Title: I See The Moon
Author: hctiB-notsoB
Rating: T
Genre: Friendship
Status: WIP
Library Category: The Alternates
Pairings: None (Poll is up on authors profile and last I checked Harry/Hulk pairing was 1 vote ahead of no pairing so please go vote for no pairing in order to make sure the author doesn't ruin this story. He says for now it will stay no pairing though.)
Summary: Gen. "While on the run, Bruce meets a young man who speaks to the moon. He's probably not quite the sanest friend Bruce could have made, but, well...beggers can't be choosers."
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8212843/3/I_See_The_Moon

I would give this a 4/5 so far. The possibility of this story ending up having a slash pairing of Harry/Bruce makes me weary however Harry acting like Luna Lovegood is humorous enough at the moment to keep me reading. It is a slightly cracky story in my opinion but Harry manages to weave tales that are slightly understandable if you spin around, squint, and turn your head 76 degrees to the North-West, on a Sunday while wearing purple polka dotted socks.


Example:

""I'm sure she was a very nice snake, Harry, but I swear one of these days you're going to give me a heart attack."

Harry stared at him, wide-eyed, and looked down at Bruce's chest as if he expected said organ to jump out and declare war."



""Well," Bruce winced when something that probably wasn't mud was launched at the car's windshield. "Animals tend to like him a lot, so..."

"So, they wage war in his defense?""



I find lines like these to be rather humorous and they seem to be scattered throughout the story. The story seems very well thought out so far so if anyone's interested feel free to give it a read.

 

Awesome

I enjoyed the lighthearted tone of this story, with Harry acting rather like a child. On that note, is the Harry in this story before he went to Hogwarts? I would expect so, but it seems that Luna has gotten to him already.

But anyways, I can't really see any grammar problems from the first two chapters, but I'm a bit wary of this story.
The dialogue between Bruce/Hulk and Harry and the poll in the author's profile seem to point toward Bruce/Harry slash, and I don't really enjoy that sort of pairing.

I'll give it a 3/5, more or less depending on the future chapters.

 

I pointed out similar concerns when creating this thread about the pairing.


SPOILERS:

Spoiler

Voldemort apparently ripped the soul fragment out of Harry's forehead and it causes damage to Harry's mind. Hermione tried to find a solution. Ron tried to kill stuff in anger. Luna ended up help Harry put the pieces back together again. So Harry's fragmented mind now has a touch of Luna in it. He can't seem to remember anything from before the soul shard was ripped out. They are starting on the storyline of Avengers by the most recent chapter and Harry is starting to figure out how to atleast attempt to remember what happened before the soul fragment was ripped out.

 

I can't recommend this. Up until the very latest chapter it felt as if there was absolutely no plot (in one of the author's notes she even admits this).

The story is nothing more than an attempt at writing slash without sex (at least, no sex so far). The ONLY thing the story is about is Bruce and Harry's growing "relationship", and even though the slash hasn't officially started the story is filled with moments like "Harry sneaks under the covers with Bruce to comfort him" and Bruce getting "warm feelings in his chest" when thinking about Harry.

I was excited about the concept of the fic until I started reading it. People who are fans of slash and fluff will enjoy this, but I am not. It's not terrible, for me it's something like 2/5, but if you're into that kind of stuff it's probably 4/5. If you go into this expecting a nice adventure fic like I did I think you will be disappointed.

 

errrrr. I thought the whole warm feeling in his chest was the necklace Harry made to help keep him calm? I honestly skipped over the part where Harry gets under the covers to comfort him. Not sure where you found that.

His other stories summaries show he writes a lot of slash and it doesn't even look particularly good. The chapters have been short and the plot seems to be building up to the Avengers storyline which starts in the latest chapter.

I certainly hope it doesn't turn into slash but I can't find too much wrong with it in the chapters the author has written so far.

 

Well I skipped past bits and pieces of this, often where Harry was at his vaguest and craziest. The Interlude chapter I ignored completely, as well as Harry in the bathtub immersion tank. That looked like some boring drivel there.

My second complaint is that this story should never have starred Harry Potter. It would be entirely more charming if Luna Lovegood was Bruce's companion in this. There'd be less melodrama and more delight all around. If you changed Harry to Luna, altered some pronouns, and cut out the bad parts of the fic, it'd make a rather good Bruce/Luna friendship story.

 

Just two examples.

The story is a slashy hurt/comfort fic, even though there is no gay sex yet and might not ever be. It's not an adventure fic with a few slashy bits thrown in: it is a slash fic with a few bits of adventure thrown in.

