As I was searching the net, I came across this interesting character: Empath (Manuel Alfonso Rodrigo de la Rocha) and this little tidbit about him:

As God is my witness, I did not know anything about him until today. I hope that is not considered plagiarism...

 

It's good for you to acknowledge someone else's similar idea, especially when it's trademarked or copyrighted. However, cases of similar ideas arising from independent sources has been happening for a very, very long time. That's why copyrighting and trademarking were invented in the first place.

I'd recommend you note it in an author's note for your next chapter and forget about it. If you want, you could even add a disclaimer to chapter 1 (like "...is in no way intentionally related to the Marvel character Empath...").

 

I did like this story. I've been reading it on and off for a while and the chapter length make it easy to put down and pick back up. I love the pairing as its not used often enough and i love the fact that Harry just doesn't fall right into them lol. Thanks for the good read
4.5/5

 

From author's FF.net profile, posted yesterday

Guaranteed Patil NC-17ness... Hooray I say.. Hooray

 

Now that I have my computer issues resolved (until it acts up again and gets chucked off my balcony), I can finally post a reply.

Well, I have to practice writing smut too. I heard it said that it is easy to overdo the amount of sex/love scenes for a story, and after looking over my list of planned scenes, I can see that now.

What I am going to do is throw in the disclaimer for Chapter 15, where it would be more relevant, and then when I rewrite the first chapter (which I clearly acknowledge stinks like a stable that hasn't been mucked in a year), I will add it there too.

I see what you mean, and I think I may have made things too subtle or spread in out too thinly in my plans. Maybe I should move one of my scenes up a little to get one part out of the way...

Oh, he will be learning things from DA members, if not from the group itself.

Unfortunately, the chapters with the action got pushed back...sorry.


I think some of the disjointedness (thanks Boofers) comes from trying to make things a little too tight and rushing to finish (like that part Thal referred to that I need to fix). Also, having nine chapter of transition and hint-laying may have been far too much, but I was simply viewing them as practice for the rest of the fic, hoping my writing would improve. In rereading the chapters that I had no beta, even I cringe at what I wrote back then.

I think on some of the early chapters, I may have laid on the quiet Slytherin/Empathy thing too thickly, hence the "Harry is docile" (ouch) reviews I have received. Definitely need to rework that...

I finally have a Brit-pick now, so that area should improve, although we have a difference of opinion on "all right" vs. "alright".

 

There is never too much twincest.

 

I tried reading this story, but I couldn't really get into it. I might try it agian though, as that was a while ago, but if I remember right, it was kinda slow and dull

 

I just read the new chapter and it was good.
One thing that I noticed was that the point of view seems to have changed a little.
Either that or I read too many stories with different POVs and simply became use to them, so this one seems foreign now.

Still a good chapter.

Mainly posted to say that there was an update, since I did not see that the author stated it before.

 

Sorry for not announcing the update, but then again, who cares about the boring romance section.

No, the POV is still the same. Can you pinpoint exactly where you noticed a change?

 

No.
Everything is the same.
I guess I grew accostumed to different POVs and when I read this story again the POV seemed different.
My mistake.

 

That's cool. There will be times in the fic when we won't be privy to all of the protagonist's thoughts, but I will lay a couple of clues leading to any surprises.

 

Sorry for double posting, but Chapter 15 is now up:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2496200/15/

Enjoy...

 

Dont be sorry for double posting, just dont do it. Use the edit button, its really not that hard.

As for the story i am going off this more and more as it gets older, just something about the flow of it that puts me off. Will probably try and power through but if it gets much worse i will be forced to drop this story.

Hunted

 

Allow me to put forth two scenarios:

Scenario 1: If I were to have edited my previous post, and it show up as a new post for everyone to see, then I sincerely apologize.

Scenario 2: If I were to have edited my previous post, and the thread did not refresh itself, then no one would know I had updated my fic unless they actually looked. In that case, I would respectfully tell you to go rim yourself.

The correct procedure would have been to have sent a mod a PM explaining the problem and posting a disclaimer with it saying I had permission to do so. This was my mistake and I shall PM one after I post this.

Lesson learned and we move on...

 

The start of this story really bugged me. Harry was being all angsty, and Remus used the word 'cub' in reference to him which I hate. The only thing that kept me going was Harry's mocking of Hermione. "The poor dears love you." By Chapter 2, I was kind of getting into it, even if Harry was a bit of a loser at Gringotts. And by Chapter 3? Well, I don't think I could stop even if I wanted to. This is a very good story, even if it does have a rather weak start.

Plus, I LOVE your avatar nymphe.

 

I recommend skimming the first nine chapters and actually reading chapters 10 through current. I fully recognize the early chapters need some serious reworking, and it will be done once I hit a cruising altitude in my writing style. If you can give me some detailed criticism, I am all ears.

Thank you for the feedback, and the avatar love. As I continue to write, I am learning about the creative writing process, which can explain why my early chapters suck. Also, I have recently been learning about how the reader view things, which one can miss without positive and negative feedback.

 

I'm on 4th chapter right now and I like the story very much. First chapter isn't very good but the rest is simply brilliant.

The only thing I don't like is that people order Harry around and he accepts it. (ex: Hermione ordering and choosing suits for Harry, not even asking his opinion.)

4/5

 

Thank you. I had a professional take a look at it. She strongly recommened that I pull out the plot points for the first three chapters and completely rewrite them from scratch.

 

Two new Chapters added.. Check 'em out