Title: Legacy of the Toad Sage
Fandom: Naruto
Author: Persnikitty
Pairings: Undecided
Rating: M
Summary: How Naruto becomes the true apprentice of the self-proclaimed 'Super Pervert' Jiraiya, the legendary Toad Sage. AU, mature themes and content.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4630356/1/Legacy_of_the_Toad_Sage

This author is without a doubt my favorite current Naruto author no offence to LT and others out there, but there is something about Persnikitty's fics that I really enjoy. He has two other extraordinarily good fics "The Golden Horde" and "When Belief Shapes Reality" which I would both heartily reccomend.

[Ninja-edit] Screwed up the link, fixed it.


Checked by Minion, February 11, 2015
Dead link is dead. If you know where to find another copy of the story, please inform the library staff.

 

Ah yeah this got updated today... Pretty good chapter although he is going a little far with the Orgasm Chakra(tm)

 

It's well written and want not but I just can't stand that abusive villagers cliche. Plus the plot is so dam slow. 2/5

 

+1

I can't force myself to read about child abuse.

Tried to read after the first chapter but simply could not. Probably will try later.

 

I thought it was pretty damn Epic once I got past that first chapter! Had a twist on Kyuubi's chakra that I've never seen Anywhere and an almost good enough reason (for the female half of the village anyway) for the extream hatred.
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Please Continue to second read-through review...

 

Indeed, one of the very very few abusive!villagers fics that overcomes its use of the stupid cliche to be worth reading.

Plus, the final scene of chapter six is juist plain pure win and awesome in text form.

4/5

 

So far there are six chapters filled with nothing.
Besides the pedophile attitudes of tsunade and her apprentice, nothing has really happened that would make the fic stands out...

 

These last chapters are pedo and the usual dumb training. Trite and a bit gross even. I liked Master Nin, but playing up the innocence of this Naruto as he gives women orgasms with his chakra is unsettling. 1/5

 

upon re-read I do have to admit that it's a rather disturbing trend, and the fact of the matter is that the author has pretty much guaranteed that it's going to continue. I still think they have an interesting point about the way of that, but with the explanation given it should only effect Tsunade, very much cheapening the effect for me. The fact that two of the main characters go rapidly OOC is also a detractor that I didn't consider in my first 3am read through.

I still like the story, I still think it has great potential, but your right, on second glance it's not the 'Crack in written form' I was hinting it was. Appologies.

 

I read the fic just to find what all the fuss was about.

Ok. Now I have mixed emotions about it. On one hand it was rather amusing and fun to read this story... But on the other hand - it was really disturbing. What Tsunade and Shizune do in this fic constitute as a sexual abuse of a minor. FFS. The are using a six year old to get some sexual relief. Am i the only one who find the mere idea disgusting and disturbing?

As it was mentioned - there is just not enough crack in this story to make it funny. Hawk did it marvellously in his master nin. But this story just lacks something to make me simply enjoy the reading and not thinking that this fic is so seriously fucked up.

will probably add this sorry to fav and look how it develops.

Added:

I've just read the Golden Horde... OMFG. My brain just exploded... This is one of the worst fic I've ever read... Do you really find this story appealing? Or am I missing something incredible and my pathetic mind can't comprehend the pure beauty of this story?

 

Well, this fic is somewhere in between complete and utter shit and just below average, it seems to be nestled in pretty tight in that regard.

It starts of badly...Very badly. With the chasing, the mobbing etc. It is a really bad plot point most weak authors tend to use...A lot. I admit, that like all cliché's it can be good if well done. You know, make it so that it changes Naruto from canon. But in this case it came of as weak. Very weak. But then, I really don't think Hiruzen would let people get away with such obvious attempts at a citizens life. It is, I belief illegal.

Of course lets not forget what comes after that painful read isn't really...The best of writing. On that same chapter I believe, the evil Uchiha sergeant who insists to be called as such by a Sannin in the obvious portrayal of the arrogant and evil Uchiha. I know, I'm being captain obvious, I know. Seriously though, I don't plan on reading any further then I already have, but I can tell you that Sasuke bashing is inevitable.

Of course, no story such as this can go with out 'teh evil old council guy's', who put seals on a jinchuuriki, just showing how evil they are... If you are going to make a 'council hates Naruto fic' can you please, not make it so obvious. Because again, Hiruzen is not an idiot, and I'm pretty sure they are breaking Konoha's laws. There is no way it isn't.

