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help me out with Redemption of the Black Sisters

Discussion in 'Fanfic Discussion' started by phoenixgod2000, Aug 3, 2006.

  1. phoenixgod2000

    phoenixgod2000 Squib

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    In an upcoming chapter of Redemption of the Black Sisters Voldemort is going to stage a massive three prong prison break in Azkaban, Alcatraz (Wizarding Prison of the Americas), and an Asian wizard prison I'm thinking about calling Akuma. I need a rogues gallery of some scary ass wizards to escape so Harry and Co. can stop them. These wizards aren't necessarily death eaters or working for Voldemort, he just wants to sow chaos with them and force his enemies to expend their resources on something other than him.

    So give me some ideas for bad guys. Scary, sadistic bad guys along the lines of Hannibal the Cannibal who can really put some fear in our heroes and make even someone like Bellatrix Black sick.
     
  2. nonjon

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    Scary psychos in prison. Hmm.... I'm picturing some massive half-giant werewolf. Maybe a witch who looks like a 4 year old girl who likes to kill other children. You could add all sorts of magical accidents to accentuate disfigurements. Maybe a guy who could control his apparition to the degree that he remove parts of himself to get freaky, bend his knees backwards, spin his head all around. Animagus form offers possibilities. Could turn them into mindless vicious tasmanian devil. Maybe a praying mantis chick ate her husbands head.

    Could give them random magical effects or powers too. Highly poisonous skin maybe. Maybe a witch wanted to try and become a banshee and she just spews blood from her mouth or throat. Maybe one of the prisoners got raped by a dementor. Hypnotoad like powers for some wizard whos' eyes have been sown shut. Variations on comic book villains or monsters can be fun. Love of ways to kill add twists. Fire. Drowning. Skinning. Exploding hearts, things leaking out orifices. Cannibalism of parts: ears, eyes, mouths. Maybe someone's teeth rotted out so he keeps a tooth from every victim in his own mouth.
     
  3. Brooklynight

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    So you want henious and sadistic, no probelm all you have to do is look at real life a put a magical twist on it.

    A serial killer that kills his victims by transfiguring parts of their body into stone one at a time.

    A wizard that fancies himself a vampire that kills by slowly draining blood according to the phases of the moon, then proceed to bathe in it in hopes of gaining favor from the patriarc.

    A witch so obsessed with keeping her husband faithful that she disfigured her daughter's genitals.

    An old school master that got his kicks by replacing the meat in the luches with parts of students that he butchered. (thank you simpsons)

    A mother that broke her children's growthplates in hopes of keeping them her 'sweet angles' forever.

    An old drunk that would ride his broom into backyard quiditch games while intoxocated on purpose and then pretend he was a beater, literally.

    A necrophelic healer.
     
  4. ip82

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    Hmm, I think he was thinking more of some monster-like thugs like nonjon had suggested, that Harry and co could hunt down.

    How about a metaphormagus but not some goody-good like Tonks. He/she could be a sex offender, who rapes victims after turning into a person they hate the most..... Or perhaps the perfect assasin. Imagine the Jackal, only really able to morph himself.

    Meh, I'm sure you'll think of something. Just be mindful to atune their abilities to skills of your characters.
     
  5. Dark Lord Rostam

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    How about a Wizard who likes to experiment on magical animals and other wizards and witches.

    He has created a Wizgriff, Basaitch, shit like that. His experiments were put in the jail too, because they were all violent so when he leaves, he summons them all to him. He can control them.

    And the reason they weren't just killed like other dangerous creatures, was because they were still part-human, and there would have been an outrage.
     
  6. The Dark Monarch

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    I suggest watching the revamped version of "The Thirteen Ghosts ". Its a horror flick. The ghosts in the movie could give you some ideas.
     
  7. Duke of Rothwood

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    Personally I would agree with nonjon or maybe DLR, use those ideas and you could create some really twisted dark wizards, maybe you could also show the reason that wizarding kind is afraid of dark creatures.

    For more twisted characters just read/watch the news
     
  8. Fuegodefuerza

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    How about a wizard whose genes came from a wizard and an Acromantula? Like, stem cell stuff, but by using magic, they were able to do it between Phylums and the such.

    A completely insane, very powerful wizard, who has the intelligence and morals of an undisciplined four-year-old and thinks of the populace as his "playthings" and, because of his power, can make them do anything and do anything to them.

    A witch that was hit with a Jelly-Legs Jinx gone wrong, who can now shoot poisonous feelers out of her fingernails/arms. I'm thinking Irakandji venom in the tentacles.

