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Identity by High Brass - M - Harry/Many

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by cmuylistoooo, Nov 12, 2005.

  1. cmuylistoooo

    cmuylistoooo Fourth Year

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    Title: Identity
    Author: Highbrass
    Rating: M
    Category: Action/Adventure/Romance
    Pairing: Harry/Many
    Summary:Secrets are discovered. Alliances are forged. Battle lines are drawn. Some friendships strengthen while others break. The war has started. A friend and a Godfather have already been taken away from him. No longer will he stand for the manipulations!
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2482703/1/


    i really enjoyed this fic when i first read it. Same with Midknight, i weeded out stories that from my alerts and favorites. This story was an old fave, so i reread it upto where it is updated and my opinion has changed. The inclusion of hermione and ginny and a goody harry to his friends made me go bleh. hope some at least enjoy it.

    just reread the first chapter, um yeah some of u might feel sick just reading it, just skim it, it does get better.
     
  2. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    its got some cliches, but I generally tend to like anything with Vampire Harry. The parsel magic I really, really don't care for, but as I said I like it when Harry gets vampiric aspects. Decent sized chapters, with good flow, not overly rushed. Will comment more on it later when I get a chance to finish it

    Found it amusing his vampire name is Dakkaath, lol.

    Edit: He tends to go way overboard with juicing Harry up, either the vampire or the elf parts would of worked seperatly, together it's just too much


    Edit 2: As I read more into this it gets harder to read, if you've read Dragonlance, or LOTRs, as the author borrows heavily names and descriptions from them.

    The cliches seem to be getting unbearable the deeper in your go, but it's a decent lil fic at the start =( Would of liked to see a great deal more time put into this, as good Vampire!Harry fics are a rarity =(.
     
  3. LT2000

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    Hm, now I have to check and make sure I'm not getting ripped off anywhere. Or at least I would were I not so damn lazy.
     
  4. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Nada, it's fine, you're not it's just a brief aside, basically says "Vampires gave me a COOL new name, Dakkaath" Neville responds with How cool is that!

    If anything he's giving you props, nothing's ripped.
     
  5. LT2000

    LT2000 Heir

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    I updated btw, since that fic was mentioned. Yay for off topic posting.
     
  6. Lord Osiris

    Lord Osiris Auror

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    Like the Fleur, herm it's pushing it, but Weaselette thats just gone beyond the line, kill the bitch and be done with it. Didn't keep my intrest long just skimed through it after a few chapters, but i dont love it and i dont hate it so meh *shrugs*
     
  7. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    I stopped reading this around chapter 8 as it was starting to get utterly stupid, but I skipped ahead to browse chapt 10 and 11... I don't know what's worse, the Simple Plan bit (remember that the time frame for Post OOTP is midish 1990's... not 2004/2005) or the sword fight with Malfoy, or super!manipulative Dumbledore.

    Shame the cliches get too overbearing, he could of done well with this =(
     
  8. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Simple Plan bit? That sounds... very painful... mentally of course. :p
     
  9. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    He has Harry somehow know instinctivly how to play a guitar and has he rock out in a music store, a concert, and then Hogwarts to Simple Plan lyrics

    Theres also constant screw ups, referencing new movies that were't out back in 1996.

    Like it said, it started off fucked as hell, I skipped chapter 1, but I think he'd loose most people there. It progresses into a cliche full Super!Harry story, and it stays tolerable for awhile.

    Its when he starts meeting ancients, and making everyone swords and vampire bondeds and singing onstage that it goes to shit.

    He also has major issues with continunity. Harry ios pretty much god early on, but he keeps unlocking things and being so suprised when his reducto goes from a pale beam to a mountain killer. It gets to the point after awhile where it's just too corny to read.
     
  10. dskr

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    Pro
    Decent story to start with
    Exposition, however minimal it is

    Con
    Lame way of attaining new powers
    Poor attempt to turn Harry's friends into a HP-Justice League
    Poor relationship interaction (which is H/G inclusive...)

    Conclusion
    Growing clusterfuck of cliché garbage which snowballed ~at/after chapter eight.
     
  11. LT2000

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    I find myself summarily disgusted to note that my work's title was employed within a story that has Harry/Ginny.
     
  12. dskr

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    I find myself primarily disgusted that Ginny isn't turning tricks on a street corner in any of the fics that I've read so far.

    Or maybe she has been all along... the Weasleys had to stay afloat somehow?
     
  13. LT2000

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    Nah, the Weasleys have just been stealing gold from Harry with Dumbledore's help for years while only pretending to care about him. Haven't you been reading your bad cliched fanfics?
     
  14. Giovanni

    Giovanni God of Scotch

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    I liked this fic in the begginning... But then it got away from the author and turned into a composite of everything not to do with a half decent fanfic.
     
  15. dskr

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    Reading bad fics is like waking up next to a fat girl; deny it ever happened if possible or try very hard to forget it if someone else knows.

    The whole Ron pretending to care thing is bogus. The whole jealous prick thing can fly, but Ron being a good enough actor to play Harry for the fool is a laugh.
     
  16. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Aye if he deleted everything up to right before where he met the elves and saved a whole city from dozens of giants and hundreds of death eaters, and rewrpte from there on it'd be salvagable.

    Ditch the damned song lyrics, especially for a band that either didn't exist in the time period he's writing in, or they were screwing around in garages in 1996. Ditch the damned movie and pop culture references that also aren't valid for many years.

    I'd delete chapter 1 also, Dudders busting a nut in Petunia's mouth would drive anyone away that either wasn't warned to skip it, or has S&P caliber tastes.

    It just becomes pure unreadable between typos and as said before, a snowball effect of cliches and god Harry getting stronger and stronger. When he starts bringing the second string characters to bond with the vampires, it realy just goes into a freefall.
     
  17. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    O_O ... whast this? ... duddy/petunia crap? ... god im glad ive skipped this so far...
     
  18. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Skip the first chapter, read the next 6, then stop. Its a halfway average story in the middle
     
  19. Giovanni

    Giovanni God of Scotch

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    To be honest I thought it was kinda funny... In an Oedipus Rex sorta way...

    Cept Duddykins ain't Oedipus.
     
  20. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Regardless it was utterly disgusting, rofl.

    I'd be more able to handle Harry/Lily since Lily was supposedly hot, but Petunia and Dudders... :chainsaw:
     
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