Has anyone noticed that Hermione is a moron? She's yet to question the fact that Harry got ridiculously intelligent and knowledgeable over night...

Whatever.

 

I think I threw up a little.

Honestly it isn't horrible overall, but all the little 'gems' like that one kill any potential it might conceivably have.

2/5

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I'll admit I didn't go into this story with very high expectations after the trainwreck that was Prefect Lionheart's Naruto story, so I skipped up to the 'soul battle' scene, that was painful to read. The only pleasure you're going to get out of this is if you're a masochist. 1/5

 

The Snape head exploding bit was wtf.

I think the overly evil Dumbledore kind of ruins the story. I don't know, it's just annoying to have him rubbing his hands in the background like a comic book villain or something.

But there's very little non-retard Harry coming out these days so I'll read it. I never claimed to have standards.

 

The only thing I've found really likeable is the idea that Harry decided to get studious and knowledgeable on his own. Sure, he then got a shitload of memories and magical knowledge from Tom Riddle, but he was already beginning to get pro-active about his education. Language Lozenges were fun. The rest of it was a bit too ridiculous for me. 2/5

Edit: To clarify, what I liked about Language Lozenges was the somewhat creative (if abnormal and overpowered) take on learning languages, and the thoughts behind learning specific ones. Latin for better understanding of spells, other Ancient languages for Runic knowledge, etc. I understand the execution of a fair idea was unrealistic.

 

I rather disliked them, actually.

As most of you know, I generally take a stance which gives magic quite a bit of power. I have been quoted saying that a wizard could survive a nuclear bomb, if he was aware of what was happening and thus aware of what spells to use to protect himself.

However, one thing that I say wizards cannot do (yet) is give themselves knowledge via magic, beyond legilimency, memory viewing and divination. It cheapens the idea of knowledge far too much. In addition, language is far more than knowledge: it is a practice, a habit. Language is the medium of our very thoughts themselves.

 

Wow, this took a real rape-the-dog turn with the latest chapter. Except it lasted pretty much the whole chapter, and Dumbledore didn't just rape the dog, but raped it to death, revived it as a zombie, then raped it once more.

We get it. Dumbledore's a bad person. Move the fuck on.

 

So this one tanked as well? I expected as much as soon as I saw the author's name. Overkill is a concept he doesn't understand.

 

It started to tank around 6 and just kept getting worse, and worse, and worse. Guilty pleasure, indeed.

 

QFT. He ruined his Naruto fic in a similar manner. It's a shame, 'cause he has some pretty original ideas, but overkill is overkill.

 

QFT man. If Dumbledore was that frickin' evil, Harry should have been paste on the wall at some point. Ugh... Should've just tried to pace the story better.

 

trash bin this POS.

1.5/5

 

It is ridiculously OOC, but I couldn't help loling. Even if it goes to the trash bin, I'll follow the story. It is making me damn curious where the author is going to take this, if he has any plan at all.

 

The fic is well-written and decent. I am in complete agreement with the author's portrayal of Dumbledore. However, the Harry-gets-Voldie's-memory is a heavily overused plot device. Further, if he already has Voldie's memories, he should be looking to actively manipulate things in Hogwarts, matching the old coot, manipulation for manipulation. I really hope this Harry shows some initiative in building his own support base. One person can do only so much. Finally, the ridiculously over-the-top death of Snape was just too outrageous to be true. Legilimency can be painful, but from there to turning it into some plastic explosive to blow off someone's head is just too great a stretch of imagination.

I shall nevertheless be keeping a watch on the story.

Rating: 4/5

I will take the liberty to disagree with you. In my opinion, Dumbledore is utterly evil in that he takes away Harry's choice at every step. The ability to respect the decisions of others is at the core of tolerance, and the old coot ignores this aspect at every single step. To him, Harry is a Vergeltungswaffe against Voldemort and he took every single step to ensure this. The idea of a two hundred year old wizard manipulating to turn a teenager into a corpse (after all, Harry was supposed to take Voldemort's killing curse) is completely disgusting. As for the `good of the world', I will take those pontifications with a little pinch of salt. That abstract concept is so abused that it really does not bear commenting on. Everyone believes they have the good of the world in mind when they launch on Machiavellian projects. In my opinion, in HBP, Harry should have done a little dance on the lying old goat's grave.

 

He might as well have done it while he could. He would have been lying in a grave next to him soon enough.

Really, if it hadn't been for Dumbledore, Voldemort would have won. Easily.

By the way...

Is an abominable cliche of a name, which everyone hates. Stop using it. Use their names, or nothing.

 

You can skip the tyrant's solace, `but for me, everyone would have been dead!'. That little overused cliche is not remotely amusing, far less true. And in any case, no one can plan accurately for 25 years in future; there are too many variables in play.

As for Dumbledore's record in catching Death Eaters, it is less than impressive. Apart from the moment when Harry led the attack on the DoM, we do not know of any single success of his. Don't you find it suspicious that he waited for four years after he knew of the existence of Horcruxes to find old Tom's other little trinkets?

 

I could go all out on this, but I'll just ask a question.
How could they have won, had Dumbledore not existed?

Remember, canon. Harry is a weak dumbass in canon.

 

Likely someone else would have interviewed Trelawney and got her prophecy. Voldie would still have attacked the Potters, and got himself offed and remained a spirit. He would have spent the remainder of his time as a weak spirit, possessing itty-bitty snakes. Hardly much of a problem, if you ask me.

 

Just the mere existence of Dumbledore set Voldemort back by god knows how many years.

Just think, where would the Philosopher's Stone be if not for Dumbledore. Sure, he could have devised more tougher defences for it, but without Dumbledore, the Stone could have been stolen ages ago, allowing Voldemort to recreate his body much earlier.

Are you forgetting the Fourth Year? In fact, without Dumbledore, who recalled the Order almost immediately after learning of Voldemort's rebirth, there could have been no organised resistance whatsoever against Voldemort, who would have been given far more license to recruit and expand his forces, while speeding up the takeover at the Ministry.

Still, Dumbledore's most valuable contribution would be his presence. He is the only one Voldemort fears. This is proven by how quickly the situation deteriorated once Dumbledore had been killed. If there was no Dumbledore, Voldemort would have been more daring, and there would be nothing stopping him from pushing forward an all-out attack on the school, which would more likely than not resulted in Harry's death, seeing as how he is pretty much a useless retard in canon barring any deus ex machina.

There are a lot of things Dumbledore could have done or should never have done which might have yielded better results during their struggle against Voldemort, but for all his mistakes and weaknesses, magical Britain (a rather fractured and unprepared society) would have fallen long ago - and along with Harry killed - without him.