I agree with the smug tone of it. Sometimes it backfires. The characters are portrayed as having earth-shattering revelations and epiphanies and shit, and then the writer cocks up and does a 180 making all that meaningless, like IP82 pointed out with Harry determined to improve, and then getting the memory dump. The writing is serviceable, but it tries to be better than it actually is.

 

This author always falls into the pit that is plotholes and tries to fill in every last detail about how a particular setting/world/character would actually function and/or respond to various circumstances.

It's utterly futile, but interesting to read if you're into that. It doesn't make for a fast-paced, entertaining story.

Or we could go with the DM explanation. That kind of encompasses all of this anyway.

First a player (Harry) wants to accomplish something.
Second DM launches into long and ultimately boring explanation of why player cannot do that.
Third, player tries to find loophole and exploit it to get what he wants anyway.

Except in this case DM/Player are one in the same and the story just jumps right into yet another long, boring explanation of how the player (Harry/Luna) will cleverly beat the system and utterly screw da bad guys (Dumbledore/Snape).

Then if we're lucky action might follow. Some chapters it doesn't.

Schizophrenia aside, I do enjoy these stories, because it represents a cathartic primal scream directed at all the things that were wrong with canon.

So, 3/5.

 

When will it end?

 

This last chapter squicks me.

 

Squicks? I dare not ask.

Well the wizarding IVF thing was sort of amusing, in a roundabout way. Reminds me of that Friends moment, "my sister is having my babies". The forced gender change stuff as well was lulzy, in fact that whole chapter with Narcissa was pretty amusing. Unfortunately, I'm not sure as to whether it is supposed to make me laugh or if it's supposed to be seriuos business. Blurring the line between comedy and plot is not something PL is that good at, it shows in this chapter.

I laughed pretty damn hard then.

I ended up treating this whole chapter as a sort of crack parody of pureblood life, don't know if that was the intention or not, but I found it pretty fucking funny at times.

 

Totally necroing this. If you're talking about the chapter I think you are (judging by the IVF response just above mine) I can only imagine that you're squicked by the fact that they decided to turn Draco into a rapeslave, and take away his right to ever see his children again? Or the part where they laugh about it, after completely ignoring the revelation that Lucius serially raped his own son from a young age?

I think that Lionheart has written some of the only fanfics I ever truly gave up on reading.....

 

I remember that scene. In my opinion, it's the worst thus far in this story (although a couple others come close from sheer stupidity.)

I'm still following this story, and while it's hardly the best story ever written, some of the ideas are original & interesting, so at the very least it's a way to pass the time.

2.5/5

 

You must be very bored with your life.

 

I feel obligated by my &Totsean background to inform you that huffing raid passes time.

 

I read about fifteen chapters of this story before giving up on it. I felt the author of this story wanted to do something with this story yet never quite measured up to his big dreams. A lot of the ideas are good in theory, but they make for a terrible read. Also, although the notes do not alter the story, he is way too smug in them.

2/5.

 

Rofl, he's still writing this? XD

My 1/5 rating is not budging.

 

One chapter every couple of weeks? Or about 10 minutes worth of reading? It's not really that much, and I do actually find some of the ideas interesting. (To be honest though, most of them aren't really related to the magical world and have more to do with some of the side plots.)

Although admittedly, I was extremely bored the day I first came across this story and read the first 60 or 70 chapters.

 

1/5 for the freakshow.

 

Look, calling someone psychotic over what he writes is a a really, really bad thing to start on DLP. Just saying.

 

I've reviews calling me a rapist for a scene I wrote in a fictional story. By this reasoning, Jim Butcher is a child abuser.

Is the quoted bit your own opinion/review, lanceavalon? I've seen Perfect Lionheart called a sociopath on multiple occasions on this and other sites. Frankly, even if he were, I wouldn't care unless he were going out and hurting other people.

My beef with him is that while he occasionally has decent ideas (CED and PKH both started from actionable concepts), he then goes out and wastes them with shitty, incoherent stories. He apparently has a large fanbase who groove on this kind of thing, but it's not my cup of cake. (By review counts, he's a far "better" author than anyone on here--almost 11k reviews for CED, over 9k for PKH).

I rate this story 2/5 based on what little I read back when it was fresh; I bailed when the fail started to come on strong. (I'll leave out the reply I received to a review I left him; his inability to accept criticism is well documented and not germane to the story rating).

 

Yes but you have never defended rape or any of the horribly things that happen in your stories, you only defend the story itself.

Basically PL defends both his stories AND the horribly actions like rape (i.e. such and such character deserved it and worse)... just read his notes and shit, 'that boy ain't right'.

 

It was written and posted by Nugar (writer of the People Lie Naruto fanfiction, among others) in the Naruto section on The Fanfiction Forum in a thread where someone remarked on that CED had been updated.

Heres also a little followup that he also posted.

I've never read more than the initial chapter of either PL story, so I can't exactly comment, but Nugars opinion and vehemence seems a bit extreme.

 

I first read this fic a long time back. This was back when I was really bored, so I somehow stuck with Partially Kissed Hero uptil around chapter 60, before quitting.

It is some of the weirdest shit I have ever seen. Have you seen the latest chapter? I ran across the fic somewhere recently and saw that it had updated. Seems less like Harry Potter and some sort of mix between British Royalty and Alice in Wonderland now. Frankly, the fic was spiraling out of control some time before that, building up from a decent idea to something that you might hallucinate while on some particularly vivid drugs.

0/5, in my opinion. Lower if possible.

As for Chunin Exam Day, it is not quite as bad as this one, but still a bit of a headache. That, however, stays in Naruto (as far as I can remember) and the plot points may be a bit wtf, but you can at least understand and follow what is going on, even if it stretches the imagination.

And yeah, I dunno if he is a sociopath or anything, but I was rather disturbed by PL's casual dismissal of some of the things his characters do in both of his stories - Draco is a little shit, but what he has Harry do to him just seems really extreme. It's something that you might think about doing just for the pleasure of imagining, but never actually do because that is going just a bit too far.

 

Quoted entirely for truth. The fic isn't even worth discussing anymore.

 

It's not rape if she dies after. :awesome