Ah, well, me being on this site, I am no stranger to internet weirdos who like incest and such and such. But really, a fucking 6 year old? Tsunade is close to being 50 and gets of by a six year old, the very same six year old which she started to see as a son, even going as far as to beg Jiraiya to be his godmother? Ugh... No really, Ugh. Bad writing at it's worst.

Oh, and the fic so far is one big training arc...7 chapters if I remember correctly...

In the Teubor thread I know, but it takes the words right out of my mouth.

TL;DR: No it isn't as good as NTS and skimming through the authors other work which is equally as bad or even worse, he doesn't compare to LT.

1/5

 

I don't mind the fic, as it is something to read and the writing is pretty good, but I can't help but getting a picture of some slightly-overweight and very unwashed virgin, teenage boy fapping away to the thought of Naruto getting some from every girl he meets just because of his 'primal chakra'.

*FAPFAPFAP* "Wow," Persnikitty chuckled nasally, "that would be so hot!" *FAPFAPFAPFAPFAP*

 

Cute little story. Better than most fuck-everything-that-moves (especially by mistake) for writing alone. Fun little thing, I like.

 

RoflMao!

Taken from his bio:

Unwashed virgin in his late 30's???? lmao

 

yah, I was totally gettin all hot. Thinkin' about all that "primal" chakra as I did my best nasally tone. I was soooo close and then I read this:

My Boner Is Dead

My Review:

"I was enjoying your story up until the part where you had two middle aged woman getting off because of a 6 year old. The sharp turn toward sex with naruto being the focus was both unexpected and disturbing. You've protrayed both Tsunade and Shizune being so starved for sex that they've turned toward a child for sexual release as well as weaving in sexual overtones to your portrayal of motherhood. Last time I checked motherhood didn't involve any anamalistic kneading or licking, or any orgasms for that matter either. I can usually spot when people start putting their sexual fetishes, yours being your oedipus complex into their stories but it just sorta exploded out the second you intoduced a female charater into the story. You should warn viewers about both the pedophilic overtones and the child sexual abuse you've intoduced into your story."

(This story suggests this writer has a very warped opinion on motherhood as well as regarding age and consent, and could acually be a warning sign that this writer has suffered sexual abuse himself and its bleeding into his stories).

I would recommend immediate psychiatric attention.

 

If you don't mind occasional WTF moments, concepts that belong in PWP stories, and weird sexual fantasies, you'll probably enjoy this quite a bit.

Shoot me.

But no, this fic isn't a masterpiece by any stretch of the imagination.

 

Aye masterpieces they are not but they represent the pinnacle of one type of fanfiction in my mind, the sort that appeals to immature porn-obsessed young men. But I enjoy his fics for the quasi-smut, the interesting ideas, the fairly original plots and the solid writing. I feel this is the worst of his three fics in terms of over obsession on sexual stimulation and bad cliches his other two are certainly better but this is the one that had just been updated on fanfiction not "When Belief Shapes Reality".

 

I am reminded of a fic where the entire point was that Naruto went through puberty and EVERY SINGLE female in the manga became attracted to him... Even the background women. Every single one then lined up to have sex with him. Kyuubi took over his body to train him. And all the females helped train him too. Eventually men got jealous and Naruto kicked them all out of Konoha...

 

I agree with the above responses that think this fic was kind of 'wtf' in the reactions of Tsunade and Shizune.

This is sort of a silly complaint, but his paragraph length bugged me. When I'm reading a paperback novel, the length of the paragraphs don't irritate me at all, but when I'm reading them through my browser if the paragraph is too long it becomes a bitch for me to read. Most fanfics don't have this issue, but the paragraphs just ran too damn long for me in this story. It's frivilous, I know.

2/5

 

This story creeped me out. At first the "chakra burst" thing was a bit intriguing. I thought that it was going to make a brief introduction and maybe a timeskip to show Naruto's affect on future females of Konoha, but it just stays on a 6 or so year old Naruto giving pleasure to Tsunade and Shizune. I don't even really recall if Naruto grows any as a fighter or character during the time either. 1/5 for focusing on combining "Seduction" Naruto and preteen training. One of the two is annoying, but together it's just disturbing.