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Oneshot Ne Fiat Lux, by Silver Pard

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by Banner, May 3, 2008.

4.2571430206299/5, 35 votes
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  1. hchan1

    hchan1 Sixth Year

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    May 6, 2008 #21
    Pretty nice read. Avoids the cliched tiredness of most twin-who-lived fics by simply jumping to the good part.
     
  2. Blaise

    Blaise Golden Patronus

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    May 6, 2008 #22
    Utterly brilliant, even though I despise Unsung Hero nowadays. 4.8/5
     
  3. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    May 6, 2008 #23
    Unsung Hero has gone straight to hell, hasn't it? Even I've stopped bothering with it.
     
  4. World

    World Oberstgruppenführer DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    May 6, 2008 #24
    There are parts where the execution could have been done a bit better.

    Other than that, nice one-shot. 4/5
     
  5. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    May 9, 2008 #25
    :\

    I don't see what's so good about the story, I tried reading it, but the writing style is just... irritating. One sided conversations do not appeal to me. But meh, it seems to have gotten a very good rating, into the library it goes.
     
  6. Gabrinth

    Gabrinth Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    May 9, 2008 #26
    The one sided conversation was supposed to appeal to the irony in the fact that we could easily imagine each and every one of Dumbledore's bullshit answers without him breaking up Harry's speech.

    I thought the portrayal was very well done, and the subject was amusing, but that there wasn't anything special enough to make it 'epic.' 4/5
     
  7. Eneps

    Eneps Squib

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    May 13, 2008 #27
    Simply Amazing! The use of this format was genius, I think I seen this somewhere else, but I'm not sure. It felt like I could Ad's face as it slowly turned to horror as Harry talked. 5/5 I think I'll read it again.
     
  8. Blazing Chime

    Blazing Chime Second Year

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    May 17, 2008 #28
    I had hard time getting into the story but once I did I liked it very much. Great fic and I would say even better than Unsung Hero.

    5/5
     
  9. Grubdubdub

    Grubdubdub Supreme Mugwump

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    May 17, 2008 #29
    This was a good one-shot, but unsong hero, if I recall correctly is nearing 200,000 words. I don't think it's fair to compare.

    I liked the writing style, allowing the reader to speculate what exactly happened. 4.5/5
     
  10. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    May 18, 2008 #30
    Screw that. At this point in time anything is better than Unsung Hero. No comparison, this wins hands down.
     
  11. NataliaGAG

    NataliaGAG Fourth Year

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    May 22, 2008 #31
    Wow, I like it. Very much. 5/5
     
  12. XxEnvyxX

    XxEnvyxX Groundskeeper

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    May 26, 2008 #32
    A really good piece of writing *grin*
    Unique format, but that doesn´t make it any less worth reading

    5/5
     
  13. Kaz Hirai

    Kaz Hirai Squib

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    Jun 21, 2008 #33
    Why yes. I would love a drizzle of bland, vaguely flippant teenage rebellion fiction on top of my cliché sundae.

    This isn't funny or interesting or original or thought-provoking, and it especially isn't dark. The author writes like a petulant child desperately affecting an air of nonchalance in a situation that doesn't warrant it.

    Two of five. The pity point is for making this a one-shot.
     
  14. mbond98

    mbond98 Seventh Year

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    Jun 21, 2008 #34
    That counts as necro. If you had something relevant, be my guest.

    However, you did not. Nor will you ever.

    GTFO.
     
  15. cossacks

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    Jun 22, 2008 #35
    wow, i just read it and that was brilliant! It really makes you think, so much potential in it. Shame that there's no prequal to the story though.
     
  16. mbond98

    mbond98 Seventh Year

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    Jun 23, 2008 #36
    There is; its called Unsung Hero.
     
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