Edit: Whoops.

 

It's interesting, but the constant misspelling and the random Capitalization is kind of annoying. Pain and HATRED and blah blah BLAH.

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Then suddenly they arrived at the park.

Really? *sigh* As opposed to what?

*Slowly, they arrived at the park* "The parkometer is reading twenty three parks per million, we're nearly there!"

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I detected a strange variation of the Imperius curse on Dorsey

Who?

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"Revealise Dejaview?" asked Dumbledore with a questioning tone.

This... this does get better, doesn't it?

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"That is impossible" hissed Voldemort. "I know what I saw. It was a vampire. If all of your clan were accounted for then how do you explain its presence?"

Yes, every vampire on the planet has sworn allegiance to Voldemort.

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"I refuse to serve you or you're order! I'm not a dark wizard I won't serve your aims!"

So... I suppose the author doesn't have a beta reader. Because this is pretty... bad.

 

Well, I know this fic isn't getting much love here at DLP, but I quite like it. There are grammar errors, of course, but what do you expect when an author is putting out 20k+ word chapters with no Beta? I'm not sure why the chapters are so very lengthy myself, but I enjoyed reading it through to the end. Cliches abound, but they're handled in a sufficiently original way to make it distinct from other fics. I love the fight scenes as well.

I would rate it 4/5.

 

Not anything to do with this story but update Out of Night more often than every 2 months please.