    I don't know...just mix humans with various creepy-crawlies, like bugs, snakes, and the like. This has been really fun! Thanks a lot for this, I haven't had this much fun since...well...yesterday!

    /goes off in a corner mixing and matching human body parts and abilities with those of various insects...

    I'll be back with more soon!
     
  9. madeyemoody

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    Here you go this shit is creepy

    (just change the dates )


    Eusebius Pieydagnelle who had a sexual obsession with blood and confessed to murdering six people.




    Dr Thomas Neill Cream was a Scottish-born serial killer, who claimed his first victims in the United States and the rest in England, and possibly others in Canada and Scotland. Cream poisoned his victims and was executed after his attempts to frame others for his crimes brought him to the attention of London police.
    Some sources state that his last words as he was being hanged were a confession that he was Jack the Ripper — even though he was in jail at the time of the Ripper murders



    The Servant Girl Annihilator or Austin Axe Murderer is the given name of a notorious serial killer or killers who terrorized Austin, Texas, USA between 1884 & 1885.
    It is thought that at least seven women, mostly servant girls, died at the hands of the killer, who typically dragged his victims from their beds and raped them before slashing or axing them to death. Several victims were stabbed by some sort of spike in the ears or the face, leading to suspicions that they had been lobotomized to quiet their struggle




    The Bloody Benders were a family of serial killers who owned a small general store and inn in Labette County, Kansas from 1872 to 1873. The family consisted of John Bender, his wife, son, and daughter Kate. Kate was very attractive and outgoing, and thus became a large draw for the Benders' establishment. She proclaimed herself to be a healer and psychic who could cure sickness and contact the dead. Kate is believed to be the driving force behind the Bender family killings.

    The Bender family's home had a large room which was divided by a curtain. If a guest appeared to be wealthy, they would give him a seat of honor with his back to the curtain. Kate would distract the guest, while John Bender and/or his son would come from behind the curtain and strike the guest on the skull with blunt object such as a sledgehammer. The body would then be dragged behind the curtain and thrown down a trap door into a cellar. Once in the cellar, the body would be stripped and then buried somewhere on the property, often in the orchard.



    Thug Behram, of the Indian Thuggee cult, has frequently been said to be the world's most prolific serial killer. According to numerous sources, he was believed to have murdered 931 victims by strangulation by means of a ceremonial cloth (or rumal, which in Hindi means handkerchief), used by his cult between 1790-1830, thus holding the record for the most murders committed by a single person in history.



    Elizabeth Báthory (Báthory Erzsébet in Hungarian, Alžbeta Bátoriová(-Nádašdy) in Slovak, August 7?, 1560August 21, 1614), the Bloody Lady of Čachtice, was a Hungariancountess that lived in the Čachtice Castle near Trenčín, in present-day Slovakia.
    She is considered the most famous serial killer in Slovak and Hungarian history as well as the world's most prolific mass murderer (according to Guinness World Records). She spent most of her life at the Čachtice Castle. She and her alleged four collaborators were accused of torturing and killing numerous girls and young women (20 - 2000 victims, depending on the source). In 1610, she was imprisoned in solitary confinement, where she stayed until her death four years later. Her nobility permitted her to avoid an immediate execution. However, three of her four alleged collaborators were executed.
    Various legends about her life, including the idea that she bathed in the blood of servant girls, are thought by some to have been the origin of numerous vampire myths, the Dracula story, and the trope of the sexually sadistic vampiress in particular. Her historical nicknames include "The Blood Countess" and "Countess Dracula".



    Peter Stumpp (died 1589) was a German farmer and allegedly a serial killer and cannibal, also known as the Werewolf of Bedburg.

    The Tsuyama massacre was a murder spree that occurred on 21 May 1938 in a rural village close to Tsuyama city in Okayama, Japan. The massacre resulted in the deaths of 30 people and the serious injury of 3. This number of victims had been considered the world's worst massacre by a single criminal for a long time, up until Woo Bum-Kon killed 57 people (the number varies by sources) in 1982 in South Korea.
    Mutsuo Toi, a 21-year-old man, began preparing the previous evening (20 May). He cut the electricity line and blacked out the village. At around 1:30am on 21 May, he started his spree by killing his own grandmother, who brought him up after his parents died when he was a baby. After that, he took up a rifle and Japanese swords, and killed 29 neighbors in about an hour and half. He committed suicide after finishing the massacre.
     
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  10. The Dark Monarch

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    They made a cheazzy movie about Elisebith Bathory called Stay Alive. It was supposed to be a horror flick but it was way to predictable.
    I think using her would be a good idea.
     
