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WIP Mother of Learning by nobody103 - T - Original Fantasy

Discussion in 'Original Fiction' started by Betosa, Apr 3, 2013.

  1. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Lich is centuries old. But I think like chrnno said Zach has only been in the loop for a handful of decades. Zorian has been in it what, just under a decade?

    thattin - wouldn't be surprised. It incorporates the part I'd noticed and reminded me of something I'd forgotten he could do.
     
  2. EsperJones

    EsperJones Headmaster

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    Updated.

    I'm not sure who Raynie's brother is, but the pace has definitely jumped. I'm assuming there will be one more chapter pre-invasion (or the invasion will begin next chapter), one more for the invasion proper, and one to wrap things up.
     
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  3. Puzzled

    Puzzled High Inquisitor

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    Way back when Zorian was investigating his soul marker there was a not date with Raynie. Basically she was raised as the the heir to her tribe of wolf shifters her whole life until her brother was born and proved himself competent. She got sent off to Cyoria as a polite exile.
     
  4. Donimo

    Donimo Groundskeeper

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    Yeah I couldn't remember that either. I really aught to re-read this story.
     
  5. OkraMaster

    OkraMaster First Year

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    Yup, pace has definitely gone up. Lots of jigsaws moving into place. The chapter name - Powderkeg is quite suggestive too! I think next chapter will end with the start of the invasion, or the breakdown of the truce.
     
  6. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Last few chapters I feel we've started having an issue with tell vs show.

    Start of this one had some good 'show' but then scene after scene that felt heavy on 'tell.'