-Social!Harry since so many don't experience these virtues.

This story started off ok but since then...nuff said.

Makes me want to get onto writing my Harry/ Fleur fic...I have so many plot-bunnies they're becoming rabid >.>

Regards
Aerin

 

I know how you feel, I'd probably be able to write a story, I just hate fact that I'd need a beta.

This story is still decent, but there's nothing special. Nothing that makes me looking forward to the next chapter.

 

You know, there was this crossover with Artimes Frowl. It's a one shot i think. In this fic it consists of genius like Voldermort and Hermoine (she isn't a genius in the fic) as well as Artimes.

The fic it self gives the atmosphere like Death Note. And if you read Death Note, then you would understand what i mean. Harry here is described as a leashed dog, canon version along with Ron. Hermoine however is the main character, and as much as it pains me to admit it, the author has done this very well. And i have to give it to the author for another extra point because he showed us genius in it's true form.

I can't find the fic but it's well written and the author seems to understand what a genius is, what it is to be in all it's true form. I was more than impressed. If anyone finds it, send me a mail.

Also, i gotta apologize to Taure. sigh i feel like a jack ass. You can bitch slap me anytime.

 

Chapters 22 and 23 are up. 23 is a one huge monster. Quidditch Cup is over.

 

I really like this fic.. very unique harry almost the same with the authors naruto-character persona.. 5/5 for this one ja!

 

What are you apologising for? I'm confused.

 

I have to admit, even Im not a fan of super harry who has everything he wants, this fic I like very much plus its a harry/fluer which is a bonus. I give this a 4/5, I agree, dont understand whats with the guitar and harry playing as the author thought it was 'cool', but the rest its good, its different from other AU, plus steph and archie, the are the fews mary sues character I like, they have thier flaws and they are not perfect, plus I like they way this MS character didn't appear in like harry 5th or 6th year - like they normally do, they were there from the beginning and plus the characters has developed and I like the interaction with Harry. Also the author updated and its big chater at 17,000, I also like the quidditch matches, the fic has pretty much everything you expect, humour, angst, action, and so on. I also enjoyed when archie ripped in snape, 4/5,

 

Well the last two chapters were a lot better. Finally Fleur comes into the picture

 

It's like the junk food of fanfic, it's fun to read a ridiculous super harry who goes around pwnaging people.

It started out too horrible to read but improved substantially. Then every once in a while when you start thinking it's actually somewhat good he'll throw in a sudden occurance of everyone saying "fo shizzle my mudbizzle" or some SeriouslyEmotionalGuitarPlaying. The surprise is half the fun.

 

So, it's finally a Harry/Fleur story. I bet the author will make Harry take another 25 chapters for him to be attracted to her. Meh.

Pairing aside, the story is probably going to lose a lot of its appeal. I think the author has peaked in terms of his being able to turn cliché into something entertaining. From the moment the vampiress' huge sword was introduced, it reeked of Soul Calibur - and I wasn't disappointed (then again, I was disappointed, in this case). Everything else got too predictable as well: Archie/Stephanie angst, Fleur's attitude, Sirius the Player, Dementors being pwnd by Fiendfyre...and Harry's I-don't-give-a-shit-but-really-do is outdated.

Meh, what's sad is that I'll still follow it for updates. I'm such a fangirl.

 

Those two chapters made me cringe on multiple occasions. The author tried to insert humor and it failed miserably. He reintroduced the guitar, and the Uber-swords made it worse. 2/5

 

It's not too bad, but I could do without the Soul Calibur reference. Any other blade would do. But at least the story is getting intresting with the attacks and whatnot.

 

I left a review for the author about the sword fighting with the werewolves and how it was a bit too much.

He replied and told me "he spars against a one thousand year old vampire for fun, one that is much stronger (physically) than any werewolf."

That wasn't really the point I was making when I made the comment in my review. My point is, that any conflict that exists in the story only continues to get more and more detached from the characters. I honestly don't give a flying fuck about Lily at this point, and I would assume the author would want us to...I mean it is the driving force behind everything Harry does after all.

I hope the Harry/Fleur can inject some life into this, otherwise I think I'll find some better ways to spend my time. Here is hoping the tri-wizard tournament is entertaining even if Harry isn't in it.

The last two chapters 2/5, the whole story rates around 3.5/5 for my.

~Matt

 

Okay, so we've got guitar-playing Harry with a Snoop Dogg influence who likes to put down everyone for no real reason...and likes to fight with swords from video games. Add in Lestat, Slytherin's portrait, diary and collection of books, a disease gained from Occlumency, which is supposed to be a protection, and several other pieces of side-story madness, and there is officially too much going on. Conflict is good...too much of it isn't.

A lot of this story is just plain bad. There are some really good things, too, but very few of them. I like the idea of gorgon blood having different effects in potions brewing and whatnot, and a studious, smart Harry is always a plus. While I hate sword-fighting taking precedence over magic, I'd have to say that seeing Harry cut up a bunch of werewolves and getting covered in their blood in the process would make one hell of a first impression. Archie's response to Fleur's questions was a good one, as well. Beyond that, I'm getting really fucking bored with this.

 

*Laughs* Yeah. Having a cool Harry is fun. Having a super!Harry with almost god-like powers can get old.

Personally, I think they should go the more "Sorcerer-istic" route of wands, staves, sword's used for casting only, ring/ armband/ necklace focii...

 

I finally got around to reading this one, and it wasn't TOO bad. Not great, but readable. Some parts were funny, some boring but over-all, an acceptable read. 3.8/5

 

Every time I read a new chapter of this story I have opposed thoughts. All the Soul Calibur and Lestat things annoy the shit out of me, but I can't seem to be able to 'look away', even knowing that there's some major failure in there.

The situation kind of reminds me of another fic, Omni Black's "Black Ascension". The same style, the godly!Harry and a bunch of clichés, decently written, the swords, and so on...

I feel dirty and guilty every time I read both

 

I read the first few chapters and gave up on it like most people because nothing at all was happening.. People here just kept saying that the story got better as it went along so I forced myself to try reading it again.. They were right.. It did get better for a while there.. But there last few chapters, since like chappy 18 or so have just been pretty craptastic.. For one thing there really is just too much going on like PTP said.. Normally this wouldn't bother me except that most of these things that are happening are crappy clichés

 

This story is becoming strange.

One chapter, I believe the author is progressing at story telling, as the attention to detail, characterization, and plot seem spot on. Then the next chapter; there are grammar mistakes everywhere, characterization is off and the plot seems to get stale and cliche.

In a few chapters, it all happens again.

I do like the story, except for every other chapter when I am tempted to click the X.

The story just isn't consistent at all.

If the story gets finished and he revises it, it could definitely be library worthy, but nothing epic.

But I am excited about the author and wether or not he will improve, like most authors do.

 

Yeah, there's been a definite drop in quality over the last few chapters.

IMO the problem is the tempo in which the author has been pumping out chapters lately. I mean, it seems he's churning out at least 10,000 words per week these days and sometimes even more - 17,000 words in the latest chapter, which came out less than a week after 15,000 words worth of the previous update. It's no wonder his writing has become choppy and his plotting a bit careless.

IMO still a solid story, but its value ATM is greater in terms of a weekly injection of solid Independent!Harry, than when looking at the finished product as a whole (which is what people who are just now catching up get to see).