...I loved chapter 10.

Chapter 11?

The fail train has struck this fic so hard it astounds me. So much stupid, so few words.

... 1->10 = 4/5 For entertainment

11 and onwards (I don't even care if this gets better, this chapter has crossed the line from guilty pleasure into fucking retarded) - 1/5

 

super evil immortal snape and dumbles. that is all that is needed to know bring the mace.

.5/5 just wrong on to many levels.

 

New chapter was a complete waste of time. It's not bad, but if you read chapter 11, then you won't learn anything new, relevant, or interesting by reading chapter 12. I'm still not entirely sure if the author's just shitty at writing likable females, or if we're supposed to hate this Hermione.

I think I'm more irritable because I just read a chapter and not a god damn thing happened.

 

Can't disagree with you on the point that nothing really happened.
I hope the next chapter gets better...or at least have more action and/or plot or some funny scenes.

 

Meh. It was... interesting. Vaguely entertaining. I did like Snape's repeated horrific deaths. They were... amusing (especially ExplodingHead!Snape). Other than that, though, not all that great.

I don't despise the Harry/Hermione pairing as much as some here, but it, to my mind, shows a distinct lack of imagination on the author's part. I mean, she's the only girl that he already knows well, so she's the obvious logical choice for a pairing, but soooo boring. It just makes it look like the author didn't want to go through the effort of fleshing out one of the numerous underdeveloped female characters, which smacks of fail.

The writing was decent, if not spectacular, though I have to agree that the last two chapters were pretty worthless. Overall, 2.5/5

 

This newest chapter is a turning point. The possibilities now are endless.

 

Yes, it could be a great story, an okay story, fail...
but the chapter was really interesting and is something original.

 

Yeah this is in the recycling bin for a reason.

Its oddly addictive, in a this is horrible and cliche but I can't look away sort of way.

As to the fairy... I'm waiting till Harry makes friends with the queen and gains servants of all the magical creatures.

I'm 99.9999% sure thats whats going to happen

 

It is well written (well I did not cringe at spelling or usage) and It is now moving in a new direction.
Quazijoe pointed out the instant fail direction, But I think the fairy are going to be like the ones Harry Dresden meets and Harry and Co. will be unhappy with the terms of their release...
But I have been wrong before...

 

This was a pretty decent story to read, a guilty pleasure. It was a 4/5 for me. However chapter 11 onwards, it went from a decent story to plain fucking retard. I skimmed read the last chapter, thank god I did that becuase the last chapter was bloody boring. From chapater 11 onwards I give a rating of 1/5.

Im still hoping that this story gets back on tracks, becuase at the moment the last chapters for me were worthless, it was like a pointless history lesson.

 

I'd have to agree with this; too much monologue and too long lectures by the characters. But this was a problem from the start of the story.

 

I don't. Now if only my recent bout of good fortune got this author killed in the most painful way possible.

 

The last 4-5 (9/10-14) chapters of this story have gone to shit. Especially Chapter 14.

 

It's not so much that I dislike this story, as it's that I dislike the writing. I enjoy the premise, the grammar isn't all that bad, and overall it would be enjoyable except for one problem. The author has a habit of introducing new ideas through ridiculously long-winded dialogs between characters. Every fucking chapter ends up being 90% talking about shit that turns out to be almost entirely irrelevant to the central plot of the story, and that bugs the fucking shit out of me. The latest chapter could have been awesome... except nothing happened until the very end, and it was so fucking anti-climactic that it really might as well have been just another block of meaningless dialog. I'm thinking that I'm done with this story. 3/5 for the plot, 4/5 for characters, 1/5 for the aforementioned reasons. Over-all, 2/5.

 

I've removed this one from my alerts list. It's only the second time I've ever done so if that tells you anything. This has gone from a guilty fic to a kill-it-with-fire fic. As such the final rating is 1/5.

 

Well shit. Skip the beaver praises and it was a decent fic. But now with these posts, I don't even know if I want to continue. Thanks for the heads up.

 

Yeah, I was following it until chap 13 as NOTHING happens...there's only so much superintelligent!Harry and Luna that I can take and this has gone way past that mark. Limit it to a fucking paragraph or something instead of pages but anyway, yeah.

Final rating 2/5.

 

I still read this story, even if I have to admit that I may read 'faster' than I normally do...

I'm hoping for the faerie queen to change things and clears the way for a little bit action

 

Well... this fic has a number of original ideas. That's not to say they're good ideas, or that they're interesting or even worth reading. But I've never read anything like this view on Unspeakables, fairies, Dumbledore and Snape.

Probably a good reason for that too.

I'll keep reading since the writing flows well and I have absolutely no idea what's going to happen. The sad thing is I'm fairly confident the author has about as much of a clue of where he's going as I do.

Bonus points for being an original train wreck. Of course that doesn't help the passengers any. Or the train.

 

I quite agree with you about the story being an original train wreck. The sad part is that the story could have been a fantastic one with the novelty it has introduced. As it is, the ideas have not really been explored in depth, nor utilised properly. It feels like just a bunch of original but disjointed ideas thrown together at random and connected haphazardly. The author had a very good twist with the Snape/Dumbledore horcrux idea, but suddenly had to throw it all away for an exploration of the fairy-queen bit, and the magical creatures in the Forbidden forest.