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Oneshot Hatal Fart Attack by Corwalch - K+

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Lutris, Mar 28, 2006.

  1. Lutris

    Lutris Jarl Dovahkiin DLP Supporter

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    Title: Hatal Fart Attack
    Author: Corwalch
    Rating: K+
    Summary: This is in response to a plot bunnie on how to give Vernon Dursley a heart attack. Rating to be on safe side. This story is a one shot and complete.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2814791/1/
    Status: Complete, One-Shot.

    Highly amusing. not laugh-out-loud material though.
     
  2. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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    I read this one a few weeks ago. Really funny idea. Mildly funny execution. Enjoyable, but I think it could have been either more humorous or more... fluffy and WAFFy-ish. Seemed sort of middle of the road on those two and coming up short on both of them.

    Frankly, not enough farting considering the play on words in the title.
     
  3. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    Donno about this one. Its seems too long and windy. Tell you the truth I didn't find it funny at all.

    But I did like the idea. This would make a good long term fic to see how different Harry is being a ward of the crown. Not so good as a one shot though.
     
  4. Rukri

    Rukri Muggle

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    I liked this story. a little slow but pretty good but it's just sitting there begging for another chapter heh. Could make a pretty good story with that begining

    My 2 cents (canadian money too hehe)
     
  5. darklordmike

    darklordmike Death Eater

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    Just giving some attention to this 'neglected' story.

    It was okay, but not really funny at all. The title implies that this is going to be a humorous piece, but there's almost no humor unless you think it's funny to watch the Dursley's squirm in front of the Queen.

    The premise is just a little too contrived. The royal princes encountering Dudley Dursley on a playground in Surrey? No way.

    3/5 because the writing is solid.
     
  6. Photon

    Photon Order Member

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    Absurd premise, title disjointed with the story, unfunny and it is proof that originality and ability to write is not enough to produce a good story.

    1/5, because solid writing is something absolutely necessary.
     
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