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How do you write battle scenes?

Discussion in 'Fanfic Discussion' started by The Pro, Jun 26, 2017.

  1. Sey

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    If this were game of thrones, your protag just dies.
     
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    In my personal experience, fight scenes require a balance between simple and intricate descriptions.

    Here's this montage:

    "Trump ducked under a kick, sliding forward before he launched a jab. Hilary Clinton fell to the ground, clawing at her throat."

    I think that simple description works as a matter of describing actions. This is for a rather emotionless fight. Perhaps without stakes. On the other hand...

    "His father's murderer jumped over his slash, quickly backing away. He then spat and decked him in the stomach. Mickey Mouse followed up with a leg sweep that sent him toppling over. He fell and was knocked unconscious."

    Pretty bland right? Mickey Mouse is his parent's murderer, and he's fighting this homicidal monster for revenge. We need a little something else.

    T-T
    Teeth bared, Jason moved for two swift strikes that cut away a chunk of his ear. With a yell, he swept Mickey Mouse off his feet and drove his sword downward.

    With a brutal canny, Mickey Mouse stopped the attack cold. He smirked, pulling out a knife and driving it into Jason's gut. With a pained cry, he was now the one on the ground.

    "You failed him Jason," Mickey Mouse said, sweeping the dust off his overalls. He continued in his high, shrill voice. "And here I thought I'd found a worthy opponent. It turns out you're just as weak as your father. I wonder what he'd think?" He finished with a short, jerky laugh.

    Mickey kicked him in the ribs, smiling. "Goodbye, Jason. You threw away your last chance."

    He brandished a grenade, pulling out the pin. He neatly tucked the explosive in Jason's mouth. "Sayonara."

    Jason could only manage a low gurgle.

    Then the world went black.

    T-T

    Now I am an amateur writer but I think the significance of the fight should be level with the amount of description it has. Mohammad Ali fighting a mugger shouldn't have as much description as Mohammad Ali fighting in his first championship match.

    Ultimately, it falls to balance. But I think Halt has a lot more advice than me on this.
     
    Last edited: Jul 31, 2019
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