I've been kicking this idea around for a couple of hours, I'm not sure if anybody would even be interested in reading a story like this. If its not worth wasting time on, from what I can see people here will tell me right off and I can work on something else

Please, ignore any errors in grammar, punctuation, spelling and the like for now - this isn't a story or any indication of what the final story will "read" like, just a very very basic outline to get started with.

Post-HBP Harry travels back in time (Still trying to figure out how to get him back in time without copying somebody) right about the time of the Department of Mysteries disaster. Hides @ Grimmauld place, follows Sirius to the DoM without him noticing. Rescues Sirius in DOM by preventing fall through veil.(He's under invisi cloak). Falls into veil himself – prophecy prevents him from dying (remember, by the hand of the other), but splits his soul from his body (Like Voldy when he tried to AK harry, banks on the idea that he can only die if Voldemort directly kills him)

Future-Harry's soul gets sucked into the room that is full of the “power” that harry has but Voldemort does not. (the one Dumbledore talks about that harry has in spades during OotP), gains knowledge of some sort in there (no difference in magical "power", just the size of the channel that connects them to the magic and the ability to channel it? Some can access it easier, hence "more powerful". I'll figure it out when i get to that point). Section at the fountain where Harry is possessed by Voldemort he is repulsed by harry's future spirit merging with him and helping fight him off.

Voldy's mind link to Harry is broken when HBP-Harry merges with OotP-Harry, Harry keeps future harry's magical connection in addition to his own, larger channel for power (HP + HP ~ = Voldemort's magical strength, balancing out the ~50-60 years voldy has been “exercising” his connection and making it stronger with dark rituals and the like.

Continues from this point as an AU that still maintains some parity with canon, but a more powerful, more daring (he knows he can't be killed except by Moldy) Harry with a better understanding of magic, Sirius is alive, foreknowledge of the Horcrux's that have already been found. Other stuff im forgetting - im going to grab my copy of OotP and HBP and re-read through them to get everything straight.

If you guys hate the idea, feel free to let me know - I just thought it might be an interesting take on the time traveling Harry story that I don't think I have read before.

 

It's good: I like the idea of a post-HBP Harry going back in time. For a change he isn't already uber-powerful so he can't just end Voldemort when he likes, but an extra year or so of magical education is definatly a bonus. I hope that as you go through your new version of HBP that he will try a bit harder to not be a pussy.

It also seems realistic that if a post-HBP Harry got chucked back in time he would rush into action and not think of the consequences, so that part is good too.

I say write it, but make sure that it isn't a HBP clone.

 

Well, you have a lot of stuff going on there, but the ending is still the same old DOM twist - Harry becomes stronger + Sirius is alive. Honestly, you could have done the same thing in many different, usually easier ways... and without killing off one copy of Harry in such a lame fashion (he tripped into the veil!?).

 

I think it's a good idea, it's a far more original way of giving Harry more power without making it so that Harry gets all of Voldemort's knowledge, etc etc.

I'd like to read this, so please let us know if you decide to write it.

 

It could be good. I'd give it a shot if you wrote it.

 

That's a lot happening in quite a short amount of time. The possession occurs half an hour after Sirius' death, or close... Bellatrix runs, Harry follows; Bellatrix and Harry 'duel'; Voldemort shows up, then it's Dumbledore's turn; the two of them duel... I'd say, thirty to fourty minutes, no more. When I read it, it felt as if everything was happening very quickly.

During those 30-40 minutes, you have Harry fall through the veil, have his soul ripped from his body and, somehow, sent to the locked room of the DoM. Then Harry gains "knowledge of some sort" before finding himself back into his fifteen-year-old body.

The way I see it, Harry gaining a knowledge vast enough to make the story really interesting is a very important part in the plotline; so you might want to emphasize it. If I get the feeling that Harry's only spending half an hour in a room and comes out as powerful as Voldemort himself, I might think that you're getting rid of a loop hole ("how can I give Harry more power?"). It can be done, though, but if I were you I would try to make Harry feel as if it was lasting much, much longer than half an hour.

So basically, I wrote all this long and boring post to come to the following conclusion: make sure you give the "Harry-in-locked-room" scene all the importance it needs.

Otherwise, it sounds like a very good idea to me!

 

You could also start at the merger and explain what happened over the length of the story. Harry's memories might get repressed or something.

 

I'd read it so long as the spelling and grammar isn't too horrid. It's not a plot I would ever write, but it could be an interesting read.

 

It sounds a good idea, and I think you should run with it, I just have one problem. It's a problem with the whole TimeTravel!Harry concept - in PoA Harry sees his future self across the lake and then knows what to do because he has seen himself... Surely this shows that (in the HP world anyway) For someone to go back in time, they must have also gone back in time originally, sort of like the fact we say that humans will never travel in time, because there are no time travellers here. And then there is the issue of paradoxes in general.

However, your story does sound like a fun one, and its magic anyway isn't it?

 

Harry could knock out Sirius before he goes to the DoM and polyjuice himself to look like Sirius. That way you get a still alive Sirius and he can duel Bellatrix properly. Then you've got rid of the paradox and you can have Harry show off his skills in a battle, other than running away.

