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WIP Man off the Moon by FiendLurcher - T - Fate/Extra x Mass Effect

Discussion in 'Fate/Stay Night' started by Zel, May 29, 2018.

  1. Mishie

    Mishie Fat Dog

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    I'd like to say that I'm almost impressed with how quickly the story went from a 5/5 to a 3/5, but there was nothing quick about it. It was a slow and drawn out death, and it's just so perfectly SpaceBattles that it hurts. Literally the only purpose of the story now is to jerk off to how cool and amazing Emiya is, that and to exposition about random shit that has no actual effect on the story or characters.
     
  2. Gengar

    Gengar Polymagus Prestige DLP Supporter

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    No one is familiar with anything in the Fate series. If anyone says they are, they're lying.

    Doesn't stop people from enjoying it. :p
     
  3. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Man off the Moon has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 26
    Words: 501,900
    Updated: 2018-12-18 00:43:25 UTC
    Published: 2018-04-15 20:03:38 UTC
    Previously updated: about 1 month ago

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  4. Dr. Strange Lulz

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    Read the latest chapter last night.

    I love Mass Effect, hell anyone who visits the gaming threads could probably tell you that about me, I practically shout it from the rooftops. And I love the Nasuverse.

    But to be honest... I've lost any and all interest in this story. It's well written from a technical standpoint, the author also does a decent enough job of keeping the characters similar to their canon personalities.

    My issue with it is that there is very little overarching plot. For the most part the entire fic post-boot camp is just one emergency after another, and even when I tried to slow down my reading I still couldn't shake the rushed pacing.

    And somehow despite every action feeling rushed, the story still progresses at a snail's pace. Chapters 21-26 are essentially one long chase scene, with minor breaks in between.

    The overwhelming amount of description, which I loved at the start, has become this fic's greatest fault to me. 500,000+ words, and I honestly couldn't tell you where the plot is going, besides the next emergency. Far too much time is spent describing minor actions, and too little is dedicated to moving the plot forward.

    That's just how I feel anyway.
     
  5. Gengar

    Gengar Polymagus Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I find pacing to be a huge problem in pretty much every Nasuverse xover fic I read.

    The all read like diaries to me. Instead of skipping to the protagonists most interesting days, I'm forced to slog through every meaningless second of their existence.

    And yes, this includes the countless chapters I'm forced to read regarding the convoluted bs magecraft theory I'm constantly baffled anyone cares about.

    I just want a fun read where Shirou spends the entire fic thinking about sucking on Lalter's tiddies. Alert me when that's done kthnx.
     
  6. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Man off the Moon has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 27
    Words: 505,839
    Updated: 2019-01-09 22:55:42 UTC
    Published: 2018-04-15 20:03:38 UTC
    Previously updated: 23 days ago

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  7. quixoticcool

    quixoticcool Second Year

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    This is a weird one, the first couple chapters are *insert generic spacebattles crossover here* this is literally hundreds of thousands of wasted words that I still barely comprehend beyond understanding they were jacking it to the idea of Emiya fucking people up. After that it actually got a plot, sort of. Still spacebattles, still ludicrously drawn out but a few more things actually happen. Overall I'll give it a 2/5 just because I occasionally understood what was going on in the later chapters and why that might be significant which is a big stride for this story and for spacebattles in general.
     
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  8. Mishie

    Mishie Fat Dog

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    It's just so hard to give a shit anymore about an update when I know that it's just going to be everyone jerking off to how cool and awesome and amazing Emiya is.
     
  9. wellis

    wellis Fifth Year

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    How are the author's other Fate stories?
     
  10. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Man off the Moon has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 28
    Words: 521,942
    Updated: 2019-01-30 20:25:26 UTC
    Published: 2018-04-15 20:03:38 UTC
    Previously updated: 21 days ago

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  11. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Man off the Moon has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 29
    Words: 524,149
    Updated: 2019-01-31 21:15:47 UTC
    Published: 2018-04-15 20:03:38 UTC
    Previously updated: 1 day ago

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  12. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Man off the Moon has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 30
    Words: 546,372
    Updated: 2019-02-10 10:43:31 UTC
    Published: 2018-04-15 20:03:38 UTC
    Previously updated: 10 days ago

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  13. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Man off the Moon has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 31
    Words: 564,181
    Updated: 2019-02-18 15:40:13 UTC
    Published: 2018-04-15 20:03:38 UTC
    Previously updated: 8 days ago

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  14. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Man off the Moon has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 32
    Words: 583,906
    Updated: 2019-03-01 12:46:03 UTC
    Published: 2018-04-15 20:03:38 UTC
    Previously updated: 11 days ago
    New Summary:
    Hiding from the force that ravaged it 14,000 years ago, the Moon Cell slides into another world where humanity advanced along a completely different axis. There a man of many regrets is given a second chance to walk among the living, but when granted the ability to walk away... Can he take it?

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  15. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    I come back and the first scene in Emiya being so cool, telling Shepard what to do as he is a master hacker and l33t and then she brings up cooking.

    I hate this story.
     
  16. Mishie

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    It's actually legitimately depressing looking back at my initial view and comparing it to the most recent chapters. The story has become a nonstop circle-jerk that only exists to show off how Emiya is better that literally everyone at literally everything and that he's too pure and too kind to ever fail and let someone die. I honestly don't even know why I bother to read it outside of inertia and boredom at this point, and I kinda feel like if I just dropped it and stopped reading that I wouldn't really notice or care all that much.
     
  17. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Man off the Moon has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 33
    Words: 605,905
    Updated: 2019-03-29 11:28:36 UTC
    Published: 2018-04-15 20:03:38 UTC
    Previously updated: 28 days ago
    New Summary:
    The story of an unyielding man thrust into a galaxy of myriad grays. Of questioning the past, and of walking the same steps, wondering whether any answers beyond death lie at the end of that long and perilous road.

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