 

I'm sorry, but what the fuck is this?

 

Oh, I also really dislike the way she's written this slightly crazy Harry; but I've never seen any author do a decent job at portraying insanity/mental illness/whatever you want to call this.

 

I agree with yak somewhat, I only read first few lines of the first chapter and I think it would've been better if it was Luna instead of Harry. Still he seems pretty much brain damaged to me though... also it's slash.

Other than that I don't believe this is library material.

 

I skipped the same parts. Harry's POV was a hard read but its understandable if its the authors first time trying to do something like that. I also agree about Luna being a good companion to Bruce in this story would have been a good idea.


I didn't really take it at seriously as others seem to be taking the story. It hasn't become slash yet nor has the author actually planned for it to become so and the few things someone mentioned as being slash didn't even register in my mind when I read it. I honestly mostly enjoyed it for its humorous parts as I mentioned which are quite frequent. It is slightly cracky but it has enough humor thats its okay at this point. I actually wish the author would stay with the less serious Harry though there is some foreshadowing to the story getting a bit more serious.

 

Change Harry to Luna and you've got a decent story; no story without Luna should ever have Wrackspurts in the prologue title. I should not have even bothered with this.

 

And this is when I knew that this fic was going to be shit.

Why do try to force this poorly disguised wannabe slash down our throats, Jigokuno? It might not have homosexual relationships between the main characters yet, but the fic is written is pure slashy hurt/comfort format. Why do you even try to rec this on DLP? Why are you still around?

 

?!? Why would I try to force wannabe slash down your throats? I specifically asked people to vote for it to have no pairing just so I wouldn't have to read that either. I've read hundreds of stories and could count on one hand the number of stories that had slash that I actually liked. Seriously I dislike the stuff but your going into homophobic territory when you totally deny a story because the author thinks the possibility somewhere in the future might kind of have slash in it in which case you refuse to even look at the story.

Sheesh I don't think the author meant for you to take the story particularly seriously. Nor did I take the story particularly seriously. Like I said I considered it a crackish humor fic so far.

I made one rec that some people don't like because of the possibility that it might contain slash in the future but the author says they can't see it occurring yet now I'm getting people asking me why I am still even on this forum. Seriously I'm not saying this is the best fic in the world but you guys need to lighten up.



I'm not even going to try to convince anyone anymore of this fic. I just thought it was a humorous read but some people who are WAY too homophobic took this story as a insult to there homophobic beliefs because it might possibly contain slash in the future even though the author can't see it happening. Which is ridiculous because like I said I DON'T like slash myself but just found the story funny on the same lines as that Elf!Harry story that someone else posted up.

Might as well put this thread in the recycled bin. I'll make sure next time I post something to remember how sensitive people are about the word slash even being thrown around in a humorous fic.

 

Ah, one of those stories.


Also, we need to care enough for the story to vote, and having to vote to make us care for the story is fucked up.


I tried to start reading, but it was very meh, and didn't actually start working. So, I have never finished more than a chapter of this story. Also, wasn't this story mentioned somewhere in the DLP already, with comic crosovers or something?


All in all, bad story, bad recommendation, and a waste of time, and it will still end up being slash. 2/5

Why did you even recommend it, then?

 

In general, yes. But there are exceptions for the best stories, such as Prince of the Dark Kingdom [4.25/5, 111 votes].

Don't let this keep you from submitting stories, just... if even you skipped boring parts, then perhaps this was better suited to the "Almost Recommended" thread. Even without the hints at slash, I don't think this would've been library material.

 

Well that was rude.

He's hardly "forcing" this on anyone, and it's hardly the worst fic this forum has seen so I think it would be best for you to calm down and carefully evaluate your misplaced anger.

I understand (now) that you have some deep hatred of gay relationships (something in your past, maybe?) so if this story goes that way, it probably isn't for you. But not everyone shares your same aversion, so please, try to contain your apparent anger a little more when in the presence of adults.

As for the story itself, I enjoyed the dialogue quite a bit but as people have previously said the author doesn't seem to know where the plot is going and it shows. Voting on relationships/plot turns tend to be a sign of this.

All in all it isn't bad - 3/5 in my book, a worthy entry to the recycling bin and who knows if the author figures out a decent plot it may go higher.

 

It's not slash. It just hints at it a fair bit, usually in the earlier parts of the story. I think the only characters in gay relationships are OCs, which works okay even if a bit heavy handed early on.

As the author improved over the course of the story, the slash undertones were drastically curbed.