 

I never said I wasn't going to come up with an original way to get him back in time - I just hadn't figured one out yet. I think I might have found something, Im working on the first chapter right now, though he wont go back in time for 2-3 chapters, gonna attempt to make these "rowling-esque" chapter style/length.

I know a lot of people on this board don't like gin-slut, would it be too much of a shame for her to get written out of the story early?

I wish more time was available to write, but I have so much homework. Never again will I take 3 classes with essays/research papers and critical book reviews simultaneously, its rough.

Should I start posting the story in here, or create a new thread for the first chapter in the review section? I'm about halfway done with chapter one, I like the direction its heading so far, but good lord how do people hit 5-10k word chapters - I guess I'm not quite that wordy.

 

Teaser - First portion of chapter one. No title as of yet. Suggestions? and yes, I know this doesn't directly correlate to the plot outline up top yet, I have quite a bit of filler and plot organization before I get there. I also apologize for the formatting - It doesn't stay the way I want it to appear when I save it here.
*added more spaces for legibility*

Without a doubt it was a magnificent specimen of a home, a giant manor ostentatious enough to impress the neighbors with a display of old wealth, a common display for families with an ancient pedigree. The grounds were sprawling, with a large maze of hedges interspersed with many strange looking plants. Very strange looking plants indeed, for you see, the family that owned this home would not be what most would describe as normal. What is normal you might ask? That would depend on who you were speaking with. If you asked the neighbors, they would tell you tales of beloved family pets going missing, horrible noises coming from the maze, and of owls coming and going at the oddest times during the day.

The immense fat old lady that lived here, who was hideously rich and possessed a terrible fashion sense, would say she was completely normal. For a witch at least. Yes, indeed, a witch that could trace her roots back to one of the greatest in the history of the wizarding world. This witch, Hepzibah Smith, the matron of the Smith family, a distant descendant of Helga Hufflepuff, was about to have one bugger of a day. An utter disaster of a day, if one must know, that in the distant future would serve to give an extremely lucky wizard another chance to fix things, though he might not be thankful for it.

Unfortunately for Hepzibah, the stage was set, a conversation two days ago set wheels in motion. The utter train wreck that would end her life was on its way. A handsome tall dark haired young man with dark eyes, wearing a robe black as the night appeared with a light crack of sound near the hedge maze. Bending down, he pulled a pair of common garter snakes out of his robe pocket and set them gently on the ground. The two snakes coiled up, appearing to look at the man's face.

A trait inherited from another of the powerful old family's, the Gaunts, last descendants of Salazar Slytherin allowed him to communicate with his snakes. A staccato of hisses emanated from his throat, a lost language known as parseltongue, which allowed those so gifted to speak with snakes..

“One of you, go, scout the maze and find near the center a nesting place that is well defended, then return to me. Make sure it is well hidden, and memorize the surroundings. Report to me inside. Go!”

One of the snakes rapidly uncoiled and moved off into the hedge maze. Glancing at the other snake, the young man hissed again.

“You, go to the manor, I must know where the old witch and her house-elf are. Once you locate them, scout the rest of the house for any others, then return here immediately.”

Reaching into his robe pocket he pulled out his wand, a 13 ½ inch slender cut of yew with a phoenix feather core, and tapped the snake on the head. Shimmering, the snake seemed to disappear, blending in with the surroundings.

“Go, quickly, make sure you are not stepped on!” he commanded.

“Such a useful tool, that disillusionment charm, foolish thing would be spotted in a moment without it” he muttered under his breath.

Digging in a robe pocket, he quickly located three of the items he was carrying. One of these, a small vial filled about halfway, contained dried and ground aconite, which would he thought would be extremely useful. Another vial, partially filled with veritaserum, a colorless odorless potion that resembled water but forced the drinker to tell the truth, was perhaps the most important part of his trip here – three drops and Hepzibah would tell him anything he wanted to know.

The last item, was in all actuality, the most difficult for him to acquire, and probably the most dangerous. It was a good thing Borgin and Burke, the owners of the specialty magic item shop he worked for, were very susceptible to mind altering spells such as the Imperius or a simple obliviate. Otherwise the young man would have been out of a job sooner than he was prepared for. A dazzling crystal hourglass with a golden chain, delicate and fragile, but almost frighteningly powerful, lay in his palm. It was a time turner, larger than the ministry standard size, the bottom half filled with a shimmering sand.

Glancing around at the mansions surrounding the Smith manor, he grew angry, the resemblance to the country manor his father had retreated to after learning his mother was a witch was uncanny. He calmed himself, remembering the pleasure and power he felt as he enacted his revenge. His father was nothing more than stepping stone on the way to his own greatest desire- Immortality.

“Filthy muggles” he muttered “Soon all of them shall be dealt with.”

 

Not that I have any idea how this scene will be built into the story, it's very well done and I'm looking forward for you to start posting the first chapter.

 

It sounds good so far.

Concerning the missing time (only half an hour to get the knowledge in the mysterious room).
There was a story of Star Trek TNG where people were not able to access their bodies. With no stimulation of their senses the time seemed to be much longer than it really was. I could imagine that this is true to a certain degree...

 

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