Coupled with this,

the story title(which appears to be the author trying sound clever but just coming off stupid.), and the author's NAME(Excessive Capitalization and numbers)


Nope.avi.


Related: Obsurum Fabula. Obsurum appears to mean "explaining the obscure by means of more obscure" and Fabula: "a series of story events not yet rearranged into a plot"

In other words the author apparently picked some random words out of a latin dictionary

 

There isn't a whole lot of stuff that I can add that hasn't already been said. Shitty characterization of Harry drags this story down into the mud.

1.5/5 rounded down to 1/5

The extra 0.5 for decent grammar and for being able to string together a coherent sentence, but not nearly enough for me to rate it higher than 1.

 

OP: how the fuck do you log in with that user name ?

 

Updated: Still lame. Harry cleverly shows his hand to Evildore.

 

I assume he lets cookies take care of it (I do that and my name isn't exactly complicated)

 

Doesn't VBulletin have different fields for account name and displayed name?

 

This is the kind of shit I would have loved to have read when I was about thirteen. To be honest, the writing isn't that bad in the last chapter, but pretty bad at the beginning. However the plot is pretty generic to Dark!Harry fics.

1/5

 

The name calling really detracts from the story; Harry is supposed to be mature and sarcastic but then he spouts these insipid names. From Dumbles, to Dumbly-dor, to Dumblestiltskin it's just tiresome. Without the multitudes of names it would be more believable that Harry is mature; name calling makes him seem childish.

It's readable and while that is a step up from many other stories, it doesn't change that this is just not a very good story.

2/5