This became very clear in the most recent chapter, and was very believable. It was my favorite part of the chapter, too. I was getting a bit bored with genius!Harry Can't wait for some action...

 

Awesome story! Keep it up.

I did not expect much when I started reading this. I thought it would be full of politics, and things that hold no interest to me. Well, I am wrong. Not only is this story the BEST smart/super Harry fic I have ever seen, but I just love how it is written. Keep it up, it definately has a place in my top tens.


I felt that computer bit was wierd though... Magical computers, what next magical toasters and spaceships. But aside from that, and Severus being a mentor/friend to Harry, this is a great fic.

 

Actually, I think this by far the BEST technomancy story I've read. The others are absolute rubbish. While this one is slightly unrealistic with the whole age to genius ratio, it still does a better job than others.

The ones I really don't like is when he decides he's had enough, and proceeds to really apply himself. Where the hell did this potential come from?

Anyway, I hope it moves along, with more action. After all, brilliant invention start to get boring after about 50,000 words.

 

Its alright. Never did get the technomagic shit, but hey.

 

I liked this fic when it first started out, smart!Harry was definetly appreciated adn well written. As this fic progressed the quality of the writting didn't go down but this fic started to get boring honestly. There seems to be a lack of conflict as there dosn't seem to be anything that the Harry can't find that answer to. No matter how smart it is he's still 11 and dosn't have any real life experiance and this dosn't seem to be reflected in the fic.

Technomancy can be well done but honestly I don't really like the way that its developed in this fic. Harry constructed a computer in a matter of months by himself, while it took some of the best minds of the muggle world years to develope the original technology.

Another thing that bugs me in this story is Sirius and Remus getting comming into play so soon, I don't see the point of them coming into play so early into the story. Also Harry accepts them very readily, the kid really hasn't had any human contact until he was 11 so I was expecting him to have more difficulty accepting two people into his life that he has never met before.

Harry and Hermione seem well written, the two book worm personalities seem to match up nicely. If that author dose it well it could turn into a nice romance in a few years.

Overall I enjoyed reading this fic but it smells like one of the dime a dozen Harry/Ginslut fics DLP loves just that Hermione replaces Ginny and Intelligence takes the place of the magical inheritance.

 

I must say that when I first started reading this fic I liked it.
Then I came to the sorting scene, and the independent study turned me off quite a bit--but after a while I was able to cope with it and continue reading it.
The only main qualms I have are the Magical Woman and the Sorting. THe politics are actually an added bonus to me, since I too am a hardcore libertarian.

 

I agree completely. Stories without an enemy to fight are boring. Of course there's Voldemort, but he seems unimportant.

 

Nice plot, but the author is a incredibly naïvè. I think he should rewrite the story... after he grows up.

 

An Answer

I wanted to post some replies and a few explanations to this board, as the author to this story.

I'm coming back from about a six month break from writing, and have picked this story back up. I realize that the last few chapters have gotten bogged down with unnecessary details, and that will be corrected in the next chapter.

I've been speaking about the future of this fic with a few other authors out there, and we are all quite excited about where this fic is headed. There are several ideas I've not seen in any fanfic anywhere, so if you stick with it, I promise you'll something you've never seen before.

To those worried about this fic diving into the depths of horrible "Harry/Ginslut", I could very easily ease your worries on this, but I don't know the policy here on giving out spoilers. I will say that the original outline called for Hermione's death, though that has been altered a bit. So all I can really say is 'don't worry about it.'

To the person who commented that I needed to 'grow up,' I'm not really sure what to say, other than check your goddamn premises.

Finally, if you are religious in any way, you should probably cease reading this story. At least if you cannot stomach religious cricticism and mockery, quit now - don't read the next chapter.

Or go ahead, it doesn't matter to me.

Have fun. See you around!

 

It is nice to see a Author defend their story.

Personal I never could get into this story just because I have never liked the idea of tech magic. I guess some people like that kind of thing but I have feel that whole point of magic is to not use technology that much. Some can do it well, but when it is a main point of the story I just can’t stomach it.

 

I enjoyed this story a lot, especially your ideas for technomancy. I did, however, find it a bit strange how easily Harry managed to create things like the M-Machine with such ease. I understand he struggled quite a bit with it, but like Brooklynight said, it seemed just a little too simple for him to do what Muggles had struggled for years to do.

