Title: Harry's Twist
Author: Ten Toes
Rating: PG-13/T
Genre: AU
DLP Category: AU
Pairing: NOne as of yet.
Status: WIP
Summary: Harry does some thinking after the DOM fiasco. An overheard conversation turns his world upside down and he decides to return the favor.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4123423/1/Harrys_Twist

An interesting twist on a few old clichés. A bit different from the usual Manipulative!Dumbledore stories. Well written and thought out. I give it a 4/5 for now.

 

I gave up when Harry sent that letter.

 

Just no.

Ron/Hermione working for Dumbledore all al
Dumbledore manipulating - it's getting old reading how his lies are uncovered. He's better than that, even in canon his manipulations were revealed after his death...

And wtf is with this letter? Treating death of his parents as a collateral damage I can understand. However he has a Dark Lord after his hide. There is no peaceful way out of it as Voldemort is too afraid of a potential threat Harry might pose to his immortality to let him live. It's "killing your enemy before he IS a threat" tactic...

I'll give it a 2/5. The writing is ok, the plot ruins it all...

 

Right now it is just more of the same, fun but not special.

Wonder if it could be turned int aweson!win, but odds are against.

 

Oh, for fuck's sake. Can we cut it out? Fail sarcasm is fail.

Harry sends an open letter to Voldemort, declaring neutrality. Harry goes to school, bashes Ron and Hermione who were spying, send Ginny who was trying to dose him with a love potion to the Hospital Wing with a lot of glass shards in her face, and... advises all the stuidents to hightail out of Britain as he plans his own escape.

Yeah, all the Indy!Harry stories went out and had an orgy, and this was born.

 

Twist

Well, there are plenty of cliche pieces but the author fully admited to it. There are slight changes where Mcgonnagall is okay with Dumbles being such a bastard and that is unfavorable. I generally like the old gal though there are reasons that she pisses me off in some fics.

There was a bit too much italics in each chapter but being of letters that explain part of what is going on makes sense. There is something to the fic but let's hope it continues. 4/5.

 

I didn't mind it so much. the interaction in the beginning were overdone, and the letter was far FAR over the top, but frankly when you factor in harry's age it's almost a gaurentee that anything sent for publication will be. If anything he sounded to mature to be 16.

Minerva's interaction with dumbledore was rather interesting, as was Albus' rather violent reaction to the newspaper. Both of which were quite believable in my opinon. In fact I'd go so far as to say that it's a Break away fic done right.

Dumbledore is intellegent as hell, just just got poor information and is paying for it.

Harry is smart enough to pick out and piece together the obvious descripencies in his life. Add to that overhearing R&H bragging about what they were going to do, and an undecectable link to Tom, and it's actually quite ingenious and well thought out. I alway rather liked his analgies to warfare, and I felt that the reason for his neutrality was well founded. The story isn't perfect by any means, and the beginning, the letter especially, needs work, but the later sections certainly made up for it.

a solid 4/5

 

I could with difficulties read it all, the fic's got some things that are somewhat new like the fact that Minerva is something other than an I'll-do-as-Albus-wants-even-if-it-involves-bending-my-knees... But most of it its too cliche without really adding anything, no adventure, no Harry fights back, nothing of interest, just a Harry that realises that he has no chance and decides to do the easy thing, surrender. The fact that he chats with Voldemort inside his head, calls him Tom while drinking beer does nothing good for the fic.
Don't really know about the writing, but the plot doesn't deserve anything above 2/5.

 

No. Just.... no.
The second chapter killed it even worse than the first did. Too many clichés, the 'mental room' and Harry and Voldemort suddenly being best buds after a single letter... Kill it. Kill it with fire.

I'll admit it's decently written, at least compared to 90% of the other crap out there, but that's the only good thing I can find.

1/5, and that single point is because of the writing.

 

The letter was obviously written for everyone else's benefit, Harry and Voldemort had already decided to stop fighting each other.

I personally thought this fairly entertaining. It provides the reader a look into a possibility which isn't too commonly used, despite the rampant clichés. As mane-stream Indy!Harry stories go, this isn't too bad.

4/5

 

When I saw the title of this story I somehow thought about cook!Harry... You know, like in Oliver's Twist (Jamie Oliver) http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Oliver's_Twist. If this isn't funny then tell me and I'll go lurk some more

 

This is highly enjoyable. I love a strong, ruthless Harry, and this one is smart and sane. He has the depth that JKR never bothered to develop.

McGonagall's reaction was the real shocker - I hadn't dreamed that she was THAT far into the plans. Dumbledore flew off the handle, but that's actually pretty normal for someone who realises that their pawn has been playing THEM. I never thought much of Remus, anyway.

Good job with Ginny and the rest of the "first tier." The rest of the Gryff boys were well drawn.

4/5, with lots of hope for the future.

 

There's not really a whole lot that I can say that hasn't already been said. It has a fair number of cliches, however all of them are executed better than the majority of the other times that you see them used. The author even manages to include a couple of things that are unexpected, ie McGonagall and her reaction. It's definitely worth a read, it isn't the best story out there by a long shot but still manages to be entertaining. 4/5

 

POINTLESS WHINY BITCHING POSTS BY CHILDREN HAVE BEEN DELETED. Take it to PMs if your feelings get hurt next time.

As for this fic? Seems very... standard. Not enough to judge yet.

 

Nothing special, It's a very cliche start if you ask me, though I won't judge too hardly on that. Points for Australia though. I'll stick with it, but it's only just keeping my interest at this point and that's mainly because I can assume that it will become better. 2.5/5

 

This story oscillates between the whiny rambling monologue and the good old bash-fest. Even if we accept all of the accusations as true (cliches ahoy!), Harry's letter is nothing but a transparent attempt at justifying himself to the wizarding world, but in a manner that does little but ensuring him as many new political enemies as possible.

And I suppose that's what's wrong this story in a nutshell: instead of either taking revenge by manipulating the situation or washing his hands clean of the entire mess, Harry essentially throws an extended tantrum. And while Harry is a sixteen-year-old boy, making such a reaction not unrealistic (and even more than a bit understandable given his situation, cliche-infested as it is), it still makes it boring. 2/5; the only thing saving it from a lower score is this tiny bit of realism.

 

Twist of a Twist

I don't think this is meant to be a serious fic; well, there isn't enough to judge yet but the humor inlaid everywhere has promise. And if it is, I apologize, and it was just posted in haste. The bashing is awesome as always and the whole Mcgonaghall thing is kinda new and something different to read.

Dumbledore sounds like a whinny little bastard and Minnie a petulant mother (to Dumbles), however. Anyone wanna guess who is wearing the pants in that family?

All in all, with the two chappies that are there, it isn't bad is worth waiting for new chappoes, I think.

 

Meh.

Well-written, but cliche riddled. I'll give this a 3/5.

 

An enjoyable read. Yeah, there are lots of clichés, but it's well-handled, at least. 4/5 for being much better than average.