  11. DarthBill

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    Actually, nothing that I can think of beats Fenrir Greyback. He was a freaking awesome villian.
     
  12. Stalicon

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    A powerful Necromatic Healer who used his powers over life and death to help bring patients from the brink of death. But for all his good doing he was condemed by the corrupt ministry who feared what they did not understand.

    Upon Arrival of the authorities and finding out of his eleged wrong doings he is overrode by fury,

    The necromancer orders his personal soul faithful (A soul who fears death and agrees to employment for a chance to postpone their inevitable death) to kill the aurors and used his Necromancy to enslave their fleeing souls.

    He takes his new band of undead warriors and lays seige to the ministry building, re-animating the victims fallen at his hands into his service.

    He single handedly forceses the ministry to its knees, his soul faithfuls being much to strong for the even the most elite of aurors.

    Worry and fear spread through the opposing forces, his minions are not felled by fire. Nor the purist silver

    And just as hope is lost and fear begins to override conscious thought. It begins to rain. The water weakens his hold on his minions souls' and the task of holding their souls to flesh vessels becomes taxing as the life giving properties of the downpour erode away the necromatic magic tieing them to this world.

    Life battles death.

    The last of the unspeakables noticing the rapidly slowing and jerking movements of the undead warriors come up with a clever plan.

    Five of the remaining seven pool their magic and force the storm to grow. The restless winds now roar and the light downpour becomes a flood.

    One of the remaining two braves the brewing storm to seal the building with powerful magic and the last directs the rapidly pouring rain into a lone elevator shaft.

    When their magic is spent and the building filled to brim, they collapse. And days later when the water has been drained they find the necromancer unconscious in the interior elevator having sealed it to prevent from drowning but not having thought of the lack of air.

    In the end Azkaban still claims one more.
     
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  13. World

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    I disagree with most of what has been stated here, I don't think he wants wizard/animal relation results or comic villains, but psychopaths who are not imprisoned because they have a special power, but did something horrible.

    I think madeyemoody has the right idea. So here are mine:

    1. The serial killer aproach
    This could be anyone who kills many people for various reasons: money or fun would be the best.
    For example, someone who kills Muggles simply for the murder's sake. He apparates to some Muggle town, Avada Kedavras someone, and apparates back. Repeat at whim. No trace, no predictability. You surely could kill some thousand people by that.

    2. The blood and gore approach
    Someone who likes to spill blood, and since it is much more convenient, the blood of others. Death for others is unavoidable in most cases. Leaving messages in blood, bathing in blood, drinking blood, eating a bloody steak.

    A fetish might work well here, something like 'eating the hearts of your enemies'. Just replace 'your enemies' with 'someone'. Maybe chopping of some limbs and leaving the subject alive. Cannibalism is also important, as someone mentioned eating certain body parts...

    3. The sexual approach
    Someone combining rape with murder (though without murder is fine as well). Maybe seducing someone from the opposite gender, or maybe small children. After or during the rape, maybe go through some ritualistic things. Imperius is very useful here.

    Number two and three can be very well combined. 'Eating someone out' gets a whole new meaning...

    On a whole, Muggles are the best subjects for magical murders, simply because the Ministry won't connect those murders as easily (except for the AK thing, where they know that it was a magical murder), and the Muggle police can hardly trace someone who apparates away from the scene of crime.

    So in general, not super powers, just psychos...
     
  14. madeyemoody

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    Hey! I eat my steaks rawish sometime does that make me a psychopath?
     
  15. Mordecai

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    I think a good idea would be to have some serial killers who specialised in different branches of magic, to make folk die.

    One could be a completely twisted genius, who is a master of illusions, and enjoys spending his time making his playthings, the folk he has kidnapped, go mad, then killing them off.

    Another could be a warlock who specialises in weather magic, and enjoyed sitting on top of sky scrapers in muggle cities, and calling up large storms, directing the lightning into the most damaging areas.

    You could have a Potions Master, violently anti-muggle, who planned to realsed a massive dose of some sort of lethal potion into the main muggle water supplies around the world. He was caught just before he released the second dose, the first was thankfully not as successful as it should have been, but still resulted in the death of over 100 muggles and the disfigurment of over 200 more.

    A spell creator, who, though not directly responsible for many deaths, created the spells used for them. He believes he is doing nothing wrong in creating the spells, and is known to have created many many useful ones as well, but the Ministry, fearing his ability at making spells, locked him up. He has a repetoir of countless spells never heard of before, and that thus have no known counter.