 

It's okay

Really, the story itself has some great ideas. The presentation just seems somewhat rushed, and Harry seems to be a little too friendly for a person who pretty much grew up on their own. Then again, it may the naive nature of youth that makes him so open to other people (I can't do the accents on my keyboard, never learned how).

That said, the story presented excellent ideas that I would love to see used in a longer story. I always found Technomancy to be interesting, like a new frontier of magic that can be used to expand the wizarding world's concept of magic. But technomancy as in magical computers, not uber spell guns that can fire a hundered AK's a second through some alien crystal found at the site of a meteor crash. Or a sword made of invincible material that Harry gets but never uses and only carries around for image.

Overall, a 3.5/5

 

The technomancy and genius aspects never mattered much to me when reading this. The thing I like most is Harry's total absentminded approach to everything and how he just detatches himself from the common reality when working on his projects. That is a rare mindset to find Harry in for stories.

 

I've edited this a couple times now, changing what I've said. Basically, I'm going to rewrite this fic and get rid of all the shit in it. I've had to go back and reread since I took a long long break and damn, was there alot of shit. It was painful to read. I can't live with that, so I'm going to go back and do it right.

Basically, no hermione, no hedwig, cut down on the filler, rework magical theories, redo Lady of Magic idea to fill out my current ideas (they've never been done in fanfic that I know of, even though it might seem like it on the surface), and the like.

Sorry for the number of edits here.


I would greatly appreciatte it if someone from DLP would want to Beta the rewrite, and act as a sounding board for some of the ideas I have. iF you're interested, please mail me: josh.charles@gmail.com

 

I enjoy this story and I am glad to see that instead of giving up when you don't enjoy your own story, you change it so that you do. The intelligence is understandable if Harry is a certifiable prodigy and I found some of the theories you created for magic plausible and realistic, without completely keeping you from expanding on them. I do think it slowed somewhat upon reaching Hogwarts though and hope that is some of the filler you plan to edit out.

 

Thanks. I'm going to go back and really clean it up. I've alread got the first chapter almost halfway redone. It's going to clear up a lot of problems. There were issues with whether or not Dumbledore knew the Potters had switched Secret Keepers, and how the Fidelius got back into place. And the problem of Fudge being Minister. Harry was too accepting of his new situation, and this time it will be more difficult for him. The first time around it was too easy, and that made sense to me at the time.

This time, it needs to be better, and while I know it's a lot of work ahead of me, it'll be worth it to have a story I can be proud of. I'm not really proud of it in it's current form. I'm proud of it's ideas, but the implementation is emberessing to say the least, especially because I know I can do better.

The story really fell apart at Hogwarts; I can see that now. I think I've learned from those mistake, though, and can avoid them this time around.

So if you don't like this story now, please give it a second chance when I begin reposting the new version. I can see how some of the criticism was right on, and I hope this next version will be leaps and bounds better.

 

Not a bad story, a few sticking points where it quirked me but not many. Didn't care for the age of when Harry built his computer. I can admit that i had a computer when i was that age, and i was lucky if i figured out how to get to the games. Other than that, i look forward to the rewrite.

 

Since I get the change to provide dynamic feedback for a re-write, I ask you this--scrap the independent study thing. It was awkward, and almost threw me off of wanting to read the story. And, if I may speak frankly, the conversation with "Miss Hat" was kinda silly. I really enjoyed the rest of the story though, and I hope all goes well with the rewrite and that it comes out even better!

 

The story so far has been quite good. The bit with the hat was a little akward but the independent study I can understand. Excellent work with Harry's ... aptitude ... for dueling.

 

The first chapter of the rewrite was posted yesterday:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3349611/1/

Some important differences that you might find so far, if you remember the beginning of the original is that there is no Prometheus, the Lady of Magic did not make an appearance, the Fidelius still being up is explained.

If you look at the summary, you'll see it now says "No Pairings" so those of you who didn't like the story becuase of the HHr might be pleased by that. Hermione will not be in this story long, and won't even make it through her first year at Hogwarts. Not that she dies. What should have happened after Hermione faced a troll and other dangers will happen. That said, she will make an appearance in the sequel to this story.

Harry will not be 'sorted' as an independent study, so that might please some of you.

I'm very pleased with how the rewrite is progressing. I'm toning down most everything to make it more credible, and not trying to rush through things. Toning down might be the wrong phrase, because I have many very unique things planned for this story. So don't equate that with 'not exciting.'