Title: Potter's Bones
Author: Mionefan
Rating: M for some Mature and Adult NC17 content, though only in splotches...
Genre: Romance/Drama
DLP Genre: General, though I guess I could see argument for it in either Independent or Restricted,
Pairing: Harry/Susan, and H/Susan with H/Hermione
Summary: Harry is depressed after the disaster in the Department of Mysteries and decides to remove himself from his friends to protect them. What happens when a pretty Hufflepuff finds him? What about his female best friend?

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4455612/1/Potters_Bones

It isn't the best fic but it isn't the worst. There is plenty of ManipDumbles in the idea but I personally think that they take things way to easily. Some characterization I think is faulty.

I might have left it alone but there is NOTHING NEW in the 'Review' thread so I thought I would add it.

I will give the fic (WIP) a 4/5 because the story has my attention and the review rate is actually pretty sound. However, as a fic i only deserves a 3 because of the mass of cliche...

Try it if you are bored. I know I am.

 

Terrible. More plot holes than actual plot, and cliches out the ass. 1/5

 

Wtf is a review rate?

I read the first ten chapters of this story before giving it up. I found the pacing and characterization to be off and the writing only adequate.

2/5 for me.

 

This -

- almost immediately put me off reading it, but new tolerant DLP manifesto dictates otherwise, so I read it.

The most appropriate way to describe the fic came up in the third sentence:

After reading that, I did a text search for 'Sirius': showed up three times, followed by "is dead" and "will" (as in Lord Black's will). "Wealthiest wizard evar" nonsense soon followed.

Won't rate, since I didn't actually read past the first chapter. If anyone does, and finds something redeeming, let us know.

 

Got to the fourteenth chapter. No redeeming qualities. 1/5

 

You've got balls of steel... I stopped after the 1st chapter... 1/5

 

Sirius leaves Harry 4 gazillion galleons, moron Lucius Malfoy, incompetent death eaters (this is probably my pet hatred), magical trunks (and associated shopping in Diagon Alley), helpful goblins, a couple of twue wuvs in a fortnight - need I say more?

I will be generous - the author has decent grammar and expression. So - 2.5/5

 

Well, I'm sorry no one likes it, but maybe I could take it because of the pairing-H/Susan and H/Susan with H/Hermione is just not something you see everyday.

The 'review rate' is the rate of reviews. If that was too sarcastic I'm sorry. I am in a bad mood. I mean that there isn't ten years between updates.

 

Why should the rate of reviews be any sort of factor on how high you rate a story? High review rate =/= good story. Low review rate=/= bad story. Best example? My Immortal by xxxcutzherwristzxxx or whatever.

As for the story- I read two chapters. Conclusions: terrible grammar, terrible plot, terrible characterizations. Overall? 1/5, because it has no "redeeming factors." While usually I wouldn't rate a story if I hadn't read it all, I will this time, just because the author's name (Mionewtf) makes me vaguely nauseous.

 

I think you mean update rate.

 

I thought the same thing.. actually I think I even read it as update rate.. then everyone was like "rate of reviews" and I was like, huh..?

Well anyway I got to like chapter 3... it was pretty boring. I dunno, guess I'm not at the stage where this is appealing yet (truly I don't know if such a state exists).

 

Plot holes you could drive Darius's ego through, shitty grammar, shitty writing style, shitty...hell, you get the point. This just blows donkey nuts. 1/5

 

My Susan Bones beats your Susan Bones hands down.​

I stopped here. Nevermind that Harry and Susan (Sue!) were at an airport, after having ridden an airplane, but having a security guard at said airport just throw out this little mishap out of nowhere... terrible.​

That, and the fact that the writing construction looked like it had been lifted from 'See Spot Run'.​

 

Don't be hatin'.

Anyway, the story's not even really mildly interesting. To be honest, the opening just kills it before it can even get going. It's so cliche it just turned me off completely. I'll give it 2/5 for H/S, but that's about it.

 

I don't even know who you are.

Will read the story though...as long as there's smut.

EDIT: Oh what the fuck

 

This starts out as your average Indy!Harry fic. Gringots, Incompetent!Dumbledore, boring Guilt Trips, a bland will reading, super trunks and shopping trips, convenient 'coincidental' character meetings, rushed romance, one-sided battles, bad Hope rip-off in ch 7, unbelievable amount of money in Harry's vault, etc, etc. Basically just another guilty pleasure fic that only holds my attention when I'm exceptionally bored.

What really burned the corpse of this story was the H/multi angle. It was weak, rushed, unrealistic, and came out of left field. Want to include Hermione in a relationship with Harry and another woman? Pay close attention to this fic, you can learn a lot from its mistakes.

1/5

 

I got through three chapters. It was atrocious. Filled with cliche upon cliche and poorly written cliches at that. The grammar, spelling, and formatting were at best okay but might be better described as sloppy. The plot of the story is almost non-existent other than throwing poorly written cliches together. The characterization was worse than the drivel that J.K. Rowling wrote. Overall this fic has no redeeming qualities and doesn't even deserve the rubbish bin.

1/5 since I can't vote 0.

 

Usually I will give a story a try before commenting, but this story has that bad reviews and is that badly cliche sounding that I really cant even bother to click the link.

How long do things stay in the review section before the mods get sick of the bad reviews and get rid of it.

 

Stories stay in the Review section until they're not there anymore.