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WIP Naruto: Eleven by Geor-sama - T - Naruto

Discussion in 'Naruto' started by Dark Syaoran, Feb 19, 2009.

  1. whateveritis12

    whateveritis12 Third Year

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    Ah, I know about it being Konan, not Conan, I just wasn't paying attention when I wrote the original post.

    But still it's interesting learning the nuances of Japanese.
     
  2. Rehio

    Rehio Bad Dragon ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Are you sure it's not Jee-rai-ah? "Rai" as in "Right."
     
  3. Howdy

    Howdy Dark Lord

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    This is correct, Chime?? made a small error.

    Rai is pronounced Ra-ee.
     
  4. Georsama

    Georsama First Year

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    I updated this fic. Figured I'd let anyone interested know.
     
  5. whateveritis12

    whateveritis12 Third Year

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    Good update. Though I'm not too hot on the 5 squads getting demolished as they did (though acceptable because of who they were facing i.e. Madara and Deidara who specializes in more wide range destruction than Kakuzu and Hidan). A good chapter though with the confrontation with Yugito and Naruto.

    Nice change with Yugito's characterization when they run away from the fights.
     
  6. ZeroTheDestroyer

    ZeroTheDestroyer Auror

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    The story was good at the start, but its been at least 2 chapters since anything interesting has happened.
     
  7. whateveritis12

    whateveritis12 Third Year

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    The last chapter was the ending of both the Akatsuki's fights, in which Gai died. This last chapter is a transitional chapter probably to bring in the Jiraiya arc, and possibly the Sasuke vs. Deidara fight. I think Geor, since only Naruto, Sakura, and Neji are continuing onto Kumo, is going to have the team in the village when Sasuke attacks Kira. But that might be too much.
     
  8. sincostan

    sincostan High Inquisitor

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    Neji is awesome in this story. I think I like him better than Naruto. I loved their fight strategy and Tenten's reaction.
     
  9. Georsama

    Georsama First Year

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