Small one shot I wrote a while ago that I redid for all you lucky people

Title: Between Heroes and Villians by BetryedBitch - K+
Author: BetryedBitch
Rating: - K+
Genre: General
Pairing: None
Status: Complete
Summary: Final goodbye from Harry as he leaves the wizarding world for good.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2948132/1/

this isn't wrking but i'll replace it wen it is

 

Link doesn't work.

 

I've replaced it so now it wrks. Thanx 2 Teure 4 the info

 

*Sigh*

This is a bit of a pointless post, but:

"I've replaced it so now it wrks. Thanx 2 Teure 4 the info"

Should be:

"I've replaced it so it works now. Thanks to Taure for the info.

 

No, the link still does not work. Your story, if you can't tell, was pulled.

Edit: Well, I went to her profile, and lo and behold, her story works. Meh, it's not too bad, but it's short and if I want to read a one shot it better be really long.

 

The link doesn't work but the story still shows up on her profile. Problem is the link from there doesn't work either. The strange thing is, though, that the reviews page for the story still shows up. Perhaps it's just a problem with ff.net, it's been screwy for me for the past few days.

Edit: It was indeed an error with ff.net. The link now works. I must admit that I was slightly surprised, forgive me but I was expecting the quality of writing to be worse. I did notice some grammar errors, but not being the best person with grammar in the world I can overlook that. The writing style was good. It's also short, very short and could perhaps do with more background information and detail. But overall the writing style was good.

 

It was very short, but not bad. It would be better if you had written more background information as Cervus said.

 

I dunno...it came across like every other Letter!Harry story did, to coin a new term.

You guys know the drill, even if it never struck you until you read this one:

-To the sheep of the wizarding world! That's right, sheep!

-i was innocent, but you burnt my shit/killed my owl/stole my money/beat me to within an inch of my life and then, you bastards sent me to AZKABAN!!!

-but i was, as usual, a gullible idiot, so despite your betrayal (another word that gets irritatingly repeated) i killed Voldemort in a flukey manner. Then i died.

-so, i don't actually understand how this letter is being written, since im dead...attribute it to a 'dead-person-thing'.

-So...yeah. Point is, you suck. You will never enjoy true peace, because it's your fault that Voldemort and other dark lords come about. Now, be happy withthat knowledge until you fuck up again.

-toodles,
Dead!Harry/IGotSickAndRanAway!Harry

This isn't a barb directed at you, Betryed!Bitch, it's just an observation. You write quite decently, so you could do better.