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WIP Novocaine by StardustWarrior2991 - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Mordecai, Apr 12, 2020.

  1. Genghiz Khan

    Genghiz Khan Headmaster

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    The story updated. Just to warn everyone, and I don't think this merits a spoiler, it's more of the same. The adventures of the Golden Snitch Collective and the Diagon Restoration Programme, day 64. There are some parts where the narrative takes place from the pov of a minor character with no involvement of the main cast. I skipped those bits. I don't know if they add anything to this story, but given that this chapter probably clocks in at upwards of 10k words I don't care too much.
     
  2. cucio

    cucio Groundskeeper

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    Author sure likes their enumerations and their passing knowledge of everything and anything under the sun, from gastronomy to counselling. A compendium of Experts Exchange amateur tutorials loosely wrapped as a HP post-Hogwarts fanfic.

    Decent grammar and a few interesting ideas. Terrible pacing, found myself skipping huge chunks of pointless lists of stuff. Harry is pretty OOC, in the sense that in canon he is a doer, not much a planner. A bunch of hypercompetent 18-year-olds taking over Magical Britain legislature is a rather unbelievable premise.

    Meh/5.
     
  3. JimmyCranberry

    JimmyCranberry High Inquisitor

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    It really is quite remarkable how the author has managed to write a story that feels both fresh and old hat, that is both rich in detail and yet sorely lacking in it. Above all, though, it's just so dry. Didn't find myself looking forward to reading each new chapter the way I would with an engaging story.

    Little boost in rating for the author's competance, if nothing else. 2.5/5, rounded up to 3/5. Solid almost recommended.
     
  4. Harpo the Fool

    Harpo the Fool Fifth Year

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    Story is complete as of Nov 2021. I don't remember whether I finished reading it, but I probably did, not that I care. It was good in places, and had a few things that were memorable until I forgot them.