    You could have an oriental gang. You know, something like the Triads, who had been locked up in a coup of some sort a couple of decades ago, and are just raring to cause a hell of lot of misery.

    A "merciful" Healer, who would quietly kill off his/her patients who were in a lot of pain or were not likely to recover. Doesn't matter if it was via Avada Kedavra or maybe some sort of painless heart stopping potion, he/she killed many hundreds of patients, and still believes they were doing their patients a service.

    A child molestor who specialises in apparation. He can do it quickly quietly and with an unwilling guest on board.

    Why not have it that where the British have the dementors kiss for the serious criminals, the other countries have different things. Perhaps the americans, have some sort of lobotomy type thing, which leaves you with the option of an entire wing full of evil people with the minds of at most 4 year olds.

    Perhaps the asians, whatever country they are, place a permanent confundous charm on the serious inmates, which could be quite amusing.

    Maybe a pureblood witch who got fascinated by the muggle legends of witches, and decided to re-enact them a few times. ie, she ate a bunch of children.

    In America, a wizard who tried to use various control charms to rig a number of different elections. He succeeded a few times, but when he failed he was found out.
     
  16. KANE

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    I was thinking about this for a while when i went out just now, and i came back to realise Mordecai got there first, i had a few ideas similar to that but... too late now :)

    Anyway, one idea I had was of a psycopath that specialises in apparation (kinda like mordecai's) but instead of molesting people, he would dismember/mutilate the bodies of his muggle victims and then leave clues, whether it be messages written in blood or runes designed around the room. He would get his laughs by watching the muggle authorities see the clues and they would believe he was some sort of a demon, that possesed the victim and killed them. This would work especially well in a small holy village which believed in that sort of thing... he would soon kill so many people that they began to think the land was cursed. He could have done this over and over again until he was caught.

    When i saw DarthBill's post about fenrir, i had an idea of a pack of werewolves that, like fenrir, where in a semi-wolf form at all times. And, like a pack of wolves, they would rape/maraud/kill in a pack; maybe of five or so... they could be some sort of a gang.

    This was more an idea for when we were suggesting monsters with special talents, but i'll suggest it anyway. I'm sure you've all seen the asian monks that can lie on bed's of needles and break huge concrete blocks without any physical harm. I was thinking, from the asian prison, a magical monk-type person who was actual invulnerable to physical attack, like some monks seemed to be. He would take it to another level in that he could be harmed by nothing physical at all, whether it was fire, an axe to the head or a gunshot in the chest... he could walk away unharmed.

    It might also be a good idea to have an underground contact. Someone like Mundugus fletcher is for the order, except working purely with bad guys. Maybe he worked as a messenger between underground mafia groups or between underground groups and the government, and so knew a hell of a lot of people in that business. He got caught trading information from the government and was put in prison for associating with criminals, passing confidential information, etc.

    The last idea was a simple vampire with an extreme bloodthurst, even moreso than a usual vampire. Maybe someone like bellatrix, who was a complete sadist before she was a vampire, and was then turned and became even more insane/sadistic. He/She could tie in with world's idea of bathing in blood, drinking blood, ripping ot the heart and drinking the blood from it... that sort of thing.

    Edit, forgot one: This one isn't so much an insane killer as just a talented one. I was thinking of maybe a character almost like a sniper, except with a wand. Amazing eyesight and trained aim with the abilty to take out an enemy from a fair distance. He originally worked as a contract killer, taking out his victims while they were in public and when he was far away enough that any protective wards or bodyguards would be unable to stop him.
     
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  17. Mordecai

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    What sort of spell would such a man use? Avada Kedavra has too noticeable a colour to use from a distance. Would it be better to be some sort of exploding curse? Which would promise a kill or severe maiming. Or a cutting curse, much neater, probably less noticable on the approach? But the idea is sound.

    Another idea I had, was a man who used the imperious on muggles to incite great acts of violence. Like, people just randomly pulling guns out in the street and opening fire, he would be responsible.
     
  18. madeyemoody

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    *cough* Charmed *cough* good idea :)
     
  19. phoenixgod2000

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    Thanks everyone for your ideas. I liked the idea of going with people based on real serial killers. There really is nothing more frightening than an ordinary human who lacks anything even remotely resembling a conscience. I also liked some of the more exotic magical killers. I want a combination of people who are inhuman because of their actions and inhuman because of their power. People who are going to test the ability of Harry and the order to catch.

    There is a reason why Voldemort let loose these dragons of madness after all :)

    Jon
     
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