Nice! Dig your story. It actually got me turned on to Sandman.

Anyway, I really like it and ook forward to your next update.

I do wish we could get more Harry POV as this is fanfiction, and i keeps a level of distance from the protagonist. Afterall, we always have Morpheus in Sandman to identify with.

Anyway, 4.3/5

Will be 5/5 with more Harry!

 

That makes me insanely happy. Really, really fan girl happy.
The Sandman needed some fanfiction love, and I tried to provide. I may not be the best writer, but I at least I have the common sense not to screw with Sandman canon.

I was a bit iffy on having most of book 5 done in other p.o.v.s but Harry is always in the story, so I figured I had a bit of wiggle room.
Besides, Morpheus isn't the main character to every story in the series... I don't know how far your into it, so I'll leave it at that.

 

you rang Kensington?
Edit: and this story is epic= 4.5/5

 

Eh, I start reading it the first time around... somehow it didn't keep me entertained long enough...

Then yesterday, I gave it another try and started from the beginning - all of a sudden I felt incredibly sick, or at least sick enough to skip a day at work and read through the entire story without a break O_0 (ok, it does sound a bit exaggerated, so I am inclined to share the secret behind my sudden absence from work). Well I felt incredibly lazy so that is why I actually decided to stay home in the morning but then I did read you story for most of the day and... you do get a 'very good' but not quite 'excellent' marks from me...

Everything was written nicely, and the story telling was well thought out. This must be one of the best fics that follows the cannon events but still makes them so much more readable and enjoyable... actually, almost the best... for the small part of the second task, I thought another author perhaps, had written it - it felt amazingly out of the story and the overall writing so far. But still, that was somehow easily overlooked...

Eagerly awaiting for the next chapter...

 

Oh, dear. You discovered my secret, I kidnapped Jbern, locked him in a closet, and made him write the chapter for ransom.

And while that may be a joke, I did get a PM from some reader who said it was nice that I got him to write the chapter for me. I didn't know whether to be pleased or insulted.
For the record, I did write the chapter; every agonizing word. It only took me one month to write, before I deleted the thing as I realized that there was something shiny that Harry could steal for the task. I'm still amazed no one else thought of it.

 

This is a major fault. First of all, there is no way in hell Destruction would leave just because he found that humans decided to use science. That is a complete bull and you know it. There is a deeper meaning to as why Destruction left.

And besides that, humans aren't the center of the universe. There are infinite amount of dimensions that occupy beings of other nature. And the Endless occupy everything within the span of the universe. Humans are just another tiny dot of a planet in comparison.

 

Right, well here's the problem. When I wrote that introduction to Destruction I only owned the last volume, although I had read the whole series. I was doing based on memory, Wikipedia, and ideas. It was one of the first sections that I wrote, and it was mostly me trying to understand the character. And I will admit, I have still have a difficult time understanding him.

I didn't write that to be misleading, to me that is a part of his character. And while humans are hardly the most important part of universe, nor the first to discover science, the fact is Destruction didn't quit until the 1600s or so. My impression is that he's all about new beginnings, and felt like he needed one himself.

The Sandman has multiple layers, of course there's deeper meaning, but half of my readers haven't read the story. Some of it is going to be lost because I don't want to sound like a pretentious bitch, some because I don't do it justice, and some because I honestly don't know.
Destruction is going to make another appearance in the story, so if you think I'm a moron, you can tell me what I missed in a pm, so I don't screw it up later. There's 2,000 pages of Sandman, I'm not surprised if I missed something.

 

Since many of your readers don't know the series, then make them understand in your story. Put more detail and story into it to make them understand. Since this is the Endless we're talking about, you shouldn't be so shy as to put it all in. They will understand and get more pulled into the story if they understood more of what the Endless are about.

The point i'm trying to make is, you are making it sound like the humans are the sentient being that the endless are more interested in then any other. And the explanation of Destruction leaving his duties because of the humans seems extremely arrogant. Stars, countless worlds within worlds, uncountable dimensions and planes of existences exists, creates and finally falls into destruction.

Since this story involves The Endless, don't be so shy as to put more of what the Endless deal with on a regular basis and there interaction with other beings of power like Lucifer, The Sisters of Fate and various other gods and powers.

 

Interesting update, we now learn that the endless are known about by lots of people. I loved Sirius's section, Draco's ... less so.

...This was really ghay.

 

I know, I know! I'm leaning towards slash there... maybe I should have put up another NO PAIRINGS! disclaimer, like I did for the "soul bond incident of chapter 9." (My early attempt of dry humor that failed like an a giant, flame-y, fail-y thing.)

My counter argument: Draco's not going to talk about it because of its utter gayness, and Harry gets away with threatening him.

 

A tough calls, there. Can't be too careful these days, you might end up attracting a small horde of fangirls, Lulu.

 

Hey lulu42

There is something I was wondering about the latest chapter? Did Harry actually fetch the prophecy or not? In the POV of Sirius, it is said that Harry would meet him "next thursday", and then suddenly its been months. Did I miss something?

 

Harry did steal the prophecy. I didn't really write any reaction on Sirius' part because I'm not sure how it happens yet. I need to get some beta feedback for my ideas to see which one fits the best.

As for fangirls, I'll be amazed if they sniff out the chapter considering how far it is in the story.
On second thought, they ARE fangirls, their power to find slash cannot be underestimated. My reviewers are coherent and write proper sentences, and I wouldn't want them to be ruined.
(shrug)
Oh, well. I could always kill Draco.

 

Killing Draco is always an option.
The latest chapter was great. Keep up the good work.

 

I updated the latest chapter (Three Hallows...) on Patronus Charm since ff.net is being annoying. I'm glad I finally got around to putting it there last month.

Yay!

 

Good update. Your story is one of the few that I'm consistently following right now, checking every day to see if it's updated.

The chapter seemed a bit short compared to your usual length, but I liked the scene with Dumbledore, and I look forward to the next few chapters when he shows Harry more memories of Voldemorts past.

I wonder if DD will find out that Harry knows of the Hallows. That would be interesting.

 

Awesome. Good update. I liked that you included Voldemort. He needs more airtime.

 

I really like the portrayal of Harry. This is one of my favorite fics right now and his intelligence and cunning is fun to watch. This is one of the most creative reinterpretations of fifth year that I've seen. How he dealt with Umbridge, Voldemort and the prophecy was great. His plan to hide the DA in plain site is probably the most intelligent plans I've seen. Usually they're identical to OOTP or amateurish and stupid, your plan actually felt cunning and well thought out.

My only real complaint is how tossed in and trivial the Assassins subplot feels. Right now it seems to only be a minor plot point used to justify Harry being a cold bastard occasionally. I know that you've foreshadowed further involvement by them but it still comes off as a trivial part of Harry's past. I hope it is addressed sooner rather then later.

This story is far superior to the Breath of Life by Shujin1. While it isn't a Sandman crossover like Path of Decidsion, it uses a very similar concept of the Gods. This story has ruined me for that other one and it has become boring.

I look forward to the continuance of this story.

 

I read the first story by Shujin (Death's Incarnate) and I liked it, but I couldn't keep all of those damn Personifications straight. It made me reread The Sandman though, and then I started writing this.

Yeah, its was poorly delivered because it's my first story and I wasn't sure what I was doing at first. I had to explain why a eleven year old Harry would kill Quirrell, so I introduced it early, even though it really meant nothing until book five.

The idea behind it (in my opinion) is pretty awesome. You'll find out exactly four chapters from now.

 

That's pretty reasonable. Now I'm going to look forward to it. It's really a minor complaint. Nothing big.