Title: Prison of the Mind
Author: The Modern Prometheus
Rating: Doesn't say, but let's just say 'Mature' just to be safe.
DLP Category: Hmm... Azkaban or Timetravel Harry. Pick one...
Genre: Adventure/Humor
Words so far: 5317
Pairings: NA
Status: WIP (two chapters)
Summary: Not your average Harry goes to prison story. After the final battle Harry is thrown in prison and forgotten by society but he hasn't given up yet and neither has Voldemort! Mild language
html: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3980932/1/

It is true that it may be too soon to truly post this here but it was just added it a certain C2 at ff.net and I wanted to keep this in mind.

So far, it includes Azkaban Harry, time travel, and a twisted HP/LV that isn't really a pairing. As it isn't fully the angst ridden hero we're used to, don't worry about the 'wo is me' crap. Or atleast not yet; it isn't finished or anything. Apparently, with the "end of the war" the wizarding world is content to throw Harry Potter into the hated prison of Azkaban with the dark lord not defeated but stuck within his mind... kinda like a twisted MPD thingie...

There is some humor, some abstract bashing, some cliche ideas though twisted, and the normal oddball breakout from Azkaban. Oh yeah, did I forget to mention that Padfoot doesn't really understand who Harry is upon seeing him for the first time?

 

Spoiler

Harry eats seagulls.

Spoiler

Sirius is apparently protective of his cell.

I have one reason to give a 5/5, I hope I get more!

Edit: Make that two so far.

 

If Harry doesn't have sex with with his female self, I'm going to be disappointed.

 

You're not the only one.

 

I'm not too far in, but most glaring downfall is the juvenile writing style. Pretty irritating for me to read. The Voldemort in his head dynamic ended by the first chapter, which is a pity.

 

Good so far, but only 2 chapters in almost 5 months?

 

That was interesting. Voldemort gave me strong Lash flashbacks but everything else seems fine.

 

Considering that Sirius has not escaped yet on his own I'm guessing she would be around 13 years old.

All I can say to that is that I'll be disappointed too if that doesn't happen.

 

wow I'm only done the first chapter and for the first bit I thought he was jerking off....the writer should change pushups to pullups or tugups
anyway so far it's not bad..and I to will be disappointed if harry doesn't
get to screw his girl self.

 

Fucking wow. Two short chapters and it's already better than 90% of the azkaban fics and alternate dimension fics. It's actually been reasonably clever and original.

That said, I have very low hopes for this turning into something good. It's more like a crack-fic that just happened to appeal to me in all the right spots.

When the first chapter ends with:
A/N: Well this is intended to be a one shot but if I get some positive reviews…or some reviews period…I might be inclined to continue it.

And the next doesn't come until five months later with this:
AN: Back by popular demand! I can’t tell you how uplifting it is to see a mail box full of review alerts. I was going to just let this one sit as is but you’ve changed my mind and this plot bunny decided to breed! Hope you enjoy chapter two!

So just be aware going into this that the author is just making up shit as he goes, and for all you know, we've just read the final chapter he'll manage to post.

Some people write for attention and reviews. Some people write stories. Some do both. Nevertheless, this start is great fun even in the barely enough to judge 2 chapters/5,000 words.

 

Yeah that was the point lol...I hope we don't have to wait five months for an update but nonjon's probably got it right.

 

Perhaps he posted it somewhere else?

Anyway, I like it. Sure it got some cliches, but they work well here.

 

It was an excellent start. Interesting, if too short. The concept is different,(to me, anyways) and there weren't enough errors to ruin my enjoyment of the fic. A tentative 4/5 for now.

 

Wtf is with your sig? Some pedo-site?

 

Why don't I remember posting WTF should be the question.

 

Huh, I actually enjoyed this. Color me surpised. 4/5.

 

Fiction Rated: T

It was clearly stated.

As for the fic.....

/me goes to read it.

 

LOL WUT?

This was the most hilarious azkaban fic ever, and so better than 99.99999999% of all the other azkaban crap out there. Seriously the whole idea of HP in azkaban is so OC: they wouldn't put HP the boy-who-lived in a fucking prison cell. That would cause a goddam riot. I just can't accept it. Sure they might defame his name some, and maybe try to expell him from Hogwarts (book 5) but that's IT. No more. There are limits. He's still the hero of the wizarding world and people wouldn't accept him placed in Azkaban.

This story actually makes sense b/c Voldemort is trapped inside HP, and fear is stronger than hero worship any day.

Good reason + lulz + intriguing plot = WIN

5/5

 

Harry in Azkaban stories are rarely good. Time travel Harry stories are never good.

Voldemort is an absolutely evil magical Hitler analogue who killed Harry's parents and caused him all of the suffering he's ever experienced. Harry is the annoyingly righteous martyr-boy who reduced Voldemort's half-century of work and sacrifice to naught. They're mortal enemies, not the Odd Couple. Filling every line of dialogue between them with juvenile banter is ridiculous and makes the work suffer as a whole. The author is too stupid to recognize this, too self-absorbed to care, or too untalented to write convincing H/LV dialogue.

Also Harry is an animangus.

If only I could rate this story Zero.