I just noticed this thread and I'm disappointed if the author has left DLP. I commented favorably on the story in a different thread, here: https://forums.darklordpotter.net/posts/1199919/

It was a few months since I read the story and I had forgotten entirely about the harem aspect that people complain about here. I mostly remembered the psychology and the developments near the end about the (spoiler) clones in the secret lab on Wayland. They went into the nature of soul magic, the Force, etc. in ways I hadn't seen in other stories.

I just went and re-read parts of the story and yeah, there was a bunch of sexual banter and innuendo that was maybe a bit annoying, but no big deal. In the part of the story actually online, the harem stuff existed in the form of some romantic attraction between Harry and some others, but nothing had actually materialized. Anyway, harem to me is one of those things like Dramione, definitely not an attraction in its own right, but I'm ok with it if it fits into the story and the story is otherwise good.

I don't remember verbose prose being a real issue. There was a device of starting a paragraph or section but not revealing til later what it was actually about, as a cheap way to create some dramatic tension for a while. This can be ok if done once in a great while, but I thought it was used too often in this story. Fixing it is a simple matter of editing though.

I don't mind that the main character is OP. That trope is popular for a reason and it's why Superman is one of the most famous and long-lived of all comic book characters.

I hope the author continues the story someday. It left off in a place where I wanted to know what happens next. 4.1/5