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Complete Here I Come by Dark Syaoran - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Dark Syaoran, Oct 19, 2005.

  1. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Lol, why? What's happened? Doesnt matter, i'll just start writing the basic outline for chapters five and six while I wait.
     
  2. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    -Wedding anniversary today is why =P
     
  3. Cervus

    Cervus Raptured to Hell

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    Just thought I'd say that I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I've enjoyed what you've done so far.
     
  4. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    It isnt really interesting but ahh well. Its important I guess.
     
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    SmacksKiller First Year

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    Congralutation
     
  6. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    I've just read chapter 4. Not bad at all, I guess that after this, you'll be skipping non-Dark Arts training. That thing with Time Turner was really stretching the canon, but with the way Harry was in HBP, I can honestyly sympathize.

    Keep up the good work.
     
  7. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    TY, made it seven years without murdering each other, woot,
     
  8. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    O_O.... dude... whats your secret? ... i couldnt make it a year without wanting to kill my last ex-girlfriend and we werent even married...
     
  9. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Keep the girl satisfied, don't cheat, and find a good girl.

    My wife couldn't care less about material things, lets me do whatever I want, is a good mom, good cook, etc.

    Comparing her to my other girlfriends in the past who I now believe were nothing more then whores who constantly wanted you to buy them crap while they contributed nothing more then nookie to the relationship.

    Ignore the incredible pornstar/model lookalike ones Vash, grab you an average looker, quiet type with a decent body, and slowly mold her to be her best. The plain jane girls clean up the best, will never cheat on you, and appreciate the attention they've never recieved that they will treat you better then any attention seeking, tramp stamp wearing, tits-hanging out at the club chick ever will.
     
  10. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    I had to make Harry more powerful someway and I dont like how in most stories he can just suddenly turn into god after one holiday or even one year. If it were that easy, everyone would be killer duelers. Voldemort would be impossible to defeat and so would Dumbledore.

    As you said, fourth chapter is up on FF.Net but not here yet. I'll get around to doing that sometime soon. Quarter of chapter five is done.
     
  11. Lord Ravenclaw

    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    Good chapter Syaoran, and great story.
     
  12. Lord Osiris

    Lord Osiris Auror

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    Enjoyed the new chapter Syaoran. I like what you did with the time turner made it so it's not that far out there like a few of the stories you said how he becomes the ducks nuts over night. How long till chapter 5 hits FF.nuts?
     
  13. IndoGhost

    IndoGhost Dark Lord

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    Nice.I cant wait for more.
     
  14. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Dunno yet. Wrote a bit more this morning.
     
  15. Hubert

    Hubert First Year

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    You should be commended for even attempting to create a semi-decent post-HBP story. Yet you seemed to pull it off in a believable manner, staying loosely within the confines of the, to date, canon universe. I assume your going with the love potion angle, if I interpreted the refrences in your last chapter correctly? Wonderful start, I await more.
     
  16. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Yes. Much anger for the red one!
     
  17. RagefulLlama

    RagefulLlama Seventh Year

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    I looked all over chapter 4 and didn't see anything pointing to anything like a love potion. Did I just miss it because It's 1 in the morning and am tired or is it somewhere/something else?
     
  18. Hubert

    Hubert First Year

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    It was subtle, and i remember the days when the love potion theory was first concieved.

     
  19. Cervus

    Cervus Raptured to Hell

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    I noticed the small reference to the Love Potion myself, though I too remember when that theory first popped up on this site.

    Syaoran, I only just managed to find time to read the chapter. It was good and I would have told you that in a review had ff.arse not been a shit website. Darn thing won't let me review again. If I remember correctly I've had the same problem while trying to review this story before.

    I agree with the Snape comment in the A/N. No doubt JK is angling at making Snape seem like a right hero, but personally I prefer an evil arsehole Snape.

    Good work.
     
  20. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Sorry about the fucking delay but i've got a shit load of new ideas and alot of shit is being changed around. I'm not even sure if its going to be a Vampire!Harry story anymore... but he is going to be half-something. I'm thinking demon but not the typical type. More like Inuyasha type demon but without the fucking dog-ears and all that stupid shit. More realistic anyway.

    I have a great fight scene planned out with Greyback and Harry fighting. Mutated Werewolf vs Half-Demon. Should be pretty cool, hopefully, if my writing skills are good enough.

    Anyway, chapter four was changed around a bit. The love potion reference is no longer in the chapter and I changed what the unspeakables did to his memories so it would explain why Harry was still a little fucking idiot in HBP. I liked the memories returning in bursts idea but he was still too dumb for that to be useable.

    Chapter five... I have no idea when this is coming out because i've re-writin the first half of this chapter like seven times now. I wanted it out before Christmas but... doesnt look that way. Im gonna make sure I at least get most of it done by New Years, hopefully posted.

    Well, thats it for now.
     
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